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Description:
A light number.
Lyrics:
i cannot look into your eyes
because the light that does reflect
is as divine as the sun in the sky
don't tell me to kiss it goodbye,
because all i'll hear is "i love you and you'll always be mine"
because you're never in my bed when i want you to be
only a damp stain of tears that you've wrought from me
and if i could only convince you to occupy this vacancy
you might turn to me and you, you will need me
but regardless of what you say
tomorrow's a different day,
and the next just another way to appeal to you
regardless of what you say
tomorrow's a different day
and the next, another to try and convince you
i haven't a care about the risk that i run
because on the moment that you might glance at me
there's a hopeful match lit, steadily burning
to you my words may seem trite
but you've renewed the cliches inside of me
so that i can tell you where i'd like you to be
because you're never in my bed although i know you need me
but instead an empty pillow and cool crisp sheets
and if i could only convince you to occupy this vacancy
you might turn to me and you, you might need me
but regardless of what you say
tomorrow's another day
and there comes a time you lose this partner in these games you play
regardless of what you say
i'll go on in my own way
with or without your love, and the choice is up to you
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Pining &mdash 08/29/07 - 07:56:38 AM
Really nice authentic intimate delivery. Consider placing the mic closer to your instrument, and singing closer as well, since you are capturing a little of the room ambience. Also, if you "excite" the sound with more high and low EQing (it is too mid right now), it would help bring out the intimacy. The lyrics rationalize themselves with the nice line "you've renewed the cliches inside me" but there needs to be a line somewhere that transcends (at least in my ears) the since of pity I feel toward the subject of the song, a guy who is pining vainly for a love that's not going to work out and stuck in the surface world of cliches. If this were arranged as a pop song, the lyrics would work; but as an acoustic solo piece, I want another level. [ Reply to This ]
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