So, where are you going with this? I like it! I guess you are in your own little world today Doug (};-P) I dig the chord progression and the "out there" vibe it conveys, at least it does to me anyway! Solid production and a firm bed. A lot of possibilities here my friend.

Ax

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Geeze, I forgot to go somewhere!

Seriously, thanks for the visit, Al. I came up with the idea of the lyrics a few weeks ago. The twisted chords came last night, just in time for a five hour free slot in my schedule, today. A roll of the dice and there ya have it!

Thanks Man,
Doug

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Freedom is a state of mind.

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...are almost in place. Some are missing... but I'm sure you'll find them. A good start. There are a few things I'd like you to consider.

Center the vocals... they appear to be slightly to the left. Until the guitar solo, they are the main feature.

You have a reccuring chorus, or refrain, in there which I feel should have lyrics sung over them. Perhaps harmonies. The drums need some adjusting and dynamics in a few places.

The guitars could pan L-&-R, doubled and offset to achieve a wrapping effect (except for the lead solo). This would free up the center soundfield to embrace the vocals.

Worry about the production after the elements are all in the right places.

Peace,
Alimar

At above average, I feel you can improve this with a little tenacity.





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Al! I thought about some harmonies during the transitive parts, too. I might try without words, first. Maybe some sort of chant.

Thanks for the tips!

Doug

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Freedom is a state of mind.

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Fascinating music which reminds me of the airplane after bathing at baxter's

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Thanks for the listen! Wow, that's a new one. It's nice getting comparisons to different artists. Sometimes I will composite all of these artist references and come up with a "Super Jammer" profile!

Doug

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Freedom is a state of mind.

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Interesting vocal experiment indeed. Sounds Lennon-ish in spots dontcha know...

I agree with Alvin. "This is wacked." But in a very cool and artsy way. Although there are any number of things one could do to spice up a piece like this, I frankly like the minamalist approach you've adopted here. I only wish your tasty electric leads were a tad more to the fore...

Be well bro!

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Glad for the visit! I think I will work on this one, per Alimar. It does seem a bit all mushed together.

Thanks for the guitar vote, my friend!

Doug

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Freedom is a state of mind.

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I can so relate to this type of writting but never had the g-nuts to share it with the rest of humanity.Brings back a whole host of once apon a time late nights memories with my old Tascam and.......Love the guitar and vocal experimentation!Wacky,wild and much enjoyed.Thanks for sharing.

Blessings,

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Thanks man! I appreciate the comments! Yeah, this is a common malady in the world, I'm thinkin'.

Peace,
Doug

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Freedom is a state of mind.

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relaxed feel to this with a definite jazzy edge that lifts it.
Cheers
Len



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Nice to see you again! I just can't get away from this jazzy stuff. Maybe it's a lack of creativity?! Who knows.

Thanks bud!
Doug

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Freedom is a state of mind.

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You have an interesting song brewing here. The vocals bring to mind a character who does not want to get out of bed :) I detect some stretching and yawning throughout. Maybe if you do a chorus, they should be other voices, nagging the sleeper to wake! Fun tune.

Thanks
Bill

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Great suggestion!

Thanks!
Doug

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Freedom is a state of mind.

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more and more the funny thing is I dont see any rest comin anytime soon. Thanks for the cool song Enjoyed

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Yeah! I keep going back and forth: Life is short, I don't need to rest; and Life is short, get some rest.

Thanks for the visit!

Doug

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Mmmm digging your sleepy delivery, you really cannot be arsed huh?
And yet you stay in key which is a testament to your innate sense of calm.
Nice wee melody Dougie. For some reason I hear Chris Montez on a heavy valium trip and that virtually guarantees a potential number 8 in the Fiji hot 100. Avoir de la chance.

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pretty gutzy song to stick out there and i love this....it grows in your head...also agree with others, may be some new growth brewing in his one..anyroad i like this tune and the overall sound is wonderful. kudos. my friend

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Thanks for visiting! This is "proof of play" on macjams. It's nice being able to experiment with stuff, here!

As soon as I get a minute and some ram, I'm going to readdress this one!

Thanks bud!
Doug

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Glad you liked the calm. Who knows where the melody came from. Funny Montez comment! Although I don't remember listening to much of his stuff. Valium! Ha ha ha...yes...

Doug

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very funny and creative stuff here. i assume you are the weird, yet very kind and caring type? LOL is that original guitar? keep up the useless and entertaining music dude love it. nice to get away from the mainstream.

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I'm more of a fly on the wall. No one pays much attention to me, unless I'm buzzing around!

But a certain amount of anonymity is good. It keeps me out of trouble... usually.

Thanks for the vote for originality! It's fun trying to produce things that just come to mind (not trying to fit it in with anything, but sometimes I just can't help it!)

Peace,
Doug

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