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Note from dragon spawn XNovemberX (Daughter of Drakonis):
A dedication to national Singles Awareness day for those who have terrible boyfriends or lack thereof... Ahem. I was inspired by Garner_Smake for posting a song! I am an unemployed vocalist and have been thinking of trying to put together a vocal demo for a while now. Thank you very much, Garner_Smake for motivating me (something that my friends can't seem to do)!

These are GarageBand loops, and I wrote the lyrics and sang an original melody over them. I also drew the cat picture.
-XNovemberX-
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Lyrics
[Verse 1]:
The clock is ticking
And I'm still here waiting
And you're still not here

[Chorus]:
Kiss me for the last time
Because this has crossed the line
Strike me for the last time
I've stopped trying to hide

[Verse 2]:
The rain is pouring
And I'm still here crying
These salty eyes suck me dry

[Chorus]:
Kiss me for the last time
Because this has crossed the line
Strike me for the last time
I've stopped trying to hide

[Refrain]:
Kiss me for the last time
I won't give in to your lies anymore

[Chorus]:
Song Stats
Hits: 4649
Comments: 53
Fans: 30
Plays: 206
Downloads: 139
Votes: 16
Uploaded: Feb 10, 2008 - 06:00:25 PM
Last Updated: Feb 10, 2008 - 08:41:31 PM Last Played: Mar 18, 2017 - 04:14:51 PM
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Comments
SmokeyVW said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
powerful
a powerful message

excellent

nice vocal delivery - i like the tremolo guitar effect - bravo!!!

thanks


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Feter said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
Valentine
WOW ...what a song .a true rockin hit ..loved the
vocal work .and sure the rockin sound bed as well ..
very well done ..Kudos !!!!!! Draknooos !!
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Roxylee said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
Singles Awareness Day??
Gee, and I had to cook and clean today, instead of being waited on. Darn. Next year...:-) This song reminds me of my first boyfriend, who told me to get all dressed up and that he'd be over to take me out to dinner. Well, he finally called to say he was in Atlanta.I was in NY. At least it wasn't raining... Sara did a great job singing this. Yaaaaayyyy Sara!!! Looking forward to hearing more vocals from you. Real nice loop work and effects, Drak.


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bud said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
Great GB loop construction
sounds very live - and loose. Nice vocals and lyrics too. You're off to a great start.
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sammy said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
Got any more?
So good. And so sad. Very well done.

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davisamerica said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
wow
no really..wow
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paul f. page said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
I like...
...every aspect of this number from the lyrics to the vocal line and quality to the driving rhythm track that holds it all together. For me, though, it was one verse too short and with a very abrupt ending. But there is so much to like here. Great collab. Can you give it a bit more? (Valentine, go for the demo. You've got the chops.)
Peace.
Paul
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Alannah said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
Wow ....
.. a "dragon-atrix "... very nicely done Sara ... your musical stylings are a reminiscent of some of the type of stuff I also like to do .... so it was definitely a comfortable listen for me! Keep em coming!
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guitapick said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
Kids nowadays...
...man...this is strong...motivation and inspiration seem to go hand in hand...

Yeah...
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Outtaorbit said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
once again
outstanding
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garner_smake said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
omg
this is fantastic!!! YOu are a great singer. I'm glad i inspired you. THis is great. i love the lyrics. Haha, you tell that boy!! he's not worth you! XD
thetiler said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
Sorry about the experience
that you faced in dating. Hope your next one is sure better than the one in the lyrics. Cool present sounds and enjoyed it.

Thanks for sharing this!


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eanbardsley said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
I loved this,...
What nice singing, what nice music. You never cease to turn out the quality. Great work!!!
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sschedra said 3540 days ago (February 10th, 2008)
Intense!
So there is a music gene and the little one has it. Powerful song and lyric. Might I also add you are a master of the loops. This is real good stuff. I would encourage you to continue. I could listen to you sing all night.

Top shelf! Thanks for this.
Stephen
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jiguma said 3539 days ago (February 11th, 2008)
Excellent song Sara
Now Drak, being the very young looking dragon that he is, couldn't be more than 784 years old, so that makes you really young :)

Really good stuff in the writing department. I liked the abrupt ending - it worked really well with the words. Musical bed works very well too. I know nit picking may not be appropriate, but I'd love to hear the voice a little better integrated in the mix - maybe it's a mic problem. Just a small point though - congratulations!

Neil
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that80sboy said 3539 days ago (February 11th, 2008)
i like it!!
nice mix overall i think...haunting music and sad lyrics...but something that needed to be said maybe?? nice track guys!!
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craft said 3539 days ago (February 11th, 2008)
great song
Your daughter have a great voice.. Lovely and powerfull...
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ajnorth said 3539 days ago (February 11th, 2008)
Considering
this is GB loops, its a really great track, and nice vocals. I hear a hint of Avril Lavigne here, (hope that doesn't insult you! Because I really liked here earlier stuff)

Looking forward to hearing more!
Adam
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droop said 3539 days ago (February 11th, 2008)
Very nice!
Good song and excellent job of putting the loops together. I didn't know
the dragon had a daughter who could sing.
Great job!
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lupiroz said 3539 days ago (February 11th, 2008)
Great number Sara,
especially considering that is your first one!! Your voice is very powerful, I think you can easily sing a lot of different genres, from the "angry" to the sweet ones....that's great!!

What do you think to write english lyrics and singin on one of my italian tunes......if you want I'm here!

Lou
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Barretok said 3539 days ago (February 11th, 2008)
Beautiful singing
Beautiful singing indeed. Very passionate. Great start!
B
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Mcboy said 3539 days ago (February 11th, 2008)
nice lyrics and singing
but i agree with jigumas comments....the music bed sounds to low. better mixing of the voice into the music would make this shine.....but hey the words and the singing are kool!
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gail60 said 3539 days ago (February 11th, 2008)
wow...
This is a great song. You sing very well and you did an excellent job. You are very creative and it will serve you well in the years ahead. Kudos to your great style and singing ability! Having Drak around is a huge bonus. He is so proud of you and we all can see why! Best of luck to you.
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moorlandt said 3539 days ago (February 11th, 2008)
sara
That's a hell of a catchy chorus you get there. Very tasteful and effective use of the loops. Very well sung considering this (one of your) first track(s). Next step IMHO: try to find the higher region in your voice now and then, and don't be afraid to spread some controlled angriness as well. Very, and I mean VERY promising:-)
-Walt
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caroline said 3538 days ago (February 12th, 2008)
wow - this is fabbie!!
see - i knew all that time we spent at the piano would pay off!! LOL! big loves sweet thing xoxoxox btw - you sound fantastic - sheesh - i hope there is gonna be much much more
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ledebutant said 3538 days ago (February 12th, 2008)
Promise
I agree with everyone who said that this shows tremendous promise for you as a songwriter. You have a grasp of song structure that evades many people years older than you and this is a catchy tune with one heck (okay, I want to say hell, but your dad will kill me) of a hook. Very nice arrangement of the loops and you have a terrific voice and sing with tons of expression to boot.

I'd cut back on the reverb and try to get your vocals mixed into the bed a little better, but other than that, I'd say you get an A, young lady. :-)
said 3538 days ago (February 12th, 2008)
Really thought provoking.


Hi

Thanks for sharing yes i too can relate to this nice sad song and very thought provoking I like the lyrics a lot and the part where you sing
Kiss me for the last time i won't give in to your lies anymore.


Yet I always do. more fool me !!!
You sang it really well, as though you meant every last word too.


Peace

Dee.
drakonis said 3538 days ago (February 12th, 2008)
Thanks Everyone from XNovemberX
SmokeyVW: Embarrassingly enough, actually... the guitar and background music were just some loops... But my voice was a live recording over the loops. I'm quite surprised at the number of positive comments I received! THANK YOU FOR PUTTING A FORUM POST ABOUT MY SONG!!!!!!!!! That made my week, as my father must have told you.

Feter:I'm so glad that you enjoyed the music! Hopefully it brightened your day. Thank you very much!

Roxylee: Thank you so much for listening! I actually put the loops together and sang over it, my dad helped me with the reverb and figuring out harmonies and the like... But I do owe my existance to him anywase... I guess that equates to owning my soul.

Bud: I appreciate all the positive feedback! Thank you for giving it a listen!

Sammy: I'm glad that the emotion fell through properly... I do hope to make more songs soon, and If I'm lucky I might get some friends (What would happen if I just stopped there?) to help out and record live instruments.

Davisamerica: Right then... Well, I appreciate you stopping by to listing and being Wow, just Wowed.

Paul f. page: Yay! Actual criticism! Thank you for giving me some Ideas, I'll see if I can make it better than it was before.

Alannah: SWEEEEET! I hope to maybe collaborate with you or something, If you don't mind working with angsty teenagers with a bad sense of humor.

guitapick: Your daughter is awesome. Seriously, when I heard her song, I had to run to my room and start recording right then. I had the coolest idea for this song and I think that's probably what gave so much emotion to it, was that I didn't wait for the inspiration to settle down. I just exploded.

Outtaorbit: Thank you for listening and boosting my already bloated ego!

garner_smake: Where did you get that name anyway? You are amazing, truly, thank you for posting your songs. I look forward to more of them! Thank you so much for listening! I just did a band interview with a local band (that I'm good friends with) for a high school video/film project, and got some hope from them about a possible future, ha ha.

thetiler: Ha this one's pretty old, I just got memories because one of my friends is going through a similar (but more devastating) situation, so i brought both my memories and the sympathy for my friend to the song, apparently it made a good combination.

eanbardsley: The intro? Wow I remember that. It was embarrassing. Let's pretend it never happened. But this one I'm actually pretty proud of, and that's an understatement.

sschedra: I'm actually 5"4, thankyouverymuch. No, haha, Thank you very much for that.

jiguma: My magical musburger (nickname for the iMac) has a built in mic, so that may be a small problem. I blame all vocal editing problems on my dad. that was his department. (sticks tongue out at Drak).

that80sboy: Thank you! Hey I listen to 80's like MOTLEY CRUE hahaha I'll head over to your profile and listen!

craft: can't say thanks enough... really this is quite an exciting thing for me, be careful. I might just want to do more.

ajnorth: I prefer Paramore, but I do appreciate the comparison. She's big, that must mean something =]

Droop: The daughter CAN sing. (A little.) I suck at harmony, and my dad has told me that you are a god of vocals... Maybe there's room for some free vocal advice nudge nudge?

lupiroz: I would love to do vocals for you! I'll have my dad-agent arrange the... whatever I'm at a loss for words. Not enough caffeine. Thank you very much!

Barretok: Thank you for giving this song a listen! I hear you like the amazing world of film? I sold my soul to the film teacher at my high school, sorry dad, I guess that means that you don't own it anymore.

Mcboy: I am unworthy, oh guitar god. I have heard of your legend-ness. It is a real honor for you to listen to my track and comment! Thank you tons!

gail60: Thanks so much! HAPPY BIRTHDAY YESTERDAY!!!!!!

moorlandt: I looooove your music! Thank you for the chorus comment. I watched an interview with a band, and they said "The biggest thing our band manager ever taught us was the importanc e of C-H-O-R-U-S." I took that to heart. Yeah, I do need to expand my range a bit.

Caroline: HIIIIIIIII!!! Thanks so much! I DID have fun playing piano with you, and I look forward to writing more songs for you to have a listen to. Happy days to you, m'lady. May your days be pink and fluffy with cotton candy clouds./. okay was weird. But it sounded cool.

ledebutant: Hell, my dad wouldn't care if you said hell. Hell. He said my voice sounded sort of like yours, I hope you don't take that as an insult. =] The reverb? Thank you for the critique! I gotta learn some day. =]

Dee1962z: Thank you very much, I'm happy AND sad that you could relate to the lyrics, Now I want to give you a hug! hopefully I'll write a happier song next... OOH! Maybe a tribute to strawberry milk, the only thing that Valentine's day is good for. May you have better days! =]

Love to all and many, MANY thanks!
-XNovemberX (my dad doesn't get the fact that the X's ARE SILENT XO...
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MissChaos said 3537 days ago (February 13th, 2008)
add me to the list...
of folks who are really surprised by your awesome voice! Wow, you've got that clear, honest and upfront vocal quality down pat! And way to go keeping all the effects off the vocals. It can be very tempting, right? Looking forward to more, Miss Rock Star. :-)
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Savage_Beast said 3536 days ago (February 14th, 2008)
cool
cool
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aclarke said 3536 days ago (February 14th, 2008)
I love the lyrics
and especially love the way you deliver them... I'm hearing a lot of emotion. To me, that is everything in a vocal song... it should be personal. You do that extremely well!

I would love to hear this remixed... this song is strong as it is but I think it could be so much more with a little tweaking of the levels (says the guy who has no patience for working on his own music). In any case, this is far better than most first efforts I've heard... including my own. Keep at it!
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said 3535 days ago (February 15th, 2008)
Great
What a good lyric, and the refrain is easy to remember and sing-a-long to.... Thanks for sharing....
BossHook said 3535 days ago (February 15th, 2008)
Hooked me
Great shoe gazer power. Good vocal, but it would also be cool to hear the band mixed up higher closer to the vocal to appreciate that wall of sound.
maxruehl said 3535 days ago (February 15th, 2008)
Nice!
Terrific sound, drak. The li'l dragonette is already spitting fire! Give her my compliments. You must be very proud.:)
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said 3534 days ago (February 16th, 2008)
woops!
I came here earlier this week, and forgot to come back to comment 8^(

This is a great 'first' effort to post. The subject matter is a little tough, and music gives us a medium to express these things. I'm sure I'm not alone in expressing that I wish I had the tools to do this when I was your age, I had a lot more time back then - LOL.

Hope to hear more from you soon!

. - Harold
dirigent said 3534 days ago (February 16th, 2008)
Great voice
Wow - what a voice. Touching delivery, bravissima!!
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lavalamp said 3534 days ago (February 16th, 2008)
Brilliant!
This is a great song by itself. Your voice sounds raw and clean at the same time. Truly great. I'm glad I got a chance to here it.
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echoroom said 3534 days ago (February 16th, 2008)
Excellent
Green day meets garbage - really sweet vocals and a killer tune.. really enjoyed this ... go girl!
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Tribrix said 3530 days ago (February 20th, 2008)
almost finished feel
This has a lot of things going for it, not least the lyrics and vocal performance. Although you say it's all loops, it certainly doesn't sound like it (though others might know better than I do). And the mix is really good, but could use just a little more polish for that "pro" sound. Otherwise, it's really great.
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baki said 3530 days ago (February 20th, 2008)
do you ....
... think you can roll the rock with this one? i think so. bravo
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falzaabi said 3527 days ago (February 23rd, 2008)
:)
I'm still here waiting
And you're still not here

wow my wife will like this part

nice song
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said 3519 days ago (March 2nd, 2008)
WOW!
Great job Mr. Eduard, I guess that you're really proud of her. She have a great vocal abilities, and the background music is truly amazing. My regardz to your daughter.
Loved this song so much and it's downloaded into my FAVORITE MJ CD.

Take Care
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screamalexz said 3500 days ago (March 21st, 2008)
prettiness
a beautiful voice especially for 15. i cringe when i think of how i sounded 5 years ago. ofcourse i still do that sometimes now lol. i definitely like this. in a way reminds me of alannah's voice.. hope i didnt spell her name wrong.
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12parsecs said 3392 days ago (July 7th, 2008)
great melody
great vocal melody you have written here. very moving lyrics. and nice arrangement in garageband. the quality of that program astounds and scares me sometimes. it's gonna put old school musicians like myself out of work!

thanks for giving me the heads-up about this tune!
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blindsidedpoets said 3133 days ago (March 23rd, 2009)
Feel
She's got it, the underlying feel for the melody. That's the part that can not be easily taught. And the writing, very well written!
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Outtaorbit said 2963 days ago (September 9th, 2009)
ok
downloaded.......i get it
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MarkHolbrook said 2922 days ago (October 20th, 2009)
Yes!
Love the dragon spawn vocals!!! Wish she did more... This is excellent... Nicely done sir and maam!
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Vaisvil said 2843 days ago (January 7th, 2010)
wow
this is excellent!!
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CrazeeFlootGrrl said 2843 days ago (January 7th, 2010)
Omg, that was a great song!
And your voice is amazing! PS Your dad's real proud of you!
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CrazeeFlootGrrl said 2843 days ago (January 7th, 2010)
And oh!
Would you like to collab sometime? I'm a teenager who enjoys music as well! I think your voice would be great for some sorta rock song, if you'd like to collab!
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Char said 2843 days ago (January 7th, 2010)
Very,
very nice song. I totally missed it. Lots of talent there. Thanks.
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CrazeeFlootGrrl said 2709 days ago (May 21st, 2010)
She needs
to upload this version and any of her other songs on this account to her own account now so people can hear allll of her great music! Cheers!
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strangedream said 2632 days ago (August 6th, 2010)
Dear Dragon Spawn:
Absolutely love this...wow. You sound a lot like Amy Lee of Evanescence, which, in my opinion, is a compliment. I love the rich alto tone of your voice. This song actually also has a little bit of a Bjork feel to it. I love the part at the end where you say "I've stopped trying to hide" with silence behind. I'd like to drag you to my house and record you singing this on a better mic or just mess with your vocals. Your voice is beautiful. I'd easily trade my breathy soprano for your sultry alto. Bravo! Wanna hear more!
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