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Little storyboard : the poor Eleonore, the naughty Alfredo and the brave Deborah...
Greg, thank you very much for your translation...

Lyrics:
Eléonore part en croisière sur un radeau elle vire de bord elle désespère car il prend l'eau
Eleonore goes cruising on a raft ; she tacks and despairs, ‘cause it lets water in...

c'est pas malin Eléonore d'avoir quitté le port sans inspecter le bord d'abord
Well done Eleonore ! You ‘ve left harbour without inspecting your ship first.

et te voilà en plein naufrage il faut bien que tu nages rassemble tes efforts bien fort
You are now shipwrecked : you ought to swim and make efforts...

Alfredo est en pèlerinage dans le grand bleu le ventre creux
Alfredo is on a pilgrimage… in the ocean... feeling a bit peckish.

d'Eléonore il fait un carnage adieu Eléonore....
He just slaughters Eleonore. Farewell, Eleonore…

en digérant Eléonore Alfredo s'endort et quand il se réveille il implore
While digesting Eleonore, Alfredo falls asleep… On waking, he begs for some more drops

en échouant sur cette plage quelques gouttes encore mais l'eau sous le soleil s'évapore
as he ran aground on this beach, water has been evaporating under the sun...


quelle étrange posture que celle de Déborah en train de faire le mur de l'orphelinat
What a strange position that that of Deborah, going over the wall of her orphanage.

elle va près du pauvre diable recueilli sur le sable dans son nouveau royaume l'aquarium
She goes near the poor soul that has been found on the sand, at the aquarium, which is now his new kingdom...

Alfredo la dévore de son regard
Alfredo eyes her greedily,

quand elle arrive au bord de sa baignoire
when she approaches his pond.

qu'est ce qu'elle a Déborah pris dans le placard de l'orphelinat ?
But what did Deborah take in the cupboard of the orphanage ?

c'est un petit jouet de fête qui plante une fléchette dans la peau du barbare qui se marre
This is a small festive toy, that sticks a dart in the smiling murderer’s skin,

avant de sombrer dans le noir car la fine aiguillette déverse de son dard le curare
before he sinks into the dark, ‘cause the sharp needle pours its curare out.

Alfredo est alors sur le départ
Alfredo in on departure now.

pourquoi ce mauvais sort il veut savoir
Why such a curse ? He wants to know…

un jour un radeau lui dit la fillette et maman...
« Some day, a raft » the little girl says, « and Mummy… »

maman qui partait en croisière sur un radeau...
« Mummy, who went cruising on a raft… »
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Eleonore &mdash 01/21/08 - 02:39:17 PM
cool french blues ..this is new to me .
very nice singing .very arty .impressive
band set and arragment .welldone my friend !

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French blues &mdash 01/23/08 - 11:16:18 AM
hello Feter, I'm glad that you took the time to listen and more, if it's new to you !
Thanks my friend
Marc

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In Any Language &mdash 01/21/08 - 03:22:39 PM
This is a great song!
I find it an interesting dark ballad. Well sung.

Thanks
Bill




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Dark &mdash 01/23/08 - 11:22:25 AM
Thank you to listen this "dark ballad"
and "merci" for your appreciable support Bill...
Cheers
Marc

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Wonderful tune &mdash 01/21/08 - 03:30:35 PM
I loved this from the opening echoed piano chords, and then your wonderful rich voice came in.... and it was magical. A wonderful contemporary yet classical sounding track - this was well worth the wait.

Excellent, my friend.

steve

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Magical ! &mdash 01/23/08 - 11:38:34 AM
Too kind Steve, but what a great pleasure and a great honour to read this post from a talented musician !
How are you Steve ? I remember something about your health at the end of the last year. I hope all is OK now ?
Thank you my friend
Marc

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Enfin... &mdash 01/21/08 - 04:27:16 PM
On l'attendait depuis un moment celle l... Encore bravo pour l'originalit des textes et l'efficacit de la mlodie ! Une de nos prfres... !!!

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Bof... &mdash 01/23/08 - 11:50:34 AM
oui enfin, j'ai sans doute passe trop de temps sur ce morceau pour l'apprecier moi meme, mais je suis heureux de voir ces commentaires encourageants.
Merci mille fois pour le votre, pour les conseils, pour la traduction, et surtout merci pour l'amour. Je vous envoie le mien...
Et je reprends les recherches des godasses !
Bisous

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Well Marc &mdash 01/21/08 - 04:54:16 PM
This was well worth waiting for... such class and style (but that's what the French are known for anyway) I loved it from the opening.... and the background instruments are great along with your very expressive voice. An unusual lyric, but that adds to the quality of this song along with you the French language, regards M

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French language &mdash 01/23/08 - 11:54:56 AM
Maurice, thanks so much for this very nice comment. Glad to read this...
Very much appreciated that you took the time to listen.
Cheers
Marc

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Great sound! &mdash 01/21/08 - 09:54:38 PM
Very pleasing to the ear; wonderful instrumentation. Bizarre lyric; kind of a Lou Reed story; intrigue. C'est bon, homme! I like the way the keys seem to travel right to left at the beginning. I love the sound of the guitars when they come in; well done.

Salut!

Joe


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c'est bon, homme ! &mdash 01/23/08 - 11:59:20 AM
Good French Joe, c'est tres bon !
Merci beaucoup, for your compliments and your support. Believe me, this is greatly appreciated...
Cheers
Marc

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I love it! &mdash 01/21/08 - 09:58:53 PM
I agree with Steve: the piano chords are chilling. Your voice beautiful.

I have to say that with only the ability to read the lyrics in translation, I enjoy the poetry of your writing and your personality, which shows through. A compelling, surreal subject for a song. You are a true artist!

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so much &mdash 01/23/08 - 12:10:13 PM
compliments !
You're really too kind Estella. But I'm so glad to read your post !
Thanks for your presence and these lovely comments...
Friendship from France
Marc



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I dig it! &mdash 01/21/08 - 11:31:28 PM
You've got a great voice! I dig the french blues thing. You've got a talent that I can't wait to hear more from.

Well done!

Tobin

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French blues &mdash 01/23/08 - 12:13:54 PM
Thank you for listening this song and for your comment Tobin.
I'm glad you enjoyed it...
Cheers
Marc

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love the story... &mdash 01/22/08 - 09:59:57 AM
...and the music's builds are subtle so you can concentrate on the story line.
French is such a beautiful language.

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Beautiful &mdash 01/23/08 - 02:19:04 PM
language...
Thank you Bob for your comment, which touches me, I appreciate very much.
Cheers
Marc



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Bravo ! &mdash 01/22/08 - 10:58:34 AM
Tres tres belle chanson a tout niveau .
Special pour les harmonies .

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Merci Henri &mdash 01/23/08 - 02:27:32 PM
c'est sympa d'etre la et je suis franchement d'autant plus touche que ce message me vient d'un musicien de grand talent...
Et puis quelques mots francais sont tellement bienvenus ici !
Je te salue depuis la region Est avec un brin d'envie pour les precieux degres qui nous separent et dont tu peux jouir, heureux Sudiste !
Bien amicalement
Marc

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Succinct Story Line &mdash 01/22/08 - 11:00:23 AM
Dark, karmic and ironic little *fish* tale, delivered with distinctive style.

And we just don't hear enough songs nowadays that include curare as a plot device. LOL

My only suggestion would be to occasionally vary the chord-pounding piano part, either with arpeggiated chords, or with off-beat rhythms. As it stands, the current part contrasts somewhat awkwardly with the rest of the arrangement, which is fairly fluid and lush.

Still, this is a very interesting and imaginative work. ;)

--- Joe



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Fish... &mdash 01/23/08 - 02:37:45 PM
I'm glad to see you here Joe...
I thank you to take the time to listen to this song and I appreciate your precious suggestion... Thanks
Cheers
Marc

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Curare &mdash 01/22/08 - 11:09:25 AM
Blues French...
Belle composition originale, bravo Marc, mais quelle sombre histoire, pauvre Eleonore !
Bonne idee cette piece en 2 parties avec le piano stereo en premiere et l'entree de la guitare avec ce rythme blues pour conclure.
Ta voix parfaitement adaptee au style, en harmonie avec ta musique, bien agreable aux oreilles...
Merci

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Sombre histoire &mdash 01/23/08 - 02:46:28 PM
Bonjour Rosita, merci a toi aussi d'etre la encore...
Sombre histoire, oui pauvre Eleonore, mais franchement quelle idee de partir en croisiere sur un radeau !
Moi j'ai pas mal rame aussi, mais au sec devant l'ordi pour venir a bout de cette chanson...
Merci encore pour ton message. J'espere que tout va bien pour toi dans la capitale et je te souhaite tout plein de bonnes choses pour 2008, c'est encore d'actualite !
Amicalement
Marc

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Fantastique &mdash 01/22/08 - 01:18:18 PM
subtile, un arrangement magnifique

Bravo :-)

Cheers

Dick


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Subtile &mdash 01/23/08 - 02:50:54 PM
Thanks so much for this nice comment,
et merci pour ces bons mots francais Dick !
Glad to see you here...
Cheers
Marc

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Blaky's Back! &mdash 01/22/08 - 01:58:58 PM
Good to hear something from you again. Like the strings with the piano. Vocals are nice. The sound is full. Like the bass.
adieu,
Dave

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Coming back &mdash 01/23/08 - 03:03:12 PM
Kind comment Dave, thank you very much...
I've been so busy with work lately to spend much time to make music.
But MacJams is a very good place and I'm glad to come back, as I'm glad to receive your support. Thanks again
Cheers
Marc

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singing &mdash 01/22/08 - 02:52:19 PM
and the backround bouncing sound cool. Enjoy the light orchestration as well. A terrific music feel here I think. Love how you echo the music traces of my favorite music which is Enya, you have a feel like that and that a fav sound of mine. And that is getting somewhere when you maintain a sound like that I think.

Plenty of good sounds ! REally!

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singing &mdash 01/23/08 - 03:12:25 PM
Bill, your comment touches me deeply, because so much compliments, because coming from a great musician, talented man.
Thank you so much, sincerely
Cheers
Marc

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Marc &mdash 01/22/08 - 04:38:12 PM
this is simply a very original and beautiful song which you play and sing with enormous talent. I wish I could write this in French.
Cheers
Len



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French write &mdash 01/23/08 - 03:16:49 PM
Thank you Len for this nice comment, very much appreciated that you took the time to listen and give me your support.
Cheers
Marc

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Great stuff &mdash 01/22/08 - 05:00:46 PM
Its always nice to hear some French singing...I am a big fan of Gainsbourg of course hehe. This is a very classy track
Cheers
Steve

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Gainsbourg ! &mdash 01/23/08 - 03:27:28 PM
Woww... Thank you Steve for this "connection" with Serge ! Too kind.
Ah, Steve and Day for Night... My Itunes library is full to overflowing !
Thank again to be here.
Cheers
Marc

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oh so nice Marc! &mdash 01/22/08 - 08:37:30 PM
Wonderful arrangement. and a really nice variety in the sound bed, ever shifting like a ocean wave. Liked the piano with the delay effect and of course the guitar work. magnificent!

The story to this is very unigue and tells a tale.

Always a pleasure to hear a song from you.

Vic

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Pleasure &mdash 01/23/08 - 03:41:58 PM
Vic, your kind comment touches me deeply. Thank you very much...
You know for me too, it's really a pleasure to listen to each new tune from you, I like your music, which fills my Itunes library !
Thanks for your support
Cheers
Marc

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Great recording! &mdash 01/22/08 - 10:11:07 PM
The recording stands out first, but the song, your playing and your clean, clear vocal are all outstanding.

Fantastic post Marc - you'll be snapped up soon for radio airplay. I really can't get over how well you've recorded this - trs classy mon ami!

Neil

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Delighted &mdash 01/23/08 - 04:26:30 PM
to read your comment Neil, and honoured again, coming from you...
To be honest, I have posted this tune with the insistence of my son Gregory, translator of the lyrics. I was no satisfied or certainly too sick by the construction of this song. I confess I have spend many time on this, too busy by my work. and nights are short...
Merci encore mon ami, merci aussi pour ta tres bonne musique
et bonjour de la France !
Marc


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fantastic... &mdash 01/23/08 - 12:20:22 AM
...playing, singing, the instrumentation... your voice is lovely on this!

I really enjoyed listening to this. Thank you :)




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Mysti.... &mdash 01/23/08 - 04:36:40 PM
Cat, thank you for listening this song, I'm glad you like it and I appreciate sincerely your comment.
Friendly
Marc

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Great! &mdash 01/23/08 - 04:33:06 AM
A classy song couple with excellent production. Your vocals sound amazing.

Peter

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Let it shine &mdash 01/25/08 - 09:15:22 AM
Thank you for this comment Peter,
I'm glad you took the time to listen
Bonjour de la France !
Marc

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Dark and charming... &mdash 01/23/08 - 06:39:52 AM
quite the combination! This is very nicely done. Your vocal is outstanding here - expressive and sweet, without being overly sentimental. I like the music and instrumentation, too. Nice keyboards, and very nice guitar. This is a great song, and very well-produced. Nicely done. Peace.

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Dark &mdash 01/25/08 - 09:20:09 AM
David, this is a very kind comment, thank you very much...
I'm touched and glad to receive your support.
Thanks again
Marc

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french blues &mdash 01/23/08 - 11:14:46 AM
hello Feter, I'm glad that you took the time to listen and more, if it's new to you !
Thanks my friend
Marc

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Beautiful! &mdash 01/23/08 - 12:21:40 PM
Your music always puts a smile on my face and warms my heart. Beautiful.
Charlie

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Smile... &mdash 01/25/08 - 09:25:04 AM
Thank you David, very much appreciated that you took the time to listen and post these nice words.
Cheers
Marc

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Magical Fantasy &mdash 01/23/08 - 12:59:07 PM
I enjoy so much about this song. When I was a little girl, my parents listened to Charles Aznavour all the time and I've continued to as an adult and all my friends think I'm crazy, but there's something magic in his songs, that I hear in yours, too. This one, especially in the lyrics is like Charles Aznavour on acid.

Your singing is so expressive here, the way you sing the phrases, even though I can't understand the words, I really feel as though you're communicating to me. I'm so in love with your singing on this song!

The segue into the guitar from the piano is also magical. I know that this is a song I'll be listening to again and again. Thank you SO much for posting it!

--ledebutant

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Magique &mdash 01/25/08 - 09:58:05 AM
So much great words, thank you very much Lisa and believe me, this is greatly appreciated coming from you.
I'm delighted to know you like this song and I feel honoured by this "connection" to Charles Aznavour !
You can see the translation with the French lyrics.
Thanks again
Amicalement
Marc

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He just slaughtered Eleonore? &mdash 01/23/08 - 02:40:57 PM
Poor Eleonore... but she got her revenge...

Nice melody and it's always a treat to listen to your singing in french... although I don't understand much...:)

Original lyrics combined with a well performed and produced song!

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Poor Alfredo... &mdash 01/25/08 - 10:11:59 AM
Nice comment, thank you Thor, I'm glad to see you here.
And bravo for all your music and this multicollab at each Christmas time...
I'm a little alone here because my very pitiful English language, but I'm in the "same herd"...
May be some French words in your next song Christmas 08 !
Cheers
Marc

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Fantastic song &mdash 01/23/08 - 03:01:46 PM
the mood and arrangement is wonderful and your voice sounds great. I also appreciate the patience of the composition - waiting to bring the guitar in till well into the track. This is a real winner.

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Ghosts &mdash 01/25/08 - 10:32:20 AM
Thank you for listening this song and these compliments Bud, the opportunity to send my congratulations to Stella for "ghosts in the picture" with you...
Because usually no much comments from me (my too pitiful English language) and it's so easy to click just on "favorites"...
But today, I've my dictionary !
Cheers
Marc

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You ever get... &mdash 01/23/08 - 05:21:39 PM
compared to Etienne Daho? very good song you got here the vocals are crystal clear, and the bass is sweet, good job all around!

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Etienne &mdash 01/25/08 - 10:42:00 AM
Daho... I like and I'm delighted by this comparison Tom !
Thank you very much for this kind comment
Cheers
Marc

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Tellement fiere de toi%u2026 &mdash 01/24/08 - 12:52:35 PM
Bravo%u2026une fois de plus%u2026. elle est superbe, les paroles, la musique, ta voix, ta maniere de chanter%u2026Une de mes preferees%u2026.et toujours autant d%u2019motion en t%u2019coutant%u2026merci papa

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Fier de toi &mdash 01/25/08 - 10:55:00 AM
tout autant... Ta preferee aussi ? je ne m'y attendais pas, ce morceau m'a tellement pris la tete que je l'aurais presque jete, mais je suis heureux de tous ces temoignages
et notamment du tien...
Merci Fanny, avec tout mon amour aussi...

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mmmmmmmmm.... &mdash 01/25/08 - 08:27:01 AM
gorgeous - i love a french accent so you could sing about spiders and snakes and i would be happy - however - these lyrics were much more engaging so thank you for the post and the translation

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merci &mdash 02/05/08 - 01:56:17 PM
Thank you for this kind comment Caroline, glad you like it..
Fiendly from France
Marc

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this is incredible. i love &mdash 01/25/08 - 04:01:29 PM
everything about this song. the words are really neat too and you deliver them perfectly. nice touch when the synths come in. great job.

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Incredible &mdash 02/05/08 - 01:58:34 PM
Thank you Michael, I'm touched by this comment coming from you...
Kind regards
Marc

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nice job as always! &mdash 01/26/08 - 04:58:11 PM
Marc I always enjoy your singing and playing. Very enjoyable tune. Loved listening to it! But Poor Eleonore! :( Thanks for sharing this one.

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Poor Eleonore... &mdash 02/05/08 - 02:01:51 PM
Kind comment, thank you Gail, I'm glad to see you here...
Kind regards
Marc

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Not the &mdash 01/26/08 - 06:29:51 PM
sort of thing I usually like, but this has got a great feel to it, and the mix brilliant. Bringing the drums in middle of the song works great. Good stuff.

Adam

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merci &mdash 02/05/08 - 01:52:04 PM
Thank you to listen Adam, I'm glad to read this comment from you...
Cheers
Marc

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Hey Marc &mdash 01/26/08 - 09:34:34 PM
Just wonderful...
loved this


all the way from wow...France
where cone heads come from
Thats a SNL NBC-TV reference you need to understand.
peace

I'm a new fan
don't know how i missed that for so long

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SNL NBC-TV &mdash 02/05/08 - 02:05:56 PM
Timothy, I'm late but I want to thank you for this nice comment and to take the time to listen...
Friendly from France
Marc

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i'm with j.a. &mdash 02/05/08 - 06:41:50 PM
what a lovely little tale, and musical backing is gorgeous. as the lyric is usually the last thing i notice in a song, i liked hearing your words. you've got a powerfully gentle vocal delivery, and the relentless pounding piano distracted from that somewhat for me. of course, that may be exactly what you are looking for! the sweet calm that followed was just beautiful. bravo, marc - good to hear your voice again.
anne

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The sun &mdash 02/06/08 - 08:42:27 AM
of my afternoon...
Lovely comment, so much compliments coming again from you, one more time I'm sincerely touched Anne, thank you very much...
Hoping my English language will be better one day to say all my feelings about your music and your voice !



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Don't know how it's &mdash 02/11/08 - 09:01:48 PM
possible but I love your music even though I don't speak a word of French.

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Outstanding &mdash 02/25/08 - 04:13:35 AM
Wonderful storytelling, thrilling chanson, beautiful music, bravissimo! i dig it :-)

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WOW! &mdash 03/04/08 - 02:36:35 PM
Great new French Blues addition to MacJams .. You're just a great artist and one of the bests about this company. You have added new tastes to that site. Keep 'em coming.

Take Care
- Yeman A. Al-Rawi

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Great composition, &mdash 03/05/08 - 05:11:58 AM
fantastic piano and guitars but all the arrangement is so clever and your french singing gives an unique "imprinting" to your style....bravo!

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Une autre merveille &mdash 04/04/08 - 07:50:17 AM
Trs belle chanson, directment du coeur - une production parfaite.

Merci,
Doug

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Great song Marc... &mdash 07/03/08 - 11:58:05 PM
Just stopping by to play some catch up, this is really beautiful mate. Thanks for sharing.

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La vengeance est un meilleur &mdash 09/26/08 - 05:32:54 AM
de plat servi le froid. From Star Trek Wrath of Khan.
Alfredo was a shark? You could sing about snails and haircombs and make it sound like an adventure or a romance.
C'tait tout fait amusant. Merci beaucoup.

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