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A revisit to a previous tune. I made many changes and am looking for opinions.
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Feter
There s a real powerful feel on your guitars work ...
(maybe the rethym guitar be bit lower volume) ...great
singing as ever my friend ..great rockin song and a
very good productiion ..always enjoyed yours ..thnx
alot for sharin !!!!!
mowguy3
Feter, It sounded pretty good when mixing with the cans.Sounded pretty good with the monotors. Only when I upload do I get the surprises. I noticed it as well and am not happy. But thanks for the listen, and glad you liked it.
Be Well, Russ
Skean
I kinda love this compose I wish I could help you with some details... But in my ears it's sounds good... Thanks for sharing.
Take care
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Kenta
mowguy3
you liked the song. Thanks for stopping by.
Be Well, Russ
egobandit
But I like it that way! when I look in the mirror I'm not shure either! love the feel of this I didnt hear your previous version, but This one sounds great!
mowguy3
at times. Thanks for the listen. Glad you liked it.
Take care, Russ
MarkHolbrook
I think I really liked the previous version of this tune!
The guitars sound great on both sides.
The vocal seems almost too close and centered over my left eye in the head phones... but that may just be the headache from work!!!
I think I'd like it more if you compressed the vocals some and backed them off a tiny bit. Not much. Just a little. Maybe a tiny bit of echo or verb on the vocals might give them a little polish.
Overall I really like this tune Russ!
mowguy3
In many ways I like the first version better,I was just trying to get a angry, frustrated kind of a day to day march thing going on. Thank you very much for the recommendations on the vocal aspects of this tune,I will keep them in mind.
Thanks and be well, Russ
drakonis
The intro is good with the drums, then the rhythm guitars, then the lead, then the bass stepping in.
Overall music is very nice and catchy.
Bass could come up a little, drums back a little I think.
The way you play the halting rhythms on the guitars is really good, but because they are separate rhythms, stopping at different spots in the measure from each other and being panned to the left and right, I find that on headphones it creates a bit of a back-and-forth (L/R) distraction while listening to the music... perhaps fold those two guitar parts closer to center?
I like your singing voice, but it too feels a little "stilted" when you sing... this song feels like the singing should be more languid... let some of those syllables linger, draw them out at the end of lines more. You don't... want to sing... like... Captain Kirk! :-)
The lead guitar has a nice bite, but it is almost too sterile... wonder if a teeny bit of far-off echo on it would help a bit.
The entire mix sounds gorgeously clean and sparse, but there's room for a little bit of room-reverb on your voice perhaps?
I sort of like it sparse like this, you could probably even reduce the drum complexity a bit... sounds pretty good to me... I had to tighten up my "critique hat" a bit to come up with suggestions. Hope these are helpful!
ttfn,
Drakonis
mowguy3
Yes a big help. Lots of advice to keep in mind next time. I have tried to work with echo,and some other effects from time to time and it just sounds kind of phony. I will keep working on the to much to little aspect.
I have started a little note book with your's and others ideas and sugestions for future music. Thank you for your time and for sharing a bit of your musical JuJu.
Be Well. Russ
I have heard this one before and loved it then and love it now too.
As you are aware I am not an expert.
Awee it does sound more Poignant now though.
Downloaded and will listen often as I do all your others.
Thank you Russ
Peace Dee xx
HenriROGERsoloandbands
I like this version better .
I agree with Drakonis suggestions .
The lead guitar could enter later and be a lil louder when there is no voice .
I enjoyed the listen , the voice and the rythmic guitars rythm interplay especialy .
I really dig the guitar riffage in here Russ. The mix seems well balanced and clean to these ears. Vox is up front where it belongs.
Really good stuff my friend!
Be well!
lengold
enjoyed listening to this. I think the guitars and drums sound perfect to me. Great lyrics and sung very well too.
Cheers
Len
TobinMueller
Solid balanced writing. No frills, straightforward approach with an honest appeal. In my ears, two major critiques:
The sound is a tad too up front. I think, from the very beginning, the drums need a tad more distance/reverb; perhaps the entire track could use a touch of reverb. (However, when I listened in headphones, I didn't have the same reaction. Still, start with the vocals, add a touch, and apply the same to the entire mix via a master channel and see what you think.)
Second, the song sounds stiff, squared off, due to the MIDI precision and loop-like repetition in the drum track, the sameness of your vocal performance across verses (that fails to give personality/visual reality to some of your lyrics), and the lack of a bridge or break that might be able to both reset the ear and make us listen more closely to the most important part (whatever that might be) of your story.
Consider re-singing some parts, avoiding singing "on the beat" so much in order to give more meaning to certain lyrics. Consider more fills or drum changes (not making the part more complex, since complex MIDI drums almost always sound fake, just adding a touch of variation). Also, your snare sounds exactly the same every time you hit it, which isn't real. Try and vary the snare, using velocity, EQ and other things. That might sound like a time-consuming pain, but I want to visualize a real drummer, not imagine a drum machine backing you up.
Hope this helps.
woofer3
I think maybe a touch of reverb in the percussion dept. Excellent song and performance. I know exactly what you mean when you say "only when I upload do I get surprises" - I get that all the time - still my ears are shot to pieces.
Really good song.
dajama
I really like the bass and lead guitar on this, and the vocal is really good - a real Dylan sound. I like the lyrics on this, and the singing is low-key and restrained - just what the lyrics need, I think. As for production, the drums sounds a little flat to my ears, and the lead guitar could be a little forward in the mix, while the rhythm could be a little lower. These are really just nits I'm picking though! I really like the song and the performance. Nicely done. Thanks for sharing. Be well, my friend. Peace.
mowguy3
Kind words and advice. I just keep working on the vocal and recording aspect of this new found joy. Thanks for stopping.
Be well,Russ
michael2
nice song. has a sort of neil young/dylan vibe to it. i really like the way you sang it too. as for improvements I can see, there isn't too much:
i would open the master track, put the AU matrix reverb on medium room and lower the dry/wet level to about 16-19%. would give the track a little bit of breathing room. i use that a lot to get rid of the digital sound (too clean and present much of the time). too much and it will sound terrible, but just a bit and it makes it sound more like a band.
there is a free plug in called Ambience or maybe it's ambient that is a really nice reverb for vox and drums. you can google it, if you can't find it, i'll send you a link. it's really nice and subtle. you can't necessarily hear it when it's on, but you can feel your vox loosen up and blend in with the music. i love it.
acoustic sounds nice, the electric could come up a bit I think. not a lot though.
drums sound good, I am trying to master MIDI drums too and it's hard to get. There is a plug in called camel crusher that is great for drums. the plug is a sort of distortion thing, but you can use the preset for "tube warmth" and it will warm up the drums a lot.
these are all technical things (of which I am probably the last person to give advice), small at that. the song itself is great. glad you're having fun. I used to live in Florida (between Kissimmee and St. Cloud out in the middle of nowhere). Know what you mean about Skynyrd, I was in high school and people always wanted to hear "flirtin with disaster" by Molly Hatchet.
mowguy3
look into some of your offerings here. I have a long way to go and can use all the advice I can get, so thank you. And thanks for the kind words as well.
Be well, Russ
LunaTrick
Super guitar work and I really like the bass here.
mowguy3
enjoyed this track. It means alot from a artist as versitile and gifted as yourself. Thank You.
Be well, Russ
Char
is to see the lyrics. You sound kind of melancholy and so the style of seeing fits. I think there could be a "bridge"(I don't know anything!)with some jangly thing going on or some whistling, just for interest and variety. Thanks.
mowguy3
This is a electric version of a acoustic track I have posted. So I was a bit lazy with not posting the lyrics. I tend to agree with the bridge idea. Nothing is in concrete. Thanks for the listen,advice and kind comment.
Be well, Russ
SmokeyVW
nice one! this has a real classic feel to it.
the guitar work is nice and clean, but i agree with the comments about the drums seeming too dry.
thanks
mowguy3
it's all midi and with the equipment I have there is not much I can do about it,sorry. I am looking into upgrading in the future but with the economy the way it is I simply can not justify spending the money to go into Mac programs right now. I want to so bad, but for now it's just my little didgital eight track and me.
Thanks for going back in time a little and checking this song out. Glad you enjoyed it, crappy drums and all.
be well, Russ
SmokeyVW
there are ways to get cheap reverb.
you can play back a track through whatever speakers you have in whatever echoey space you can grab - a basement, garage, even a shower. record that and mix it back in.
also, there are free audio tools such as Audacity that provide reverb effects...
Moviz
Sorry I missed this earlier, but glad I caught up...... the guitars and playing of them sounds great..... really nice vocal treatment to those meaningful lyrics..... really nice work here my friend, cheers M
mowguy3
don't be sorry. There is so much fine music here that I find it imposable to keep up. So glad you liked this track. The lyrics are my life at times.
Be well, Russ
sloparts
I could swear I commented on this one back last year, but it appears not. I do remember it though and I liked it then, even more now. This is some good work you done here Russ.
Everything sounds smoother than I recall, so that must be from changes you made to the version I listened to back when.
Great work Russ
Ed
mowguy3
the first recording of this was acoustic, that may be what you were thinking about. I wanted a little grit and volume in it so I did a electric cover. Thanks for the listen, glad you liked it.
Be well, Russ
Richard_Schletty
Thanks for draggin' yourself over to the mic to record this soulful song. Tobin has good crits on performance and production. The main thing is to put yourself within the orchestration rather than so far in front of it. And yes, vary your vocal phrasing, both in the points where you begin singing and in your melody. Can you sing some of the passages a third or fifth higher as you progress?
mowguy3
for listening. Some great advice as well. I will certanly keep this in mind for future recordings. I need all the help I can get and from a guy with a voice like yours this is fantastic.
Thanks again, Russ