Nice tune my friend ,I would good arrangment ..
but yes I think you need to give more time to your
singing ..the opening guitar was bit high and dry ...
it need more sustain ..good rockin song my friend ..
thnx alot for sharin !!!!

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thanks again for commenting
and yes i noticed that too that i MUST take some more time for this thanks !!

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Great melody in this - very memorable. This is a BIG song and would not be out of place on a major band's set list.

Fading at the end and leaving the dry guitar could have been better, but hey, it's still a damn fine tune.

Glad I tuned in.

Jim

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thank you very much for your kind comment !!
glad that you came to my profile !!

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I like the organ and the strings in this, the way the chorus kicks in and how you have ideas for each verse. the vocal line is ok to me.

Your best so far, maybe.

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thanks again, as always, for commenting
and thanks for the critique, too.
but the best song that i've ever done will come soon !!
better watch out for this !! ^^

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....is ALWAYS the next one!

Keep them coming!

Jim

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song - especially the chorus. Love the raw edge to your voice and the production. I agree, keep 'em coming.
Cheers
Len



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thank you so very much !!

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...good ideas. It's all very loud, and as others have said some of the instruments are a bit dry. Agree about the vocals - you have lots of "attitude", but are lacking a bit of subtlety to counterbalance it.

The guitar sound at the end is pretty horrible. I find recording guitars a nightmare, and haven't sussed it yet, but I think some experimentation is needed on this track to set it back in the mix a bit.

That said, this is a really nice track with lots going for it. And respect for the bare-faced pimping self-promotion on the forum: it got me here!

Phil

BTW: there's something about your voice which is very similar to Magazine circa 1979 - go and check out their album "Second Hand Daylight" to see what I mean

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thanks for your detailed comment to my song.
i'm very happy to have commenters as you are one.
i will try to make my guitar recordings a bit better and not this dry ...
when you say you find guitar recordings horrible do you mean mine or just generally for you to do it...?

if you would comment my other songs too i would be very pleased !!!

oh yeah and i will hear a few songs on this album.

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I really like this - It stands on it's own. It's almost a parody of itself - meaning you are expressing what goes thru your head and almost wishin that they would have the same thought for themselves about the relationship. The slightly out of tune guitar just reveals the rawness of it.
reminiscent of tubular bells

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thank you so very much.
as i wrote this song i wanted to make it for everyone who knows this feeling of people who should think more about themselves than about others so i'm glad that you liked it !!!
hope you'll like my new ones, which are coming soon!!
cheers, luke

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