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PowerPop meets Country/Americana
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Lyrics
She's a grayhound
Sleek and beautiful
Faster than midnight

She's a Colt .45
Pearl ivory handle
Bulls eye every time

She's my lover
Take a look she's a cold stone fox
She's clever
Brings me love in a diamond box

Chorus
She's a lady Oh
Never had a chance with anyone like that/her
She's a lady
Bringing her "A" game everynight
She's a lady

She's a Renoit
On a canvas
An umbrella on a rainy night

She's a harmony
By a symphony
An opus in the morning light

PC / C
Bridge
If I got to pick one star
To start my own constellation
I would just take her smile
As the start of all creation

Chorus
Song Stats
Hits: 301
Comments: 2
Fans: 1
Plays: 22
Downloads: 0
Votes: 2
Uploaded: Sep 11, 2008 - 02:24:51 AM
Last Updated: Sep 11, 2008 - 02:24:51 AM Last Played: Sep 02, 2009 - 10:15:54 PM
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Hardware:
Pentium Dual Core, Gibson and Ibanez guitars, midi Electric Piano
Software:
Sonar 6 , Mastered with Isotope
Comments
Feter said 437 days ago (September 11th, 2008)
Lady
WO ...man this is a true classic ...your band sound
so tight ..great great singing ...the guitar sound
so perfect ...loved the rockin country like song !!!
a true gem thnx alot for sharin !!!!!
sngwrtr said 437 days ago (September 11th, 2008)
Much to like here ...
The production is good, the singing strong, the melody nice. I'm not sold on the lyrics, however.

I take no exception to the first two stanzas/verses. In the lift or pre-chorus, "stone cold fox" is maybe a bit dated? Women today might even consider that somewhat denigrating, perhaps? Not sure. Regardless, matching it with "brings me love in a diamond box" ... well, first, no surprise that "fox/box" was gonna be the rhyme (paging Dr. Seuss). Second, just how are we to interpret that line? Is it intended as a sly and slightly vulgar reference? This line doesn't work for me in the context of the song.

Likewise, in the chorus, I didn't care for the "bringing her 'A' game every night" line. Who says that about someone they love? Is this guy sitting in a bar telling his buddies that his girl is great in the sack ("She brings her 'A' game every night, fellas!")? Again, it seems out of context.

In the next stanza, we see "Renoit on a canvas" paired with "umbrella on a rainy night." Both are fine images in and of themselves, but in the first two pairings (1st/2nd verse) the images are consistent with one another (greyhound, sleek and beautiful / colt .45, pearl ivory handle). Here we have a painting matched with an umbrella. I thought it had a bit of a jarring effect in that it didn't flow the same way as the other offerings. It's worth noting that the next stanza, you are back to consistent images (harmony/symphony/opus).

As for the bridge ... ah, the bridge! Not sure I'd even use one in this song, but if I were to do so, I don't think I'd use this one. I think the whole star/constellation/creation image is corny. It's been used quite often - mostly in past decades. It was corny then and it's corny now.

Simple solution - lose the bridge.

Again, the playing, the melody, the vocals, and the vibe are all solid. As I said, much to like. I would consider soliciting some more opinions on the lyrical content and see if you can't make the song stronger still by fine tuning the words a bit. Just one man's opinion - please feel free to disregard!

: )

Good stuff!
Check out my latest song called Long Legs Of The Law
BlueDarkness said 437 days ago (September 11th, 2008)
Cool
Awesome critique , much appreciated. My strength is in hooks, sometimes they fly sometimes they don't.

The lyric IS a guy to talking to his buds like you say, and this is how we talk. The Renoit reference does work since most of his "ladies" are either under an umbrella or a parasol.

Lyrically, we should all be self-critical and I know I am constantly changing songs midstream and hardly ever completely satisfied with the end product. Until I get a hit that is.

The "fox/diamond box" line was changed a lot but I wanted it to be more lyrical than factual, as in maybe it's a love note folded in a velvet ring box, or an actual box with diamonds on the outside with something romantic inside it.

I know country music is very matter of fact. If you say something in a line it needs to be tangible and easy to understand ( however for a really imaginative country lyric, check out "Come On Joe" by George Strait written by Tony Romeo . It's a space/time warping delight, a masterpiece of imagery).

As a product of the '70's , my taste lies in powerpop so there's no escaping the perhaps cliched speech patterns we baby boomers lock onto.

One last thing, This is a demo, I am currently auditioning a demo singer/front man for my next product. Hopefully it will be a cat that can sell my songs better than I can.

Thanks again and please feel free to comment anytime.
Check out my latest song called Loveless Love
BlueDarkness said 437 days ago (September 11th, 2008)
Cool
Awesome critique , much appreciated. My strength is in hooks, sometimes they fly sometimes they don't.

The lyric IS a guy to talking to his buds like you say, and this is how we talk. The Renoit reference does work since most of his "ladies" are either under an umbrella or a parasol.

Lyrically, we should all be self-critical and I know I am constantly changing songs midstream and hardly ever completely satisfied with the end product. Until I get a hit that is.

The "fox/diamond box" line was changed a lot but I wanted it to be more lyrical than factual, as in maybe it's a love note folded in a velvet ring box, or an actual box with diamonds on the outside with something romantic inside it.

I know country music is very matter of fact. If you say something in a line it needs to be tangible and easy to understand ( however for a really imaginative country lyric, check out "Come On Joe" by George Strait written by Tony Romeo . It's a space/time warping delight, a masterpiece of imagery).

As a product of the '70's , my taste lies in powerpop so there's no escaping the perhaps cliched speech patterns we baby boomers lock onto.

One last thing, This is a demo, I am currently auditioning a demo singer/front man for my next product. Hopefully it will be a cat that can sell my songs better than I can.

Thanks again and please feel free to comment anytime.
Check out my latest song called Loveless Love
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