i would add a little tape echo to the piano. there are three notes equally spaced (sounds like triplets?) have the echo delay match that interval. that way the three notes continue on and fade away on that pattern. why? i dunno - it would be more hypnotic that way perhaps?

as for length, that's about right for an ambient piece.

but i might either pace the transitions a little faster (just a bit) - or else stretch out the fade-ins and fade-outs so there are much broader swaths of gradually changing mixtures... but that's just me.

if you go for faster transitions you'll either need to develop some more material, or else reuse a part, which might actually hold the song together more tightly (the listener will recognize when it comes back, which is good, but it also means you may need to switch it up a little so it's not exactly the same thing the second time).

the flute-like during 6:00 is nice, but i would make it louder, and possibly add a hint of some sort of simple rhythm - maybe a distant closed high hat or something.

i would also end it by bringing back the original piano setting, again by gradually fading it in. but again, that's just me. i like to tie up a song with a signal that it's the end. recapitulating the beginning is a nice way to do it. but there's a million ways.

don't get me wrong, this is very nice as is. just some ideas...

thanks!

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Hi
thanks for the feedback great! I did get some of what you said but not all
I was thinking that I should have brought the piano in a bit later and yeah end
on the piano too. I think i was also a bit impatient because i only worked on this
mix for a couple of hours =then uploaded it. really appreciate your listening
thanks
Peace
Dee

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very nice ...and yes its a good spehric sund ..
you need to slice it a bit ..and add more layers
in the future ...its very long dear lol ...I almost
slept ..but realy very nice start there ..wished
you grow with it more and add more themes over it
thank you for sharing dear !

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Hi Feter thanks a lot especially for taking time to listen. Yawn lol
I thought this may be a trial for you to listen to and listen you did it is quite longlasting. lol
'Your a star'
I truly understand your a very patent man with me and a great teacher
I have asked someone to callab on this hopefully. Thanks for the feedback too.
Peace
Dee

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Soothing, meditative chords, I like the mood and the ambiente in this track. One can float away :-)

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Hi wow was just listening to your sentimental journey it was blinking brilliant
and thank you so much for your very welcome comments and giving me a visit too. Cheers.
Peace
Dee.

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and calming, a spacial soundscape. Love the piano bits, would like to hear a vocal on it perhaps? :)

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Thanks Dave very much apreciated your very kind welcome comments-
and for taking up my offer to do a callab with your vocals/And not mine. lol
cheers.
Peace Deex

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Big Calm and mysterious ambient. I just like it!
CharlyDee|C|

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Hi charly cheers for your great comments, you are a great artist and I admire you greatly too. So this is a real honour that you took the time to visit. and listen. Cheers.
Peace Dee xx

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...reflective music here....i could see this in a movie...where the guy or girl is walking down a dark lonley street....thinking "what have i done"!...nice tune dee

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Hi Mark cheers I saw that in my minds eye also now you came to mention it.
Good abservations and thank you so much for listening.
I love your latest one as well it was brilliant as usual.

Peace Dee xx

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...is beautiful Dee. I am not an expert in this genre so I can give no suggestions. All I can say is that I enjoyed it.
B

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Hi B awe thank you for describing the song as beautiful you are so kind
cheers B I am made up.

Peace Dee xx

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Well done Dee. You are developing really well, it looks like you are taking on board peoples feedback. Thats really good. SmokeyVW has put forward some very good ideas that you can use for the next ambient tune. This is still a very nice, relaxing tune as it is, for which you should be proud.

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Hi Keith
I have indeed been listening and learning and also from yourself too.
Thanks Diviner I feel very honored and really pleased that you like this track too. Cheers.

Peace Dee xx




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Love them simple and ambient. Of course you could do lots to this but I like it as it is.

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Hi
thanks for your great commnets and for taking time out to visit my page.
Peace Dee.

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Hey Dee,

It sounds so cool. This could be used with a trance beat starting on the eighth bar and then fading near the end when the piano part comes in again. It does sound good the way it is but I can hear that beat.

Frank.

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very much for your comments and feed back there is actually another later version already that I created called the BeginningOfTheWorldPart1.1 On my home page.
But, that is also a very good sugestion too Cheers
Peace Dee.




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