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Abandoned


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SmokeyVW

 Genre: Dance-Club

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album: States
track 1: 3:16 As It Seems
track 2: 4:04 The Fade Away
track 3: 5:45 Abandoned
track 4: 5:42 Never Gonna
track 5: 3:41 I Don' Wanna Hear About It
track 6: 4:19 I See You
track 7: 3:44 Shenandoah
track 8: 5:34 Goin' Away
track 9: 4:52 Cerebral Core Test (MJRF)
track 10: 3:51 States
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Song Description

dual tracked poetry set to techno - go figure
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Lyrics
Abandoned

there's an abandoned car
i'm sure it's abandoned
it didn't used to be there
and now there it is every day

it's parked on the side of the road
and the place where it's parked is very strange

(i think my favorite concept)
(and metaphor is water)

it's not in front of a house
(water)

it's sort of in between two houses
(it can refer to the ocean)
it's a sort of a no man's land
(it can refer to rivers flowing down into the ocean)
i can imagine everybody thinks: oh, well that car is somebody else's car

(it can refer to precipitation falling down on the mountain)
but, it's been there two months now
(into streams)

first it was covered with leaves
(water is interesting)
and then on Hallowe'en someone threw an egg at it

(water has an interesting sound)
and now there's a layer of snow on top
(water flows)

clearly whoever owns this car hasn't been here in a while
(water seems to be a living thing)

and yet every day as i drive by
there it is
(even though, really, fundamentally, it is not)

abandoned
(water is my favorite metaphor)
at least *i* think so

abandoned
(water is my favorite metaphor)

(c) 2008 Bill Grundmann

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Comments: 27
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Uploaded: Dec 10, 2008 - 08:47:07 PM
Last Updated: Sep 09, 2009 - 06:19:56 PM Last Played: Oct 12, 2009 - 09:38:04 PM
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magnatone said 347 days ago (December 10th, 2008)
Abandoned
what a wildly imaginative piece smokey - love the back and forth of the two spoken tracks, adult and child voices - my brain tries to connect them. And the techno track back there just adds this tension that increases - especially with that wild panning around my ears. Very cool!
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SmokeyVW said 347 days ago (December 11th, 2008)
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the connection between the two tracks is tenuous, but there is a little intentional connection between the concepts...

thanks
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bobnisbet said 347 days ago (December 10th, 2008)
Abandon the lyrics
The story is told in the first half of the song, and my 7 year old song and I really like it, great concept. Then the tune goes on with Abandoned / Water is my favorite metaphor lyrics, and I find the lyric repetition drives me to distraction... this is not good! I wish you could do nothing else with the 2nd half of the song, shorten it or make it just instrumental or some other creative solution. Peace, Bob
SmokeyVW said 347 days ago (December 11th, 2008)
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i'm glad you liked the first part.

the second part was meant to evolve into a build up towards the end, where the voices change roles from being voices to just being a sound effect in a techno dance track. it seems i didn't succeed in creating a strong enough crescendo on that. i used a multiband compressor and maybe it leveled out the volume too much? maybe i should have faded out the voices?

thanks
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funkloupa said 346 days ago (December 11th, 2008)
Good..
Good use of loops and the two melodies of keyboard in background is amazing. Suggestion: add a 32 breakdown for mixing.. i work one time a week in a nightclub. Great great job!
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SmokeyVW said 346 days ago (December 11th, 2008)
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glad you like it

what's a 32 breakdown? sorry for the dumb question

thanks!
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funkloupa said 344 days ago (December 14th, 2008)
No,
Your question is not idiot, my english is not good! I mean "break" part of the song where you have a time for mixed an others song. (mixed beat to beat with two song) Anyway... Good work my friend!
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SmokeyVW said 343 days ago (December 14th, 2008)
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i understand.

i know about that idea, but i often forget to do it.

i should start a checklist for myself. hmmm...
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bobnisbet said 346 days ago (December 11th, 2008)
The abandoned car water video
I'd have to find an abandoned car, and video tape it through the seasons, but it would be fun to make a video for this...someday. And the 2nd part doesn't bother me as much the 2nd time around... go figure. Great song.
SmokeyVW said 343 days ago (December 14th, 2008)
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i like the vid idea - that would be way cool - but a lot of work to do a true time lapse piece.

i find my tastes in music change often and randomly. don't know why...

thanks
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davisamerica said 346 days ago (December 12th, 2008)
Bill ....
whot goes on in that amazing head of yours .... very inventive track ... lyrics/poetry is great and the flow on this is perfect. Hats off my friend !
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SmokeyVW said 343 days ago (December 14th, 2008)
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search me. chalk it up to a misspent youth?

thanks!
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DWL said 346 days ago (December 12th, 2008)
Amazing!
Wonderfully inventive and endlessly interesting.

Cheers

Dick
SmokeyVW said 343 days ago (December 14th, 2008)
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glad to have entertained you

many thanks
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lengold said 346 days ago (December 12th, 2008)
Another wonderfully
creative accomplishment.
Cheers
Len


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SmokeyVW said 343 days ago (December 14th, 2008)
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thanks Len!
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Henke said 345 days ago (December 12th, 2008)
Wow,
how cool is that?! As they say, really inventive and - hm - confusing in a nice way. Like Karen I try to connect the two poems, thought eventually they would merge when it came to snow and water, but then they separated again... I have no problem with the second part - repetition is a form of change! - they soon sink into the mind as a kind of voice percussion holding the rythm. Very cool!

/Henke
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SmokeyVW said 343 days ago (December 14th, 2008)
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i'm glad you enjoyed this. this was one of those unplanned projects, i just dove in and this happened.

second half: that exactly how i was thinking of the voices - just part of the techno patterns. Sort of like Little Fluffy Clouds.

thanks


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Ed Hannifin said 345 days ago (December 12th, 2008)
I'll never be able...
...to abandon water in my neighborhood again without thinking of this song...

Actually, getting to work this morning after last night's ice storm was pretty much like this track. Water definitely had an interesting sound last night, and left green and ice on a number of cars... Much covering with leaves going on...Lot of abandoned cars and trees and branches...

Actually, even though I'm being way too literal and linear with this track, last night was like a study in the power that water has...

Did you do the 'kid' vocal?

Ed
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SmokeyVW said 343 days ago (December 14th, 2008)
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that ice storm. my electricity just got restored today.

odd synchronicity about the lyrics and the icestorm.

there is an actual abandoned car in my neighborhood that i extemporaneously described here. the water commentary was also just an ad lib. somehow i got to thinking about weaving them together. i rearranged the phrases in GarageBand to try to suggest linkages...

all the voices are mine, just playing with the vocal transformer again.

thanks


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particledots said 343 days ago (December 14th, 2008)
Fabulous
I think this is absolutely great...great use of voices, words voices....
I am trying to think what it is brining to mind for me and I cant decide if its David Byrne or Baz Lurhmanns song about sunscreen (or could it be both)
Anyway, I love this spoken word stuff
Did I mention I thought this was fabulous

b
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SmokeyVW said 343 days ago (December 14th, 2008)
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guess you liked it.

i suppose Little Fluffy Clouds was in the back of my mind while this happened. could that be it?

many thanks

guess you liked it.


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particledots said 343 days ago (December 14th, 2008)
I thought it was fabulous actually
:-)
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saymme said 338 days ago (December 19th, 2008)
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Very great cool track - who is talikng more than You? I'm smiling through this Smokey KUDOS !!!

"Water is my favorite metafor"
SmokeyVW said 338 days ago (December 20th, 2008)
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i am glad to have brought a smile

it's all my own voice - using the vocal transformer

thanks
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SmokeyVW said 326 days ago (January 1st, 2009)
yippee
they finally towed away that abandoned car! after the last snowstorm, it was gone

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saymme said 324 days ago (January 2nd, 2009)
Hhahahaa !!!
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all Your voice ! Wonderful !! HAPPY NEW YEAR SMOKEY
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Eclectic, at best. I learned some music theory at school, and read a ton about it since. I've listened to lots of music over the years. I once played guitar in an actual garage band and actually got paid to play! Once. Although live performance is an... [see more]

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Electronic dance music is a broad set of percussive music genres that largely inherit from 1970s disco music and, to some extent, the experimental pop music of Kraftwerk. Such music was originally borne of and popularized via regional nightclub scene

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