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danceable new wave number - like David Bowie meets Tom Jones
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| compyellow said 1889 days ago (September 21st, 2004) | |
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thanks! thanks for the detailed feedback and honesty! being my first time, I think I did got a little loopy (pun intended), but purposely wanted to get away from guitar-driven rock, which is my comfort zone. I think I do need to fine tune the mix a bit, and re-think the bridge (and perhaps some of the purposely hokey lyrics). Check out my latest song called Let Me In (Again)
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| Cameron said 1888 days ago (September 22nd, 2004) | |
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some good sound combos You've got a good beat going in this song, and you put together the various loops in an imaginative way. The combination of sounds towards the end didn't quite fit, though, and the texture was thick at that point. Make sure the notes of your live guitar match up well with the key the loops are playing in . Or eliminate that part altogether, which will create a more transparent texture there. Good vocals -- I wish they were a little more present in the mix, since you've got so much going on in the background. Also, it's always helpful (and appreciated) to post your lyrics. You have a good musical ear and just keep creating stuff! You'll be constantly refining and improving your tracks along the way. We are all learning as we create songs with this great GarageBand software. You're off to a good start! Check out my latest song called EPONYM
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| Paul_T said 1888 days ago (September 22nd, 2004) | |
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Not to worry Nice energy. I rather like the way the chunky guitar works against the slick background. It didn't seem objectionably out of tune to my ears anyway, but what do I know.Maybe you can selectively thin the mix with automation so that certain loops come to the forefront at certain times, then drop back. If you get a chance, please give my latest a listen. I fell of the "new songs" list all too quickly! Check out my latest song called Armor Pajamas
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| compyellow said 1888 days ago (September 22nd, 2004) | |
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thanks again! and here I thought my voice was too present... ;) they say john lennon couldn't stand listening to playbacks of his own voice and neither could dusty springfield (if you can believe that). i think I suffer from the same. anyway, thanks for the words of encouragement... i get what you are saying and am going to try to peel back some of the loops for a cleaner mix... my idea is that they would punctuate certain parts of the song and add some variation/dynamics as a result. i like the suggestion of having them "take turns" rather than build on one another. i also think I'm going to redo the "bridge." wanted to intentionally make it a bit eastern/psychedelic, but without mucking up the entire song. oh, by the way, the vox was recorded using my eMac's built in mic! I think I'll use a SM57 on the next go around. thanks! Check out my latest song called Let Me In (Again)
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| _nderscore said 1887 days ago (September 24th, 2004) | |
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great guitar infills.. but the loops detract too much from your original stuff. maybe try chopping up them up a bit so they are not so recognizable (ie. make them more your own) your vox could be louder, even tho i like how they have kind of a muted feel to them. good tune Check out my latest song called glyd
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SlimGirlFat
I think you could lose that intro perc and horn to start off
with.
Behind this track is a rather interesting voice!
I would like to hear this a bit more up front!!. You have
used a strange mixture of loops in this but it kind of gels
together really well. I think you could get away with using
less loops ( in particular the swirly synth sound) and
clearing the mix a bit, whilst still keeping
the overall feel of the track.Its a bit too full.
Actually after the 3rd listen, I can hear you have a damn
good voice. as you mentioned.... very like Bowie..
Good Lyrics,
I'd like to hear more from you for sure....
SlimgirlFat