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Description:
This is a song ive just written and recorded earlier. it was done fairly quickly and i don't think its really finished yet so im submitting it as a demo.
Lyrics:
inside, crawling like bugs
skin tearing like paper doves down wrong
mystic eyes
to mysticise me
fallen down
dont pick me up dont carry me
CRAWLING
CRAWLING
INSIDE
MY SKIN LIKE BUGS
CRAWLING INSIDE
Fear of dying
fear and loathing
you've fallen down
cant pick you up, wont carry you
make it on your own terms
CRAWLING
CRAWLING
INSIDE
MY SKIN LIKE BUGS
CRAWLING INSIDE
Copyright LBizzle Music 2008
Hardware:
MacBook Pro 2.4ghz 17"
Software:
Logic Pro, Acoustik Piano,
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Mystic &mdash 05/07/08 - 04:32:09 PM
great structure built upon the piano ...
very nicely singing .you can lay down the piano
bit back ..I m enjoyin this ..wish the guitar get bit
higher .thnx for sharin !! [ Reply to This ]
Thanx &mdash 05/07/08 - 04:42:12 PM
Theres a lots in the mix im still working on. The piano is fairly high in the mix and i think i wanna reduce the reverb in the vocals as well.
Thanks for your comments
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somber song &mdash 05/07/08 - 05:54:51 PM
Demo? I think it's much better than that! This is really good. You have a great voice and I enjoyed listening to this alot. There may be a few parts that may need a teeny bit of polishing, but overall, Great job. I look forward to your completed version. [ Reply to This ]
Thanx &mdash 05/15/08 - 01:45:23 PM
Like the...... &mdash 05/08/08 - 04:02:00 PM
natural piano sound, although I'm sure it's keyboards. You should keep it kinda' like this, but have more instruments join in as it builds. Sort of a Cold Play feel. ya know.
I like your stuff.
Dave [ Reply to This ]
crawling along &mdash 05/08/08 - 04:02:20 PM
I think you are off to a great start here with this moody song.
Lyrically, the crawling chorus is a powerful centerpiece. However, I think the general theme of crawling could be explored a bit further in the verses. Right now your thoughts are veering off in a lot of different directions. The song would be more dynamic with a unified theme.
The basic melody is solid and the soundtrack forcefully presents it. I would like to hear something step forward during the musical break - maybe that fuzz guitar - to play a bit of a lead against the melody.
Well - that's just my feedback - take it for what it's worth. I wouldn't make any suggestions if I didn't think it was a good start : > [ Reply to This ]
Cool &mdash 05/13/08 - 05:34:18 PM
Thanks for your input and ideas. Im still working on the song and your ideas are very helpful. [ Reply to This ]
Mystic &mdash 05/10/08 - 11:59:22 AM
What a great voice you have and such a lovely song- In a sombre sort of
Way. Very thought provoking. i think its Fantastic!!! Brilliant production. Thanks for sharing. I loved it and will dowload it also.
Peace Dee [ Reply to This ]
Thanx &mdash 05/13/08 - 05:32:12 PM
This is &mdash 05/13/08 - 05:38:42 PM
a great song - I really enjoyed it - I'd agree that there is a bit too much reverb on the vocal but it didn't detract from excellence of the song.
Peter [ Reply to This ]
Reverb &mdash 05/15/08 - 01:47:54 PM
Yeah the reverb is too much. I tend to make that mistake a lot.
Thanks for your comments. [ Reply to This ]
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very nicely singing .you can lay down the piano
bit back ..I m enjoyin this ..wish the guitar get bit
higher .thnx for sharin !!
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