Abandoned by SmokeyVW
Genre: Dance-Club

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Description:
dual tracked poetry set to techno - go figure
Lyrics:
Abandonedthere's an abandoned car
i'm sure it's abandoned
it didn't used to be there
and now there it is every day
it's parked on the side of the road
and the place where it's parked is very strange
(i think my favorite concept)
(and metaphor is water)
it's not in front of a house
(water)
it's sort of in between two houses
(it can refer to the ocean)
it's a sort of a no man's land
(it can refer to rivers flowing down into the ocean)
i can imagine everybody thinks: oh, well that car is somebody else's car
(it can refer to precipitation falling down on the mountain)
but, it's been there two months now
(into streams)
first it was covered with leaves
(water is interesting)
and then on Hallowe'en someone threw an egg at it
(water has an interesting sound)
and now there's a layer of snow on top
(water flows)
clearly whoever owns this car hasn't been here in a while
(water seems to be a living thing)
and yet every day as i drive by
there it is
(even though, really, fundamentally, it is not)
abandoned
(water is my favorite metaphor)
at least *i* think so
abandoned
(water is my favorite metaphor)
(c) 2008 Bill Grundmann
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magnatone
what a wildly imaginative piece smokey - love the back and forth of the two spoken tracks, adult and child voices - my brain tries to connect them. And the techno track back there just adds this tension that increases - especially with that wild panning around my ears. Very cool!
SmokeyVW
the connection between the two tracks is tenuous, but there is a little intentional connection between the concepts...
thanks
bobnisbet
The story is told in the first half of the song, and my 7 year old song and I really like it, great concept. Then the tune goes on with Abandoned / Water is my favorite metaphor lyrics, and I find the lyric repetition drives me to distraction... this is not good! I wish you could do nothing else with the 2nd half of the song, shorten it or make it just instrumental or some other creative solution. Peace, Bob
SmokeyVW
i'm glad you liked the first part.
the second part was meant to evolve into a build up towards the end, where the voices change roles from being voices to just being a sound effect in a techno dance track. it seems i didn't succeed in creating a strong enough crescendo on that. i used a multiband compressor and maybe it leveled out the volume too much? maybe i should have faded out the voices?
thanks
funkloupa
Good use of loops and the two melodies of keyboard in background is amazing. Suggestion: add a 32 breakdown for mixing.. i work one time a week in a nightclub. Great great job!
SmokeyVW
glad you like it
what's a 32 breakdown? sorry for the dumb question
thanks!
funkloupa
Your question is not idiot, my english is not good! I mean "break" part of the song where you have a time for mixed an others song. (mixed beat to beat with two song) Anyway... Good work my friend!
SmokeyVW
i understand.
i know about that idea, but i often forget to do it.
i should start a checklist for myself. hmmm...
bobnisbet
I'd have to find an abandoned car, and video tape it through the seasons, but it would be fun to make a video for this...someday. And the 2nd part doesn't bother me as much the 2nd time around... go figure. Great song.
SmokeyVW
i like the vid idea - that would be way cool - but a lot of work to do a true time lapse piece.
i find my tastes in music change often and randomly. don't know why...
thanks
davisamerica
whot goes on in that amazing head of yours .... very inventive track ... lyrics/poetry is great and the flow on this is perfect. Hats off my friend !
SmokeyVW
search me. chalk it up to a misspent youth?
thanks!
DWL
Wonderfully inventive and endlessly interesting.
Cheers
Dick
SmokeyVW
glad to have entertained you
many thanks
lengold
creative accomplishment.
Cheers
Len
SmokeyVW
thanks Len!
Henke
how cool is that?! As they say, really inventive and - hm - confusing in a nice way. Like Karen I try to connect the two poems, thought eventually they would merge when it came to snow and water, but then they separated again... I have no problem with the second part - repetition is a form of change! - they soon sink into the mind as a kind of voice percussion holding the rythm. Very cool!
/Henke
SmokeyVW
i'm glad you enjoyed this. this was one of those unplanned projects, i just dove in and this happened.
second half: that exactly how i was thinking of the voices - just part of the techno patterns. Sort of like Little Fluffy Clouds.
thanks
Ed Hannifin
...to abandon water in my neighborhood again without thinking of this song...
Actually, getting to work this morning after last night's ice storm was pretty much like this track. Water definitely had an interesting sound last night, and left green and ice on a number of cars... Much covering with leaves going on...Lot of abandoned cars and trees and branches...
Actually, even though I'm being way too literal and linear with this track, last night was like a study in the power that water has...
Did you do the 'kid' vocal?
Ed
SmokeyVW
that ice storm. my electricity just got restored today.
odd synchronicity about the lyrics and the icestorm.
there is an actual abandoned car in my neighborhood that i extemporaneously described here. the water commentary was also just an ad lib. somehow i got to thinking about weaving them together. i rearranged the phrases in GarageBand to try to suggest linkages...
all the voices are mine, just playing with the vocal transformer again.
thanks
particledots
I think this is absolutely great...great use of voices, words voices....
I am trying to think what it is brining to mind for me and I cant decide if its David Byrne or Baz Lurhmanns song about sunscreen (or could it be both)
Anyway, I love this spoken word stuff
Did I mention I thought this was fabulous
b
SmokeyVW
guess you liked it.
i suppose Little Fluffy Clouds was in the back of my mind while this happened. could that be it?
many thanks
guess you liked it.
particledots
:-)
saymme
Very great cool track - who is talikng more than You? I'm smiling through this Smokey KUDOS !!!
"Water is my favorite metafor"
SmokeyVW
i am glad to have brought a smile
it's all my own voice - using the vocal transformer
thanks
SmokeyVW
they finally towed away that abandoned car! after the last snowstorm, it was gone
saymme
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all Your voice ! Wonderful !! HAPPY NEW YEAR SMOKEY