I dug this alot man this realy pulls the punches!!!!!! ya gots it goin on realy good I mean that in the best of intentions!!!!

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EB... wait, it pulls the punches? isn't that a bad thing? :P mahalos for listening, man!

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I can't believe you got those tones out of a Squer! I have a Squier Strat but rarely play it now that I have my Carvin. This is an outstanding song, highly creative. All of the transitions are particularly exciting. All of the instruments sound good. Even your shitty keyboard sounds cool - like a fucked up mellotron or something. You have a good voice that fits the song well, but you frequently sound unsure of what note you're going to hit next. I think you just need to sing the song a few times until you can sing it without thinking about it and just throw your emotion into it. I'm not sure of your lyrics. I give you serious props for writing original and creative lyrics, but there is a definite cheese factor. Sometimes the cheesiness makes it cool, but other times it's just cheesy like the first three lines of the last verse (although I really like the last two lines). Overall this is a damn good song. You just need to develop some confidence in your voice and find some way to harness your creative lyricism to make it a little more focused.

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for listening and mahalos for the feedback!

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great song. love the way everything sounds. i would like to hear the vocals up just a hair in the verses (although i ike the slap-back lennon-ish echo on them). great instrumentation too. you guy sare getting better and better.mahalos (or as we would say in Echo Park: "orale homes" )

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