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Another sketch from 2004 that I have finally gotten around to working into a song. This may be only version one... or it may be the final. Let me know any thoughts or ideas that you think could develop this and take it to the next level.
A glimpse of a lonely heart and her conflicted isolation.
The next level has arrived: A Day In Her Life-the Rebsie Session
Vocals & guitar: me
Copyright 2008 Jack Miller
Lyrics:
G Em
Rising each morning, a muffin and tea by the window
G Em
Gazing outside at clouds drifting by
Am C G
Replaying memories of what could have been
Am C G
Sure of herself, sitting there without him.
___________
G Em
Walking to work, she pauses alone at the corner
G Em
Never a doubt, she always knows what to think
Am C G
Now as she stands there no longer- can she say
Am C G
Regrets her companions, steps off the curb on her way.
___________
Chorus:
C G Em Am
Never so lonely as she was that night
C G Em Am
Never so lonely, never so right
C G Em Am
Never so lonely as she was that night
C Am G
Never so lonely that night.
____________
G Em
Back at the flat, she reaches to open her mailbox
G Em
Hoping to find the letter that’s never there
Am C G
Telling herself no matter, it’s OK
Am C G
She hurries inside, closing the door on the day.
____________
G Em
Dimming the lamp by her bed, awake in the darkness
G Em
Thoughts of the emptiness since he’s been gone
Am C G
Wondering how it is she’ll carry on
Am C G
Re-assuring herself, she did nothing wrong
2008 Jack Miller
Hardware:
Martin DM, Ovation-Applause 148-5, Shure SM57, m-audio mobilepre, ibook G3,
Software:
GarageBand 1
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Nice song Jack &mdash 03/03/08 - 02:57:32 AM
Sounds like it doesn't need any more instrumentation to me - maybe it's a final! Still a little hiss in there - mainly on the vocal mic I think - but that doesn't take away from tthe song or your performance. Went to a Folk Festival with Jan and Alf (& Jane) last week - you would have loved it ;) Good to see you post again - it seems like it's been a while.
Cheers,
Neil [ Reply to This ]
Needs more?... &mdash 03/03/08 - 11:17:37 AM
I originally heard this as just a guitar-vocal... but then I found myself exploring a violin or cello... plaintively accompanying throughout. I think this is why I wasn't sure if it needed something more to "complete it." The hiss.... that damn pet snake of mine keeps sneaking into my recording studio!
Thanks, Neil. That must have been a good concert you guys took in... cheers. [ Reply to This ]
Folk &mdash 03/03/08 - 05:42:38 PM
One of the headliners was Peggy Seeger, although there was actually a fairly eclectic mix of music from olde English folk songs to zydeco. A really good day of high qua;lity music.
Neil [ Reply to This ]
Great &mdash 03/03/08 - 04:06:30 AM
Oh, how i love the vocals... Has a good sound... A beautiful melody... Really a great song... If you ask me, then this sounds a the final version.. It has a great feeling, this song.... Great work... [ Reply to This ]
Vocals... melodly... &mdash 03/03/08 - 11:21:17 AM
I haven't sung many songs in this higher voice. I like it when I can pull it off as I think I do here... but it is nice to get confirmation... thanks. The melody has goes back a few years. I always liked it and finally took the time to find a story... the words that seem to match the mood of the melody... again thanks for generous comments. I am glad you like this.
Jack [ Reply to This ]
Really nice, Jack &mdash 03/03/08 - 05:55:00 AM
Musically it sounds really great! I'm listening on mediocre headphones and the mix sounds a little on the dark side maybe a tweak or two on the mids. (I think on the guitar track)
The chorus is absolutely beautiful... very well written. For some reason I am reminded of "She's Leaving Home". [ Reply to This ]
Yes... She's Leaving Home.... &mdash 03/03/08 - 11:29:50 AM
AC- I definitely thought of that Beatle song a few times as this one came together. Nice to know you did, too. The mix probably is a bit on the dark side, partially due to the mood I wanted on the song, but also a possible consequence of my less than successful efforts to "equalize out" some mic recording hiss... not to mention the Martin is naturally a bit bassy and booming. The chorus-- glad you like that. I recorded the vocals three times and added the other guitar to hopefully create some added impact there. So maybe it worked! Thanks, Adam. [ Reply to This ]
Good one Jack &mdash 03/03/08 - 07:25:14 AM
This one is very profound Jack, very true, and can apply to us guys as well. Loneliness sucks!
God bless you,
Rick
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guys &mdash 03/03/08 - 11:39:13 AM
You got it right there, Rick. All of us have fallen into traps and prisons of our own making. This girl needs to take, what for her would be, a big risk. Contact the guy... own up to her part in the relational difficulties... in effect, embracing, rather than denying, her flaws would lead to relationship. She has it backwards.
Best to you, my firend! [ Reply to This ]
Ahhh... Jack &mdash 03/03/08 - 07:48:42 AM
Nice waking up to a new Dadai song. I can relate to lonely- and to missing people deeply. This girl needs music. Hey, weird.... I downloaded this song to iTunes (on random play) and right after it played, "Every Night" by Paul McCartney came on. They go together perfectly. Your song is very touching, and well sung and played. [ Reply to This ]
Waking up.... &mdash 03/03/08 - 11:47:45 AM
Is always nice, considering the alternative ;)
"Every Night"... I haven't listened to that song in years. Your mentioning it made me go back and find it and listen. That is lovely song. It's neat that you think they go together. I'll take that any day. Great to have you stop by and leave such nice comments.
Jack [ Reply to This ]
good to me &mdash 03/03/08 - 09:06:33 AM
the refrain almost has a moody blues flavor to it. I think its solid all the way through. I might have detected a slight loss of the high end, but it could be my speakers. You create an entire mood. passionate and heartfelt. [ Reply to This ]
Good then... &mdash 03/03/08 - 12:56:40 PM
I hadn't thought of the Moody Blues in relation to this song. Someone else mention that. I hear what you're saying... the layered, reverbed vocals in the chorus. The high end is a little lacking... I think you are hearing it right. Thanks for stopping by and thank you, Karma, for the nice comments. [ Reply to This ]
~ &mdash 03/03/08 - 09:57:32 AM
I think you could add an electric tuba with heavy distortion and this tune would still be nice...
But, seriously: this is a very touching song...and, as I watch my little one grow, I can't help but think of her possibly living this, as did I and so many men and women...wish I could protect her... [ Reply to This ]
Tuba it is then... &mdash 03/03/08 - 01:38:54 PM
heheh. Tough material when thinking of real lives. Yeah, if only we in our youth had the wisdom born of the many years of living. Best to you and your daughter. And thanks for the thoughtful comments. [ Reply to This ]
FINAL! &mdash 03/03/08 - 10:20:04 AM
Very beautiful! I really love your voice and guitar playing. Thanks so much for sharing this with us! [ Reply to This ]
Is that final? &mdash 03/03/08 - 04:09:01 PM
Thanks, Stacey. From someone like you who makes a lot of beautiful music with great vocals, your comments are indeed appreciated. Take care. [ Reply to This ]
Sounds finished. &mdash 03/03/08 - 11:54:39 AM
Despite the distortion noise I hear in the mix this is an excellent piece of songwriting.The chorus is great,as A.C stated a really strong Moody Blues feel in the vocal.Really fine tune.
Blessings, [ Reply to This ]
finished distortions... &mdash 03/03/08 - 04:12:06 PM
Good to know that despite the mixing/recording issues, the song struck a chord with you. I especially appreciate your comment on the songwriting. Much thanks.
Jack [ Reply to This ]
Dadai..... &mdash 03/03/08 - 02:38:25 PM
...Jack , can't stop listening to it..& 'singing' to it...man I'd love to hear a GOOD female singer with You here...it would be a 10 for sure ! ...& if I only new how to record this & practice a bit singing(still sound like a crow lol!am a smoker) & record myself singing with You...is their a simple way for me to do a thing like that?(donno if I'd want to ruin yours - it would just be FUN to try I mean for myself to get the hang of it -
: ) : )
This is marvellous Both Your singing & guitarplaying...just LOVE IT (tear in my eye) : ) Remins me of Life before I was Christian & Life before MJ ! also of a great party 8 )ThankYou so much for dl ! Faved !!
Helena [ Reply to This ]
Good idea... &mdash 03/04/08 - 11:43:47 AM
A female singer... definitely would add a different dimension to this. I have no idea of how you could best record your vocal, not knowing your setup. But give it a shot if you'd like.
Your enthusiasm and generous comments are always enjoyable for me. Thanks so much. [ Reply to This ]
... ( : &mdash 03/05/08 - 02:35:00 PM
...Humbled by Your generosity Dadai..I dont have a setup
:( : ( hardly know how to use the technology of the computerworld . I will keep this in my head...Courtsey to U Jack . Be Well & REALLY . I mean it- try to get a great female voice to go w it & You'll have a G E M plus 2 songs Lol !completely different : ) 8 )
Many Great voices here...tX Again You're one on my toplist
Helena [ Reply to This ]
Bravo &mdash 03/03/08 - 02:38:59 PM
Jack: 2004 was an incredible year...for both of us.
This is Dadai and Garfunkel. Cool. [ Reply to This ]
2004.. &mdash 03/04/08 - 11:45:44 AM
and maybe more. Thanks for the support and encouragement, Richard. As we keep saying, let's do another song.
cheers [ Reply to This ]
poetic interlude &mdash 03/05/08 - 02:27:26 PM
In your words, my friend:
Now we need to stop despondency
and find anew ascendancy [ Reply to This ]
A Day In Her Life &mdash 03/03/08 - 03:21:20 PM
just another awesome folk ...as I said before
its acomplete song a gem when ever you want to
ad oramints willshine , great lyrics indeed
thnx for sharin such gem my friend !! [ Reply to This ]
Thank you, Feter &mdash 03/04/08 - 11:47:42 AM
You're a great musician, friend, and positive influence. I especially appreciate your comments about the song lyrics. Much thanks.
Jack [ Reply to This ]
Excellent song writing Jack, &mdash 03/03/08 - 04:43:43 PM
but you really need to finish this off with a full on production. Maybe a Bass, some drums, a little lead guitar fill here and there, possibly some piano parts sprinkled around tastefully. It's such a great bit of writing that it begs to have every advantage to show it off as it could be.
Don't misunderstand, I really love the song as it is because it says so much in such a fine way. But I'd love to hear it produced to the nines.
Anyway, great piece of work here Jack. Kudos on the playing and especially on the writing and vocal work.
Ed [ Reply to This ]
Version 2? &mdash 03/04/08 - 11:53:54 AM
You may be on to something, Ed. I don't think I have the expertise to pull that off by myself or with my setup. I'd be open to hearing any more you have to say, though. I originally envisioned this with more instrumentation, but opted for the simple folk take. Your comments are welcomed and it's neat to know you think this is a good song. What I think I need sometimes is a talented bunch of collaborators, a good recording studio, and George Martin. Think you could arrange that? ;)
Much thanks... [ Reply to This ]
nice sweet... penultimate &mdash 03/03/08 - 05:21:40 PM
Not quite final, I would suggest bringing the guitar level down slightly, it is a little boomy and sounds like it may be clipping sometimes on the left, or at least getting close. But the overall sound, music, lyrics, and singing are exquisite.
ttfn,
Drakonis [ Reply to This ]
penultimate... &mdash 03/04/08 - 11:58:29 AM
yes, I need to revisit the mix. And your suggestion on the guitar level is a good place to start. Thanks musch, Drak, for listening and for your input. Cheers... [ Reply to This ]
Pretty tune &mdash 03/03/08 - 05:28:32 PM
Beautiful heartfelt guitar and beautifully heartfelt singing.
The harmony sections add a very nice change of dynamic and warmth of tone.
Fine work Jack! [ Reply to This ]
Heart... &mdash 03/04/08 - 12:03:04 PM
Hey, Rebsie... thanks for coming by for a listen and for your nice comments. Early on when I was practicing this song, I wondered how this would be if it was sung completely by a female vocalist. I did think of you. If you find yourself bored... needing something to do, I'll send you the guitar track. I know I'd look forward to hearing that. Again, thanks.
Jack [ Reply to This ]
How true. &mdash 03/03/08 - 05:50:39 PM
Hi
oh this song was brilliantly sang but also brought memories back that are painful but so emotionally sang
thanks.
Peace
Dee [ Reply to This ]
memories... &mdash 03/04/08 - 12:07:32 PM
yeah, they can be painful at times. Hope things have gone better for you... I have to say, though, I am glad to hear this song touched you, and I appreciate your generous comments on the singing. Take care, Dee. [ Reply to This ]
wonderful song Jack &mdash 03/03/08 - 09:08:20 PM
This must be the day for sad songs eh? I really enjoyed your singing in this. You did a great job. Although sad, it is beautifully performed. Thanks for this jewel! [ Reply to This ]
Song Sung Blue day... &mdash 03/04/08 - 03:45:30 PM
in honor of Neil Diamond. Yep, a few ballads telling sad stories of late. Yours is a beautiful song and I'm glad you found your way here to take in another audio ennui. Thanks for your nice comments, Gail. [ Reply to This ]
Enjoy &mdash 03/04/08 - 12:52:22 AM
how you paint a picture of love gone a way. I think you seem to be at a high level of creativity when you sing about lost love. You have a nice hauntingness about your style. Especially like the texture of the guitar and how it is recorded so will. High vocal noes are very effective. I think these types of tunes are my favs of mine of yours. The romantic lost love soulfulness really brings out those creative juices in you it seems Jack!
Way to go! [ Reply to This ]
creative sadness? &mdash 03/04/08 - 04:26:26 PM
Well, Bill... you hit on something I hadn't really thought about. I do have a number of songs written around the theme of love lost. You inspired a thread on the topic that I just started. It's encouraging to know you liked my meager attempt at fingerstyle acoustic and the song in general. I am always glad to see you come listen and comment. I really appreciate it... cheers, ex-tiler. :) [ Reply to This ]
Wonderful as it is &mdash 03/04/08 - 03:22:56 AM
A piece of highly enjoyable music, to me does'nt need anything more than this. I've downloaded to be able to enjoy in the future, and I will never feel thre is anything lacking. Instead it is oaded with inner quality that works as medicine for my mind. [ Reply to This ]
From his kitchen... &mdash 03/04/08 - 04:29:56 PM
I like your new picture, heheh. Well then, maybe this is it. I may play around with the song some more. There is a possibility of a violin addition, depending on someone who is considering it. But reading your generous words reinforces my decision to just go with this version. Thanks, Curry.
Jack [ Reply to This ]
Great song, Jack &mdash 03/04/08 - 01:18:50 PM
Great chord progression, fun to play too. Well written; can I use this at the coffee house? "I'd like to do a song by a Mr. Jack Miller..."
Naw, where am I gonna find an electric tuba player in Buffalo?
Seriously, nice song, Jack, and with your permission, I'll play it.
Cheers,
Joe [ Reply to This ]
Buffalo boy... &mdash 03/04/08 - 01:28:58 PM
I actually lived just outside of Buffalo for two years as a kid (born in Albany). So I am kind of a Buffalo native. Glad you like the song, Joe. And you certainly have my permission to sing this... I'm flattered! I think you can swing it even without the tuba... just tell them it was written by an old Buffalo boy from way back... heheh. Thanks, and best to you... (still a collab out there somewhere for the two of us...)
Jack [ Reply to This ]
no other &mdash 03/04/08 - 03:14:08 PM
instruments needed...powerful and touching as is......try a noisegate on the hiss......
free noisegate http://www.macmusic.org/software/version.php/lang/en/id/9651/ [ Reply to This ]
no other... &mdash 03/04/08 - 04:32:53 PM
like Mcboy. Thanks for you succinct and thumbs-up review; and mucho thanks for the link. You may have helped solve an ongoing problemma. Cheers. [ Reply to This ]
Song &mdash 03/04/08 - 04:09:05 PM
Vocals are really well sung. Chord marks are nice. Now I can play around with the idea at home :) Is the chorus two takes or an effect? Either way, I like the way it sounds!
Thanks
Bill [ Reply to This ]
Song &mdash 03/04/08 - 04:34:49 PM
Bill, thanks for the nice words about the chords and singing. Play around with it and let me hear if you come up with something you like. The chorus was three separate vocal takes. Glad you like the song. Thanks. [ Reply to This ]
a keeper! &mdash 03/04/08 - 04:55:05 PM
cool song
I played it on my laptop speakers for now, they 'buzz' a little on the guitar..
Violin would sound wonderful, with flute or recorder would be nice too. Pretty darn good with the elements you have, tho...
. - Harold [ Reply to This ]
keeper.. &mdash 03/04/08 - 09:39:29 PM
Hey Harold, great of you to take the time while traveling... (I think I saw something about you being in Detroit?) Any way, I appreciated the visit and the comments. Take care and thanks.
Jack [ Reply to This ]
very nice! &mdash 03/04/08 - 10:48:24 PM
a forlorn ballad. and it only took 4 years.
A nicely written tune from the eleanor rigby files. besides the nicely done vocals I also like the story here. an odd coincidence, i have one i did 4 years ago along the same line. i keep thinking i would go back to it, but it just never happens. it must be in a odd time signature that throws me. well' maybe in another 4 years.
very nice tune Jack, I liked it. [ Reply to This ]
Better late than.... &mdash 03/05/08 - 10:26:30 AM
The eleanor rigby files, heheh. I like that. Vic, I hadn't thought of that song in relation to this one (although "She's Leaving Home" did come to mind). Interesting.
Maybe you need to pull out your old tune and we'll put them both out on a 45 rpm (after fighting over who's song goes on the A side :)
Always good to see the old vaccuum cleaner avatar of the Vicster. Thanks. [ Reply to This ]
Nice &mdash 03/05/08 - 11:10:18 AM
From across the pond... &mdash 03/05/08 - 11:19:50 AM
Thanks, Dave... for dropping by and listening. Nice to know you like the tune. I see you are new here. I'll be sure to check out your music. Cheers.
Jack [ Reply to This ]
Very lovely &mdash 03/05/08 - 04:17:36 PM
Thank you, Len... &mdash 03/05/08 - 04:31:39 PM
Nice vocals.....nice lyrics, nice everything! &mdash 03/06/08 - 12:55:25 AM
So genererous of you to post the chord changes....Very soulful piece [ Reply to This ]
Chord changes... &mdash 03/06/08 - 11:07:09 AM
Hi Grathy. I figure most people (like me) could figure out the chords if they wanted to, but it's nice to make them available for those who really would like them. Thank you for your nice comments. I am glad you like the vocal, the lyrics... everything. Cheers.
Jack [ Reply to This ]
Impressive! &mdash 03/06/08 - 11:07:24 AM
A very great song here Mr. Jack, amazing playing and as always your lovely warm vocals. Just another GEM from you! Thanks a lot for sharing... Enjoyed!
Take Care
- Yeman A. Al-Rawi [ Reply to This ]
Yeman.. &mdash 03/06/08 - 01:32:52 PM
your words are very nice compliments. You are very generous, especially coming from a musician as skilled as yourself. Thank you.
Jack
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When it got &mdash 03/09/08 - 09:35:35 PM
to," never so lonely" I was hooked! I think this could be built up with drum and bass., It also stands alone with a power that a full band could not capture. I really enjoyed this alot thanks for sharing it!!!!! [ Reply to This ]
Hooked by the hook... &mdash 03/14/08 - 06:04:26 PM
So, I guess that's why they call it a hook, eh? Hey, Egob... glad to know this one got your attention. There will be another version posting soon, but not a full band one. Stay tuned.
Thanks!
Jack [ Reply to This ]
A Day In Her Life &mdash 03/09/08 - 11:55:17 PM
Wow - this is just very very lovely Jack. I don't think it needs more of anything - just perfect the way it is. Thanks! [ Reply to This ]
Well... &mdash 03/17/08 - 10:55:26 AM
thank you so much for the comments, magna... As you know by now, there is a new version with Rebsie. So, there was something more... something better, eh? I think so. V2 is my favorite of the two, without a doubt.
cheers. [ Reply to This ]
Beautiful &mdash 03/10/08 - 11:46:36 AM
Really beautiful.... I still love this song.... Good lyric.... Just what i need..... Thanks for sharing this...
Jakob [ Reply to This ]
Nice &mdash 03/17/08 - 07:36:07 PM
rolling movement with the guitar throughout this song with a nice melody and great lyrics telling the story..... and that makes a good song. The chorus is hauntingly lovely and I like the smoothness of your voice on this too, cheers M [ Reply to This ]
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Cheers,
Neil
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