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Rock (1083), alternative (225), rock (1083), acoustic rock (24), pop (449)
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Description:
A rock ballad in 6/8. Hope you enjoy.
Vocals-Skylar Grossman
Music and lyrics- Bijan Olia
Lyrics:
I try to be honest that our time is corrupt
And the highs and the lows now begin to disrupt
And I know that your trying your best not to say
That our times are shifting and moving away
Why did you leave me for someone you don’t trust
Even though I know that our times in the dust
You can take me, break me and run away from yourself
And its hard to say that your are one of a kind
You walk through the doors and begin to cry
And all I can do now is give a sigh
You want to make up for the wasted time
Even though you know that you committed a crime
Why did you leave me for someone you don’t trust
Even though I know that our times are in the dust
You can take me, break me and run away from yourself
And its hard to say that your are a one of a kind
It is hard on a cloudy day to brighten up my day
And I try to cope with a loss with obvious dismay
Why did you leave me for someone you don’t trust
Even though I know that our times in the dust
You can take me, break me and run away from yourself
And its hard to say that your are one of a kind
Why did you leave me for someone you don’t trust
Even though I know that our times in the dust
You can take me, break me and run away from yourself
And its hard to say that your are one of a kind
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Nice one! &mdash 06/26/07 - 01:44:31 PM
I like your choice of instruments.I like the vox performance but I'd try pullin' some of the "mid" eq down on the lead vox to get rid of the "sharpness" and add a little delay for depth. Other than than my 2 cents, Very well put together. You play very well. Nice Job!
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Good song .. &mdash 06/26/07 - 01:46:07 PM
really good singing/voice, good lyrics too .. nice structure .. particularily nice chorus.
What lets it down in my opinion is: firstly I'd lose
those drums .. I'd try using a double-bass sound for
the bass .. and ask for a real clarinet or sax player
to lend a hand. Do you use GB? (you don't say) ..
some AU Multiband Compression on the vocals or EQing
better might tweak them just a bit richer sounding ..
I also find you can do nice things to make the piano
richer with some duplicating and then adding some
filters to some of the duplicates.
Overall could be a kinda "Tindersticks" with higher
voice kinda tune. [ Reply to This ]
Beautiful &mdash 06/26/07 - 01:49:02 PM
Beautiful song/lyrics/vocals - I especially like the harmonies. Vocal sound is a little bit 's'y, But I wouldn't know how to get rid of it. Excellent - thanks for sharing.
Cheers
Len
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nice &mdash 06/26/07 - 04:20:04 PM
Nice &mdash 06/26/07 - 08:24:41 PM
Almost sounds like an accordian in the background. I like the 6/8 timing
very well Done ! [ Reply to This ]
smooth &mdash 06/26/07 - 09:01:18 PM
a nice neat production here.
i like the vocal harmonies.
i second pickquick - just a little bit of delay or room ambience would be nice.
thanks! [ Reply to This ]
Very original:D) &mdash 06/26/07 - 10:20:00 PM
I love that instrument...(a brass?) anyway, it really adds with the piano and beat.....your cool song! [ Reply to This ]
fab harmonies.... &mdash 06/27/07 - 08:46:18 AM
...on this song!
Nice...
Ditto to apb's comments, and I'd REALLY love to hear this with a real sax accompanying you. There are a few here who might collab :)
Looking forward to hearing more from you!
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ok &mdash 06/27/07 - 08:55:10 AM
It's alright, not a fan of the midi though! The songs pretty good though a bit repetitive in the verse
Nice work but could be developed more [ Reply to This ]
Mixed a little high &mdash 06/27/07 - 04:41:19 PM
Good song, but the mix needs a little work. Vocals are pretty up front :) [ Reply to This ]
sweet &mdash 06/27/07 - 10:02:43 PM
Love it great lyrics nice music.. good mix (I love to here more bass kick on those drums) [ Reply to This ]
Great Piece! &mdash 06/27/07 - 10:04:31 PM
Great job man!!! I know that you are into Hip Hop beats man, this is refreshing! Shows your creative side, great job! Love it! [ Reply to This ]
Nice song &mdash 06/28/07 - 06:24:30 AM
Like the 6/8 beat. Straight up ballad and very nice lyrics.
Good job, really enjoyed.
Strong singing, too. [ Reply to This ]
9-9-9-9 &mdash 06/28/07 - 02:42:50 PM
Very nice style .. the 6/8 timing is really fit with the very nice lyrics ..
The voice ... i liked it ..
very nice playing .. also nice to hear iit in the midnight ..
i enjoyed it a lot
Thanks for posting
Regardz
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Yeman Auf Al-Rawi [ Reply to This ]
Thanks for the comments &mdash 06/28/07 - 08:56:26 PM
Thanks for the comments, I hope to improve my work in the future. Keep a look out I hope to add a new song in the coming days. [ Reply to This ]
why &mdash 06/29/07 - 10:26:18 AM
does this remind me of that Dionne Warwick song "That's what friends are for"??....hmmmmmmm..... [ Reply to This ]
nice &mdash 06/29/07 - 01:23:28 PM
oh i like the vocals. great song. i thought the mix was fine, but then i often listen past a mix for the core emotion of a song, which is what a song really is. [ Reply to This ]
nice work &mdash 07/03/07 - 11:32:20 PM
The structure is great. Nice song. I agree that you might use a "de-esser" on the main vocal, way too much sibilance on the "s"-es. Otherwise very nice. [ Reply to This ]
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