I'd really like to see this one developed. The first time you
sing "serial killer" it's a bit discordant. The song also
doesn't quite go anywhere. Observation then question. It
answers little, tells no story. I also dislike the Moroccan
beats, but that's just me.

I like the voice, like the samples, but if the song were
longer you wouldn't have to pile them all up at the end,
and you have a fun enough idea to run with.

Sticking out of the "bin?" Trunk, boot, glove compartment?
Boot is a British term for trunk and would give it irony as
well (and slide past most your listeners).

Please tag me an email if you do more with this one.



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Thank you very much for your comments, cj. The discordancy on the first
"serial killer" was on purpose (see the song notes), but maybe I was
overthinking things on this song. I don't think I'll be revisiting it, because I'm
not certain I like it. It's kind of weird.

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I like the concept that you have - with the upbeat
music and the scary lyrics. I like how you are
experimenting as well... however, some of the
musical ideas didn't quite gel, and I felt this way
about your "Rise Up" song as well...maybe you are
throwing too many things into the mix? Hmmm...
your better tunes, like "Smooth as Silk", "These
Tears" and the "Aliens are Dancing on the Milky Way"
had simpler, but more effective music... I'm not good
at picking on specific problems, but It's something to
think about. Anyway, I always look forward to your
tunes.

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Stun, I agree. The truth is, I like to experiment. Sometimes things work, and
sometimes they don't. I figure I have nothing to lose, so I throw them out
there, just in case someone might enjoy listening to them. This one is weird,
and some folks like weird. I had fun making it, though!

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love the groove. interesting little story here. love the
echo background voices... could see this being the
soundtrack for some movie. fun stuff!

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Thank you, compy! I'm glad you had fun.

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Matter of Fact-this isn't my favorite. I applaud your
courage in tackling something along these lines, but with
all due respect, is this really tasteful?

I did not find that the matter of fact way in portrayal of a
serious matter such as murder to be in my own personal
tastes, but as they always say: "Different Strokes for
Different Folks".

Interesting to me was the use of many preset factory
apple loops. Particularly the "Latin Horn Stabs", as you
must have thought were quite appropriate, didn't jive with
my ear. They could be better fit into your piece I think
with some phrasing, whereas they currently are flatlined
and in competition, as they are clearly in a major key, and
they take the focus away from the "darker" themes that
you are trying to convey. I also found the beginning drum
track (also a familiar loop) to be quite out of character
with the rest of the whole piece. I can appreciate a sense
of juxtaposition that you might have been going for here,
but on the topic of murder I don't think that you are going
to pass this off very easily to very many people.

I will have to argue with your choice of genre, but I do
understand that genre is a truly subjective characteristic
for which one should not judge the overall of a piece of
music. So when I say that it surely is more of a jazz styled
piece than a pop sounding tune to me, also noting that
the intended audience would appear to be more of a "cult
classic" type of crowd, I hardly feel this to be anywhere
near the catergory "pop". I will however say that I gave
the benefit of the doubt, as I purposefully ignore the
genre that a piece of music is placed in until after I have
given a fair shot.

If I would have based my opinion on genre I would have
rated this tune very low, and would feel utter regret for
not giving it a fair chance. If I were to offer comments
based upon personal taste, I would have really score it
low. But based upon actual music foundation and
content, I am able to praise the way the harmonies are
written but I don't care for the dissonance that comes
from out of tune vocals, especially through the lines:
serial killer!
serial Killer!

Based upon other's comments in reguard to this piece, I
think that you agree that this one is just not going to fly
so well. I am glad that you enjoyed the production and I
am sure that you have grown musically, which is really the
most important aspect in the end.

Sincerely,
Johnathan J. Stegeman
MidiMacMan.


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It's a dumb song, but it served its purpose for me at the time (dealing with a
frightening experience). As for the genre, every loop I used was labeled as
Latin. I can't recall if there is a choice for latin in the genre pulldown menu.
Maybe I missed it.

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Fair Enough. I am not one who enjoys the whole genre basis of music
classification due to the ambiguous nature and often misleading impact it can
have on the listener. That can definetely appreciate your method of dealing
with a frightening experience. Laughter is good medicine.

Sincerely,
Johnathan J. Stegeman
MidiMacMan

P.S. Feel free to listen to and comment on my work sometime.

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The term latin describes all sorts of music. This is
probably close to Latin Jazz. Listen to Cal Tjader (his
signature tune is Soul Salsa) for a good example.

I keep being impressed how you take loops and turn them
into something that entirely doesn't sound, eh, loop-y.
Cool stuff this.

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Thank you, Vic! Perhaps because I start with the loops and then figure out the
song it helps to make the loops seem more organic. Or perhaps my ignorance
of how things are supposed to be done, helps me. I rarely understand the
technical discussions about EQ and AUs, etc. I tend to spend most of my time
working on the lyrics and melody.

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