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Between the phonecalls (and when the horoscope says bad things) by Hea [Email]
Genre: Acoustic

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Uploaded: Oct 17, 2007 - 03:54:40 PM
Last Updated: Oct 17, 2007 - 03:54:40 PM
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The final version....?
but I think I might need to make a remix (levels etc)
probably.

Lyrics:
He lifts me up on a lilac branch
up far away into the sky
pass the universe and go on deep into my own soul
pass the stars and go to every imaginary place I've ever wanted to go

I feel close to you even when you're not here
through my sheets I feel your scent
please don't feel as if I'm pushing you
cause I don't want you to leave


I woke up today feeling all alone
wasn't sad or something like that
just real cold
guess it's one of those feelings that comes and goes

"Don't get too confident"
mama sometimes say
don't feel like hesitating
still I can't close my eyes

It's like a baby born blind
sees no stopsigns or darkness as us
the stars may be there
but I think mostly it's just the pretty things
all the pretty things the baby wants to see

I'm not completely blind
I'd survive without your touch
could spend a hundred nights without you
but that's really not what I want

In the darkest night I pray
I clasp my hands so tight and then I close my eyes
It's illogical cause I don't know the lord and I read my horoscopes
but somehow I want to make sure that he really loves me too

That guy on the bus would say I'm wrong
that I'm just a stupid little girl
and maybe I am but when you embrace me
It's all that I really want

all that I really want

Dear God if you're there and if you don't hate me
please let me keep this
let my loved ones live well and long
and save me from another heartbreak
for the moment it's all that I want
it's all that I really want
he makes me forget most of the pain
and I couldn't ask for more
tried to sing about something else
but for the moment it's all that I can think of
and he's all that I really want

would you let me stay all night long?
would you let me say that I care?
don't know the proper use of metaphores
so I just say it as it is
this is the way it is


Hardware:
macbook

Software:
LE
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Between the phonecalls &mdash 10/17/07 - 04:03:18 PM
nice guitar sound pickin ..makin a good sphere
to the song and for your singing .which SO awesome
by all mean ..I m enjoying this song alot with the
slighty back ground ..I like such arrangment ..very cool realy .(did you record the guitar pickin while
you are singin ? ) ...charmin one ..thank you for
sharin this here ..!!

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WOW ! &mdash 10/17/07 - 04:05:28 PM
the guitar sound really clear, you vocal is very nice and touchy in the song ! Rich song by all the means ! Loved the work and thanks for sharing. So glad to see another Acoustical artist here !

Take Care
==============
Yeman Auf Al-Rawi

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Hey Helena! &mdash 10/17/07 - 05:31:04 PM
Delecate production. Nice guitar. Your voice is very nice! I like the addition of instrumentation thoughout. You could even bring it out a bit more.

Nice lyrics, too!

Peace,
Doug

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Very nice.. &mdash 10/18/07 - 11:36:11 AM
very moving.Love the whole vibe,the lyrics and your pretty and emotion provoking voice.A little long for my tastes but still much enjoyed the piece.

Blessings,

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Just &mdash 10/22/07 - 12:42:37 AM
Really nice to listen too. Pleasant tone and easy style in the vocal. Good one.

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Diamond in the Rough... &mdash 10/22/07 - 01:08:27 PM
You have a lovely, clear voice and you sing with advanced style.

This is a very well-written song, with thoughtful lyrics and your vocals shine.

Because the guitar part is so repetitive, I would suggest a couple of things to improve the production...

1) Insert a second guitar part (preferably acoustic) and add individual sweep strokes to ring out at the chord changes. You can insert them alternately during the song,to break up the monotony;

2) Pan the main guitar part more off-center and bring it down a bit in the mix and bring the other instrumentation up a wee bit.

But I do believe you have a *Diamond in the Rough* here. Best of luck with it. ;)

--- Joe

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More beautiful now.. &mdash 10/23/07 - 03:52:49 AM
..the song, singing (amazing), lyrics, writing ..I particularily dig that change in the verses "as if I'm pushing you" ..

I would lose these drums .. that pattern makes things
sound a bit out of time ...I liked the original
and didn't think it needed much added... but if
you insist .. :o)

I like the slow build but I wouldn't do the approach
slow build to one peak in the song .. instead,
build to 'mini' chorus peaks .. then back.. and use the bringing in of the strings as the singing gets more passionate... but I'd still have 'some' in even earlier, in where you use
piano .. in the first "I feel close to you .."
section..the trick would be to use them to build up ..
but then ease off again for the return to the verse
pattern ...like the singing appears to dictate.

I agree with Joe that there could be more building
on the guitars .. and if they are tightened up a
fraction (still a few fluffs, buzzy notes, timing..
more noticeable when against drums).. I
don't think there would be a problem
'going larger' at some point and bring in light kit
drums ..a rim shot pattern (say) ..certainly some
fat bass would be nice to come in with the
guitars at some point... and a little use of
light soft harmony too at some key points.

Really beautiful even with the remaining rough edges/demo nature .. always had oodles of potential ..
the singing is amazing ..the ideas are there ..just
not quite realised yet ..it is much fuller now and improved alot (minus the bongos).. overall I get some Joni Mitchell/Bjrk cross .. keep at it, good luck. You might want to ask some other MJers for some help,
there is plenty I am sure who would if they have time ..

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Definitely... &mdash 11/21/07 - 10:52:52 AM
...the best song title I've seen on MacJams. And a great melody and vocal performance to boot!

I agree with some of the other comments - the drums make the song seem out of time - and although the guitar playing is good it's not quite on the button. The whole thing could benefit from some tightening up, and then I'd go for the huge orchestral production job as the song builds to its climax - but then that's just me :-))

Enjoyed -
Phil

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between the phonecalls &mdash 11/24/07 - 03:37:51 AM
Awesome song and awesome singing.

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Another great one &mdash 01/07/08 - 11:16:42 AM
What can I say? Love your voice and your writing. Production could be better. But, hey you're great!
LL

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Jeeeezus! &mdash 11/23/08 - 10:30:42 PM
You are so amazing! Your vocals and lyrics are killing me! In a good way.

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