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FLAWED (redux) by stacey [Email]

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Uploaded: Apr 10, 2008 - 10:38:55 PM
Last Updated: Apr 10, 2008 - 10:38:55 PM



Description:
So, I took the advice of my respected fellow MacJammers, and also, just to make things interesting, today, I purchased a set of bongos, and my first electric guitar, It's bitchin! So I set out to redo this song today, and it's still rough, so please bear with me as I figure this all out. The vocals are sketchy right now, and I don't think I have all the guitars tuned properly. This is getting technical! I also changed the order of the lyrics a little bit.

Anyway, thanks in advance to all who may listen and comment and give suggestions as to how I can improve this song. I think it's worth the extra work. Do you?

Thanks again,
Stacey K. Black

Lyrics:
FLAWED
Stacey K. Black

she stares into the mirror for a long time
cataloging every feature into assets or flaws
when she decides flaw well she just paints it away
when she decides asset then she can get through one more day

she tries to hide her pain behind a mountain
a mountain made of nameless faceless wastes of time
one by one by one they disappoint her
and even one more day of breath won't help her learn

breathe easy on your way up
breathe easy cause we'll all fall
breath easy on your way down
breathe easy cause we're all flawed

he thinks his own happiness lies elsewhere
he looks into every outstretched hand offered
and ultimately those hands come up empty
if he'd look into his own he might finally see

breathe easy on your way up
breathe easy cause we'll all fall
breath easy on your way down
breathe easy cause we're all flawed




Hardware:
Mac PowerBook G4, Lambda Lexicon interface, audiotechnica condenser mic, takamine electric acoustic guitar, epiphone electric guitar, toca bongos, and a glass of chardonnay.

Software:

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all flawed... &mdash 04/11/08 - 12:25:24 AM
Indeed...i've identified with that notion for what seems AGES, now!

I really like this song--i love the way you've interpreted it vocally. Gorgeous!

I can't really critique anything here. I just know I really enjoyed listening :)

thank you for posting and sharing this here at MJs!

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FLAWED &mdash 04/11/08 - 12:35:46 AM
Just Incredible singing ...great great setting
if insteruments you put to back up your singing !!
thnx alot for sharin such wonderfull gem !!

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.... &mdash 04/11/08 - 09:44:24 AM
i'll have to listen to the other one again to see what was changed. it still sounds beautiful to me. bongos are always fun. i ought to get some. if there are flaws in the recording the passion and quality of the song hides them.

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Thanks so much &mdash 04/11/08 - 10:32:15 AM
for your kind words!

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Electrifying! &mdash 04/11/08 - 10:53:57 AM
hehehe. Oh... it's only an electric/acoustic... pfft.

This definitely has more power.

BTW... Black Jack Daniels is hardware. Chardonnay is software. ;)


--- Joe

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No Joe! &mdash 04/11/08 - 01:04:56 PM
One electric acoustic, and one electric slashin' rippin' squealin' geeter. Of course, when I play it, it sounds like a piano. I gotta get to shreddin'!

Thanks man!

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Ooo... &mdash 04/11/08 - 03:26:31 PM
Now I see... an Eppy.

Soon you'll be wearing a leather pantsuit and doin' the splits. ;)


--- Joe

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lovely &mdash 04/11/08 - 10:54:04 AM
engaging lyrics. beautifully sung.

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Wow! &mdash 04/11/08 - 01:02:25 PM
Wow! I love the emotion in this! The lyrics are very original and very good. And your singing is just wonderful, and very powerful. What a talent!

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Very cool &mdash 04/11/08 - 01:13:57 PM
Love your singing - great vocal performance on this. I love the high harmony and the contrast between the verse and chorus. The lyrics are very good, with great images and clever lines ("nameless faceless wastes of time" - great line...) and I think the recording sounds very good. The guitar sounds are very nice - lovely acoustic sound. Very cool song, and terrific performance. Nicely done. Kudos. Peace.

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Ok... well... &mdash 04/11/08 - 01:25:08 PM
Wow... You just go out and get and ax and bongos and whip them into this!? Wow...

It's really extremely good!

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Thanks! &mdash 04/11/08 - 01:37:52 PM
I really appreciate your comments!

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I luvved this ... &mdash 04/11/08 - 10:33:19 PM
.. the first time I heard it ... and now I luv it even more .... those HARMONIES kill me ! This one is definitely going on my very elite FAV list .... why you aren't makin a bjillion bucks by now still floors me girl ! I would much rather wake up to this playing on my clock radio than what usually wakes me up any day !

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You're doing a lot right, Stacey... &mdash 04/12/08 - 09:48:03 AM
The song remains strong, and I really do believe that THAT is the most important thing. The song is strong, and it's worth as much work and time and attention as you can give it...

Things I like: I definitely hear the two different guitars, left and right, and I think it sounds great. I like the way you start the guitar intro and give a little pause before launching in, and use pauses throughout the song. That gives the thing real breathing space, and busts it out of feeling like it was played to a click track; it sounds like we're hearing it played live.

Your vocals are terrific, both the lead and the harmony.

Continued suggestions for tweaking (since I sense that you're still working on this) are:

When the extra guitars and bongoes and things come in, at least over headphones, it seems as if the vocals are less present. Experiment with a dB or two less of the new instruments, or a dB or two more of the vocals.

Collect some opinions on the bongoes. I like the IDEA of them, but am unsure if they are quite right.

Are you mic'ing the acoustic guitar? It sounds a little bright to me. I'd experiment with mic placement to get a little more wood in there without getting boomy. The electric will give you some sparkle around the edges. The acoustic SOUNDS like you're going from the pickup.

I might suggest a couple possible pieces of gear to check out. One is no longer made, but I see used ones in music stores and on eBay: the Yamaha MagicStomp Acoustic. It can add life to an acoustic pickup, if you are going direct. Similarly, the Fishman Aura pedals, if well matched to your guitar, might do something similar.

I think this song would love a well played bass. I hear a little bass line in there, but I think it's coming from one or more of the guitars, or am I wrong?

Love the ending.

I continue to think this is a strong and even brilliant song.

Ed




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