this sounds very well mixed to me. Not your typical club music--more organic and playful than that. Your piano playing is just kind of enhance by the club-like bass and beats, rather than the other way around. I like it!

Wouldn't mind reading the lyrics.

[ Reply to This ]

I like the lyrics--rich imagery. I have a much better appreciation for the song.

[ Reply to This ]

Thanks, I was really unsure about some of the lyrics at first, they came out so quickly. But I've decided to let them be for now!

[ Reply to This ]

nice sound the piano very cool..you singin is good as
well thnx for sharin

[ Reply to This ]

plus the singing fits nicely.

Thanks for sharing!

[ Reply to This ]

I love the song structure, melody, choice of synths, and singing voice... each of these is the "Great" part of this song. There are a couple of things that stand out as detractors that could be improved, though. First, although the sound of your voice (tone and pitch) are great, I found it almost impossible to understand the words you sang. Part of it is the mix, altering the EQ to make the voice less muddy (boost the high-midrange a bit? others may have better suggestions) and the other part is better diction/pronunciation of the words as you sing... that would help. Really catchy music... still needs a little tweaking to make the bass richer and trim some of the treble off the hi-hats... hope these are helpful comments! Hope your voice recovers fully soon!
ttfn,
Drakonis

[ Reply to This ]

Okay, that sounds like a good idea. I was waiting for someone to say something specific about the vocals, because I'm not totally happy with them.

I will also play with the drums and try eq-ing them. Sometimes it is helpful to have very specific advice about what steps to take. Thanks so much!

[ Reply to This ]

.. fine arrangement and the mix sounds very good too and I love those catchy, synthy, pizz strings .. vocals are excellent .. I like that slightly incoherent style .. and the reverb suits too .. however, as a side-effect it's coming across a bit sibilant... this can be fixed in different ways... not so easily in
GB .. although some EQing might reduce it a bit.

I sometimes use the deesser plug-in in Logic for this..
some mastering tools help counter this too.. but it's
best to target the source track first.

I can't hear much loop usage .. it's all blended in very well with your excellent skills on keys Josh.

Thanks for sharing.

[ Reply to This ]

You are right about the vocals - they do need some de-essing. I don't have a pop-screen, and I think being conscious of this while singing actually affects my singing style a little bit. I had a filter that I made out of nylon and a coat hanger, but I can't find it! Haha.

Thanks for listening - I'm really trying to keep honing this one song, using the experience as a kind of template for future work.

I'll be posting a new version in the next few weeks, hopefully. It's so great that you guys take the time to listen and comment!

[ Reply to This ]

a listener of this genre, usually, but never let it be said i am a snob. hah!
i liked the use of several instruments and sounds. it gave it a really big feel. the vocals were well sung, albiet the amount of reverb used lends it to the dance songs of the mid-80's. if that was your goal, then you nailed it. if not, then i would reccomend dropping the reverb to an afterthought. using the track reverb, go into the actual reverb window, turn up the original volume, and down the effected volume. you will still have all the reverb you want, but it will sit toward the back of the mix, almost as an after effect. i like doing this because it still gives the vocals depth, without washing the ability to hear your words clearly... great post, and i am glad i got to hear this one...
~~ Allen Dean, Mont Cali, also found on the Allen Dean page...

[ Reply to This ]