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| Confounded said 562 days ago (May 8th, 2008) | |
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Positive suggestions Thank you darkonis for you support and suggestions, yes the is a beat in the song, which starts from first of it, it has too much bass so it made some problems for me in mixing, I'll try to fix it by limiting frequency og that bit hope it will work, or as you said, lowering master volume will help, The sire already has hall reverb effect but I will add more to check it out how it becomes. Thanks and feel free in telling your suggestions. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| Confounded said 562 days ago (May 8th, 2008) | |
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Positive suggestions Thank you darkonis for you support and suggestions, yes the is a beat in the song, which starts from first of it, it has too much bass so it made some problems for me in mixing, I'll try to fix it by limiting frequency og that bit hope it will work, or as you said, lowering master volume will help, The sire already has hall reverb effect but I will add more to check it out how it becomes. Thanks and feel free in telling your suggestions. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| Confounded said 562 days ago (May 8th, 2008) | |
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Thanks bro Thanks for your welcome, your choice and support birdman. It was very nice for me to see positive reactions from you. Rock on and stay high. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| Diviner said 563 days ago (May 8th, 2008) | |
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Loved it from the begining with the warped vocals. All the sounds are really powerful and love the melodies/harmonies that you have created here and very atmospheric esp when sirens kick in. A very good first submit. Well done, cracking track. Check out my latest song called Space Program (Space Race 2009)
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| Confounded said 562 days ago (May 8th, 2008) | |
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Well Thanks Diviner for supporting my first song in here, it made me glad. Take Care & rock on. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| Confounded said 562 days ago (May 8th, 2008) | |
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Hi Hi Dee! Thanks for you support and for your suggestion, it's really nice for me to hear that my personal feelings have good reactions on other musicians. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| ic42 said 562 days ago (May 8th, 2008) | |
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it is a lullaby in terrors it is difficult to relax. it sounds stressful there. a lullaby is needed. this music is bleak. it is sadness in the ears. it is beautiful. it speaks to this bleak heart too. thank you for the lullaby. 0x0 Check out my latest song called futatsu 0x01
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| Confounded said 562 days ago (May 8th, 2008) | |
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... Heart touching comment. thanks... yes it all comes from inside. and is seems you what inside is, what stress is and what sadness is... Take care man. "my bleak heart beats steady" MDB Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| kassia said 562 days ago (May 8th, 2008) | |
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Confounded This is a very powerful piece of music. Wow. You took me on quite a journey with this one. The only suggestion I have is to maybe try out a few different sounds for the breathy flute part around 5:00. My ear was wanting it to be something a little harsher, a little bit brighter to go with the feeling of the piece. The flute just seemed a little too subdued - not...angry enough, not dissonant enough. Thank you for sharing this with us - alot of emotional honesty in this piece. I look forward to hearing more from you. Check out my latest song called Deep Majesty
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| Confounded said 562 days ago (May 8th, 2008) | |
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hi Hi Shay, Thanks for your coment and for the great support, and I will try your suggestion on the song to see what happens. I'm happy that I could marque my feelings to listener. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| LunaTrick said 562 days ago (May 8th, 2008) | |
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Fine brooding piece of music Builds nicely to an interesting climax with the drums. It works as an instrumental - but I could imagine a Lisa Gerrard or Azim Ali type of vocal crooning from the middle of your mix. I actually liked the volume and placement of the siren - which brought some positive tension at the right moment. I look forward to more of your work! Check out my latest song called Luna Gypsy Heart II (Eternal Firelight)
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| Confounded said 562 days ago (May 9th, 2008) | |
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Thanks thank you for your positive comment and support, sure if I had access to lisa gerrard I would for her to sing ;) Take care. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| davisamerica said 558 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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right then first.. a very big welcome to macjams ... amazing piece of work .. a true lullaby to the terror of the soul in stress and fear .. powerful work ... i actually have no suggestions to improve this as i found it to be quiet compelling as is ... i suppose it is a tribute about where you are ... amazing! Check out my latest song called No Son(egobandit band)
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| Confounded said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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Thanks Thank you for the welcome and for your idea about the song. These sentences give me the enrgy to work more on it. Another good thing here is the level of understanding netween members, may cause they are artists, and an artist must know about the inside! You suppused the song write, but a sad and sorrowful or even tired lullaby. A lullaby for my beautiful country which is demised by some idiots, and for my modern-sick and stressful city with it's depressed atmosphere, hard rules, hard lifes and blah blah blah... A lullaby for myself from my inner feelings, for a mind which is blowing from thoughts... Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| lengold said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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I found this to be deeply moving - an extraordinarily beautiful piece of music. I also welcome you to Macjams. Cheers Len Check out my latest song called Dodgy Doughnut
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| Confounded said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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Thank you Thanks for the welcome, and ofcourse thanks for your nice idea about the song... :) Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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Artful probing Confounded: We welcome you to MacJams. Your intro work is fantastic. Music doing the heavy lifting in a sea of emotions. Peace and love. |
| Confounded said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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Peace Thank you Richard, yes, it's all about emotions... I'm glad that you guys enjoyed my work. Peace Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| thetiler said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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The breathing sweeping synth sure is a great background for this wonderful movie track type instrumental. And in that is chuck full of great sound effects very well placed I think. A wonderful addition to MJ and of course you as well. Thanks for such a great intro to us MJers. Check out my latest song called The Bluebird Cafe (with two other guest)
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| Confounded said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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Thank you Thank you Bill, for the welcome and comment. I'm glad that I'm here. Peace Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| magnatone said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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Mideastern Lullabye Davisamerica just started a forum thread about this song - I totally trust his taste, so came over to have a listen to this. I'm completely stunned. This is one of the best things I've heard on MJ, period. It's filled with emotion, conflict, grief, hope, HEART. You've put this together so perfectly - even though some of the suggestions I've read below are probably good ones, I can only focus on how amazing this is. I'm excited to have you at MJ and hope to hear much more of your incredible talent transformed into music. If this is an example of what you can do, we're in for an ongoing treat. Welcome to MJ! Check out my latest song called Symphonic Smackdown
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| Confounded said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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: ) Hi Karen, yes, davisamercia made me happy with the post. Thanks for your intrest, your comments and the welcome. I feel something good about here. I liked it, so I will upload more... peace Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| ageofthedeathtree said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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wow a piece that certainly shows a LOT of talent! i absolutely love the mood your music portrays so perfectly...very thought provoking and VERY well done. i'm highly impressed, and i really look forward to more material from you. i can't wait to see what you'll have next! thank you for sharing this piece, it is truly wonderful! sincerely, age isbell -sons of hypnos Check out my latest song called Liar's Oath (sons of hypnos w/heightened)
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| Confounded said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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Thanks Thank you age, motivating comment. I'm glad that you've got what I wanted listeners to get from the music. Peace. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| iG.STUDiO said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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Beautiful Loved it. Check out my latest song called Le Rêve De Solange
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| Confounded said 554 days ago (May 16th, 2008) | |
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: ) I'm happy then. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| jiguma said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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Welcome to MJ! Like looking into a deep well - beautifully sad piece of music - full of longing, and I detect a hint of optimism. Excellent first post Amirreza. Greetings from Australia! Neil Check out my latest song called Lost In Translation (w Mike Watkins)
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| Confounded said 554 days ago (May 16th, 2008) | |
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thanks Thank you Neil, nice welcome. yes, there is a hint of optimism. Peace. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| Outtaorbit said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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It's not all dark there is a feeling of hope ..... untill the sirens.... very beautiful thank you...... please do more. Orbit. Check out my latest song called Sea Shell Blues and Alannah
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| Confounded said 554 days ago (May 16th, 2008) | |
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yes it's true Orbit, and maybe a little more in the ending. Thank you. Peace. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| damiengh said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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Welcome How great it is to have your talent be added to MacJams. Welcome, welcome welcome! Check out my latest song called Tea and Scones
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| Confounded said 554 days ago (May 16th, 2008) | |
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nice what a warm welcome, thank you. : ) Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| Mystified said 557 days ago (May 13th, 2008) | |
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an unsettling calm ...that builds to alarm. A composition with much depth and breadth, darkness and light. Beautiful... Check out my latest song called Father Time
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| Confounded said 554 days ago (May 16th, 2008) | |
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deep deep describing comment. thanks you. peace. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| craft said 557 days ago (May 14th, 2008) | |
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how deep This song express emetions and dark feelings.. I simply love it.. Check out my latest song called Blue Lights (feat. Spleenveil)
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| Confounded said 554 days ago (May 16th, 2008) | |
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deep thanks, Simple and deep comment. peace. Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| michael2 said 557 days ago (May 14th, 2008) | |
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very nice really great sounds and love how it progresses. started out a little dark, but there is the sound of hope running through it for me. this would work beautifully as a soundtrack piece. welcome to MJ and I am looking forward to more of your post's. Check out my latest song called Behind Enemy Lines (w/Bud and Particle Dots)
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| Confounded said 554 days ago (May 17th, 2008) | |
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michael thank you Michael, yes you are right. I myself look at it as a soundtrack sometimes... Peace, Check out my latest song called Che Shod? (What Happened?)
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| bud said 557 days ago (May 14th, 2008) | |
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Welcome to MJ What a fine piece of music - atmospheric and emotional - with a strong development throughout. Really well done. I'll be back for more. Check out my latest song called eye for you (w/particledots and michael2)
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| egobandit said 556 days ago (May 14th, 2008) | |
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heavy with a warm but emotional movement to it. It has a kind of calm after the tradjedy feel. Enjoyed it much and welcome to MJ's Check out my latest song called when its love
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| Monkaton said 556 days ago (May 14th, 2008) | |
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Lullaby I liked the overall feel to this piece and the sythn sounds are appropriate and very nicely done. The recording sounded fine to me over my computer speakers. My only suggestion is to drop the drums at the end for something simpler or tympani rather than a set of drums. Your piece has a classical feel to it and I think the classical drums would emphasis the feel. Overall, very well done and welcome to MacJams. Check out my latest song called Darkness of the Night
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| shavingronaldscar said 556 days ago (May 15th, 2008) | |
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word! I too caught the forum thread. great work! I'm not sure I agree with the constructive suggestions that have been given below. One thing I would say is that the synths come in too loud and strong when the drum beat kicks in. I think they dominate in a place where so many nice little things could come through strongly instead. But mixing is an art unto itself, (as is illustrated by the presence of disagreement,) and I feel that you have accomplished what you set out to accomplish. beautiful work! Check out my latest song called Way Down FIlth
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| Skean said 556 days ago (May 15th, 2008) | |
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Nice Very very nice composition all in this fits so well together.. Kudos And welcome to MJ's. Check out my latest song called Walking seeking & depressed
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| chipan said 554 days ago (May 17th, 2008) | |
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Persian Lullaby I just wanted to add my welcome to Macjams. This is a wonderful atmospheric piece. Very well done. I look forward to hearing more of your work. chip Check out my latest song called Psalm 107
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| screamalexz said 553 days ago (May 18th, 2008) | |
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... nice build up to start. i like the use of the siren it was unexpected and than it starts sounding like a storm brewing in the background. pretty cool. Check out my latest song called Die (Album Version)
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| VicDiesel said 553 days ago (May 18th, 2008) | |
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Dark and sweet Interesting track. You move between various modes. The beginning is the most adventurous, with some interesting sound manipulation going on. Then lots of big synths with a couple of subtle filter sweeps. The bass drum every measure sounds strange. As if its character is not constant, and also it sounds a bit off the beat. It's probably on the beat, but shifting it forward might psycho-acoustically help a bit to make it *feel* on the beat. The siren section is pretty cool. That initial drum hit is wonderful, and the low rumblings are pretty gut-rumbling too. The more traditional drums are mixed very well. Nice job. That bass at the end was a surprise, but a good one. In all, an interesting track with lots of cool sounds. Good stuff. Check out my latest song called Desert Stars
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| BossHook said 553 days ago (May 18th, 2008) | |
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Such deep atmosphere - great sound sculpting and welcome here! Check out my latest song called You're Like Whiskey
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| davajonah said 553 days ago (May 18th, 2008) | |
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Great soundscape Very atmospheric. Really nice job on this and one for my ipod. Thanks for sharing! Check out my latest song called Pavlov's Dog
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| massa said 552 days ago (May 18th, 2008) | |
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Great atmosphere! Really liked the atmosphere of this song... got my mind dreaming around... very nice! Check out my latest song called Song for Collab
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| lavalamp said 552 days ago (May 19th, 2008) | |
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I read..... drakonis' comments, and I found the mix to be very nice. We really don't state.of.the.art recording studios, do we? The piece itself, it very haunting and artistic. Some also mentioned soundtrack. I could see that. Outstanding job. And WELCOME. Dave Check out my latest song called Googolplex Times Zero
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| dajama said 552 days ago (May 19th, 2008) | |
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Very nice Very effective use of synths, and the sounds you use are terrific. There is a great atmosphere throughout the track, and I like the arrangement. The intro works very well, and the use of rhythm is effective. Very cool. I look forward to hearing more of your music. Welcome to MacJams. Peace. Check out my latest song called Across the Wire (MJRF)
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| richardhowardjones said 549 days ago (May 21st, 2008) | |
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MERCI For this is what God meant when he handed out talent. Salamati! Richard Check out my latest song called STANDIN' IN THE RAIN
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| Alannah said 547 days ago (May 24th, 2008) | |
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OH Wow .... .. the beginning reminded me of a cross between Tuvan Throat Singing ... and the Bhuddist Men's Choir ..... kewl ..... there sounded to be a few hints of (Drakonis' Ember) there ..... and then WOW there are those creepy WAR sounds which were so MOVING ..... what a great MIX .... full of every emotion ..... Check out my latest song called I'm Drownin' - Smokey VW (feat Alannah) + Outtaorbit
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| Char said 519 days ago (June 21st, 2008) | |
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Not really something that lulls you to sleep but rather, it gets your attention. Hope is resilient. You are very talented. Thanks. Check out my latest song called Break Away (Mark Holbrook & Awigze)
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drakonis
Welcome to Macjams! What a nice introduction piece, I like it a great deal. I hope it is OK to make suggestions? I think this is very good, and worth making sure to push it to perfection (it is not far from perfection now.) There seems to be a little problem with the mix, it sounds possibly mixed too "loud", it is close to clipping, or maybe it is too compressed? Maybe lower the overall volume slightly, and reduce the compression a little? The siren that comes in is perfect, and very chilling... but I might suggest lowering its volume slightly and giving it more hall-reverb, so it sounds further away. That might make it more realistic sounding.
But those are the only suggestions. Overall, great writing, great guitar/bass work. This does give a feeling of helplessness, ennui. Very well done! I'm off to tell some other Macjammers to listen to you. I look forward to more music from you, after I recover from this one :-)
ttfn,
Drakonis