You may want to try adding a little more in the beginning just to fill it out. All in all pretty dang good.

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That was the big thing I need to go back and fix. Thanks for listening!

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very nice sequenced piece , the guitar work just
excellent ..I agree with you this need more work
for the ending ..but good job so far ..(maybe
a heavier rocker drums pattern when the guitar
comes in ?) to change the mood till the arrpiggos
of the stirngs back again to clam down ..just
a seggution !! well done !!

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...very evocative music. What's here is really good, but what's not here might give it even more power and drive. The guitar section conveys what you were intending, but I can't help thinking that more guitars - punching out a wall of power chords, maybe, anchored by some heavy drum work - might really launch this.

I know that guitars are a tricky circus stunt in GB, and the Big Electric Lead sounds great - but it can only stand in for the real thing so far, and this would rock with some ace guitar work. As far as drums, the GB drums can really do amazing stuff if you take the time (lots of coffee help) to play with them. (Check out my "Chocolate Rabbits - Fake Live" to see what I mean.)

All in all, a great piece of music. If you decide to tweak this, I'd love to hear what you do with it.

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Thanks for listening. Yeah, I'm still getting used to the garageband universe. I've spent about 8 years on cheap midi stuff, so now its like a whole new world. Thanks again!

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I liked the fast cello "ground"... but it soon got too repetitive... and hearing where you were going with the guitar in the middle, I think you need to "build" toward it, increase the momentum instead of starting fast. What if you started with the cello playing that same sequence, but, play every other note, twice as long, make them quarter notes instead of 1/8 notes. Start that way, slowly, then after a few bars, bring in another instrument for harmony, then after a few bars, change the cello to do the FAST version of the ground (the one you have now)... THEN hit 'em with the guitar... then return to the fast cello, drop a few instruments off, then go to slow cello, and end by drawing out the last 2-3 notes really long for a finale?
ttfn,
Drakonis

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I agree with a lot of what has already been said. This is basically a culminative piece, with lots of nice musical ideas. Perhaps consider having the instruments entering quicker, in more rapid succession, in order to maintain listener interest? I liked the guitar solo.

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