I give you props for tackling this kind of music, which i find very difficult to put lyrics to and has little structure to follow. Yet you succeed in making this a very listenable song. It has a jazzy pop appeal and although it does not have a defined central chorus, you kept the vocals/melody varied and lyrics interesting enough to give it some rise and development. The weakness of this song is the rather monotonous flow of the music and its persistent lack of complexity, but your vocals more than made up for it i guess. Again, I was surprised at how effective your voice is and how well you did the harmonies. The background music could need stronger and more vibrant percussions and probably some drama-adding strings in the later part. Altogether a very commendable effort that shows more your musical and vocal versatility.

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the background is pretty simple and does get a little boring as the song goes on. I did leave it that way intentionally to place more emphasis on the vocals (and to challenge myself) but now that you point it out, there are definitely pieces that could be added that would probably add to the overall feel of the song. Thanks for taking the time to give your opinion. I really appreciate it.

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I can't have anything to add over Leon's comment by how could you make this song better. Wonderful job!

Take Care
- Yeman A. Al-Rawi

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thanks for the listens and comments on my two latest.

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I enjoyed it begening to end. Strong vocals.
Thanks, Russ

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as it is!

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alright! I'm glad it's not sounding unfinished to you... that's a good sign.
thanks

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You sing so well. What a catchy tune. I am very impressed and enjoy your music. Thanks for sharing!

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Nice RnB, man) My only advice is to add at least one interval to the chorus to make it more different from the verses.


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good suggestion.

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nice backround music as well for this.

I am amazed that you have a lower score. From the music I've heard and the quality of your vocal, it doesn't seem right that you have a lower score like this. Like the subtle addition of the strings,nice!



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woah man!!! you sing good dude

keep it up. we should collab over a willbill track

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