are so good ya know? O.K. You ask. Good honky tonk tune, and you had some pretty good guitar licks in there. Two things I would recomend. Bring up your singing a little, I am not a singer but it was hard to hear you in places. Second try putting down the rythem then mixing those chops in. Good time tune.
Thanks Russ

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you are absolutely spot on, and it's not the first time I have done this.....it just shows why you shouldn't a)mix entirely thru' h/phones and b)keep persevering with singing when your voice (such as it is ) is getting tired and c)make sure you post the best take......Jarvo

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like this Chris - great song/lyrics and beautifully played. Like your vocals... a lot. But where do you find a Honky Tonk and a turnpike in York? (Whatever they are?)
Cheers
Len




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yes I may have got a bit swept up in the mood and over blew some of the lyrics ....but hey.....'ts fun,cheers Len.
Though there is a dodgy pub down the B1237,which may count....or not!!
Jarvo

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Man this is so good ..I like this so much
very nice pickin ..great vocal work ..!!!
thnx alot for sharin this cool classic country sound !

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Feter thanks for dropping by ..always welcome....Chris

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This has a fun quality to it and an interesting sound. At the same time, I didn't find that the 2nd and 3rd stanzas added anything new to the song that wasn't already present in the first verse. From the perspective of effective songwriting, I feel that each verse needs to be adding something of import and "advancing" the story.

I also felt there were some cliches, one or two of which were dated and/or "over the top" ("dirty boozy music", "old motorcycle's ready to ride", etc.).

The "hook" to this song, perhaps, is the vibe itself? That is, lyrically, I don't know that there is a true "hook" that would grab the listener, but maybe the overall vibe is sufficient to do so?

All in all, this is a fun song with a cool feel to it. Nicely done!

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I appreciate all the comments that you've made during my short time on Macjams,even if sometimes it feels like you've just been mauled by a friendly grizzly bear!! :-)
No,seriously, I mean good constructive and informational feedback is absolutely what I crave and why I am here.In the little time that I have been on here I have learned more and been offered more advice than in 9 months on "My Soundclick" which has a wholly different approach from its members.Nuff said on that ...yes some of the lyrics are a little contrived.. and I actually cringed myself at "my old motorcycle" etc lol but okay I'll tinker some more ...glad you enjoyed the basic idea tho', two fingers to the weekday, weekend here I come........... Jarvoid


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Great playing and hilarious vocal delivery! Boomchicka indeed! I love it man!

Be well!

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listened and seemed to enjoy it,I actually have posted a duff take so I'm even more surprised at the feedback that I'm getting ,thanks again......


Jarvoid

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vocal has an early kristopherson feel .. very cool .. only small nit .. up the vocal levels a wee bit ... is always easy to second guess yourself when the horse is outta the barn but honestly i love the raw chickaboom live groove here alot

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I goofed up and posted wrong mix but what ya gonna do...... Jarvoid Thanks for the listen

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Country. Super enjoyable! You and Feter should do a collab.

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for the words ....who knows what may occur.......Jarvoid

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Hey Jarvoid !
I love it. You sound really good. A nice chill out sound.
Nice guitar too. I am going to download it as well.
The lyrics are great.
Hey !! Now don't you get too drunk Ya hear LoL Might fall off your motorcycle. hee heeee. Well done.
Peace Dee.

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Needs a little polishing, but there's no denying your ready for the weekend. lol

Bring up the vox a little and you might try using a little compression on the vox to smooth the levels out some. And mowguy3 has it right about putting down the rhythm and then coming back to play those chops and fills.

Nice tune, look forward to the new mix when you get-r-dun.

Ed

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I just do not know what to do with this song,this is a simple gtr and voice arrangement and when played thru h'phones actually works...but then that's the danger of mixing with'phones isn't it ? I will try and do another mix and re-record this .Thanx for your honest input ,it is a relief to get a kick up la derriere sometimeslol.

Jarvoid

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I just do not know what to do with this song,this is a simple gtr and voice arrangement and when played thru h'phones actually works...but then that's the danger of mixing with'phones isn't it ? I will try and do another mix and re-record this .Thanx for your honest input ,it is a relief to get a kick up la derriere sometimeslol.

Jarvoid

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