As I Sleep

Doadars Uncle

Genre: Rock

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I hope this meets your expectations. I've never been that creative with melodies. But I like to think that's kind of what makes me, me!

"I'm Doug and I can't come up with melodies..."

Anyhow, Enjoy this wordy tune. I hope I took it in a good direction. I guess I can always change it out in the future!

Thanks,
Doug

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Lyrics

Lonely tree,
life's soaked within your leaves.

Blue sky,
touch the edge of the land.

Timeless wind...

Golden light
set you free.

As I sleep a man races 'cross the street. Tight shoes pinch his aching feet.

A tiny leaf quivers in the still but slightest breeze in the darkest woods.

A cat steals steps across the farm, past rusty gates in search of warmth.

A child weeps throughout the night, in mother's arms to shake off her frights.

Grains of sand roll in the flow from once mighty cascades, now are slow.

You're walking through the River in the middle of the night. Trudging steps amplified by the blackness. What eyes cross to meet you in your desparate flight? Slog up the bank and you'll find out.

Rusting sculptures,
crumbling walls,
faces glare from broken halls.

This is what we've made.

Lonely tree,
life's soaked within your leaves.

Blue sky,
touch the edge of the land.

Timeless wind...

Golden light
set you free.

Song Stats

Hits: 1741
Comments: 31
Fans: 19
Plays: 164
Downloads: 85
Votes: 1
Uploaded: Sep 19, 2009 - 12:22:45 PM
Last Updated: Sep 19, 2009 - 01:08:13 PM Last Played: Jun 17, 2013 - 08:50:51 AM

Song License

Creative Commons License:
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Hardware:

Me, my guitars and my mac!

Software:

GB3, midikeys

Comments

sloparts	sloparts said 1368 days ago (September 19th, 2009)
	Sounds like a melody to me Great start Doug, let me check out the rest of it now. Ed Check out my latest song called Quack's Blues

sloparts	sloparts said 1368 days ago (September 19th, 2009)
	Still sounds like a melody to me Like what you've done here Doug. Could use a little less reverb on the vocal, but it sounds good to me. Very nice music back tracks on it. Ed Check out my latest song called Quack's Blues

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1368 days ago (September 19th, 2009)
	Thanks Ed Yes, I'm set on getting off of this raft of insecurity. In the end, it just won't matter! Thanks for the reinforcement and comments in general. I will, more than likely readdress this tune in the future. I'm finding anything that I remotely like is a blast to remake. Thanks again! Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

Moviz

Moviz said 1368 days ago (September 19th, 2009)

I get
that you've got a great feeling for melody and music in general .....and a great lot of 'feelings' that you need to express in songs. As Ed said there's quite a bit of echo on the vocal, but I thought it was even more pronounced because it was coming directly from the left and not from the centre (I'm often accused of too much echo myself LOL). I must say that your vocals sound really good though. There's a very nice sound on the instruments too overall and you play them all well. Regards M

Check out my latest song called He's The Jazzman

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1368 days ago (September 19th, 2009)
	Hey Maurice! It's good to get outside opinions on my questions, from time to time. Yeah, I don't know how to deal with the reverb thing. Vocals often come out muddy. But I also like the feel. I'll have to read up on it, I guess. Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

rabittwhole	rabittwhole said 1368 days ago (September 19th, 2009)
	I am so glad you continued to work on the original track Doug. I knew the lyrics were there and you found them nicely. About the mix .... I'm pretty much ok with the verb on the vocals because it reminds me of ....well you. Really a great tune Doug. Jack Check out my latest song called 2U

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1368 days ago (September 19th, 2009)
	Howdy Jack I didn't know how the lyrics would pan out. I had originally thought of them in a different format for a different tune. That's how that goes. As it is, I cut about thirty percent of the words, from the original. This gives it a completely different feel. I still wonder about writing another set of words for this one... Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

Feter	Feter said 1368 days ago (September 19th, 2009)
	As I Sleep A Lament to the earth ...wonderful voice ... very lovely ..I enjoyed how you treat your guitar ...this is Art ...thnnx alot for sharin !!!!! Check out my latest song called Roll with it

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1367 days ago (September 20th, 2009)
	Thanks Feter I'm glad you enjoy it. You know, I'm touched by your comments. This was a struggle in many ways. Glad to see it through the gates... Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

Vic Holman	Vic Holman said 1368 days ago (September 19th, 2009)
	someone woke up and his name is Doug. very cool and a bit spacey. i'm glad you kept at this one. it's a great aural trip. Check out my latest song called They Must

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1367 days ago (September 20th, 2009)
	Hey Vic! An honor to have your comments. This is the final frontier! Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

MarkHolbrook	MarkHolbrook said 1368 days ago (September 19th, 2009)
	I am Doug... and I came up with a great melody... A great sound... something to be proud of.. this is great feel and soul to it for me!!! Kinda dreamy... really cool. Loving this Doug! Check out my latest song called Find Yourself (MJCC2013)

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1367 days ago (September 20th, 2009)
	Mark! "Life is but a dream..." Happy you took the time to stop by, Brother. Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

b0rn2w0rsh1p	b0rn2w0rsh1p said 1368 days ago (September 20th, 2009)
	Nope, I really like the echo, and the tremolo. It's OK not to have vocals centre (oops Canadian spelling). Really like the structure of the vocals - changing in meter. Awesome guitar break. What kind of electric and processing? Thanks! Check out my latest song called KIRA I

Doadars Uncle

Doadars Uncle said 1367 days ago (September 20th, 2009)

Nice to meet you, Guido!
I'd have to go deep into my files to check the processing. Let me know if you want me to pursue it for you. I don't think I have the same treatment twice in any of my tunes. I'm happy you liked that instrumental section. It turned out to be a nice energy release.

I'm glad you stopped by! Thanks for the listen and comments!

Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

Relic67	Relic67 said 1367 days ago (September 20th, 2009)
	Cool man there's nothing wrong with the melody on this one. I don't think I agree with the criticisms of the vocal recording.... I really like the echo, it works great, to my ears anyway. the vocals sound slightly reminiscent of some 80s type music like echo and the bunnymen or something like that. I like it! great song! Check out my latest song called Someone Else's Thing

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1367 days ago (September 20th, 2009)
	Thanks! Sometimes I'm too close for objectivity. I'm glad I brought out my doubts. It encouraging for me. I wonder if I could pull the verb down a bit for the more fluid vocal parts... but not the echo. I kind of like that part. Thanks for the listen! Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

michael2

michael2 said 1367 days ago (September 20th, 2009)

aw cmon now
you're just being hard on yourself. that melody sounds great to me. my criteria for a melody are: does it work with the song and fir the mood? you certainly met my criteria. think of vocals as just another instrument. i like it Doug, plus the soundbed is phenomenal. is that a 12 string on the guitar solo? I love that sound you got.

Check out my latest song called yes you told me (that you're cynical)

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1367 days ago (September 20th, 2009)
	Nice to see you again, Michael! Too true, I'm being hard on myself. But it can't hurt to ask. But I must loose the drama part. I like the solo, too! I played open chords with flourishes on my Ibanez electric, messed with the timbre and amp simulators and voila! Thanks bud! Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

jiguma

jiguma said 1367 days ago (September 20th, 2009)

A melody's
just somewhere to keep the words Doug, and this sounds like pretty good storage to me.

What a cool song. Lovely guitar sound. I'd probably look at keeping those crash cymbals a little more under control - a bit too many of them for my taste, but a really nice tune (and melody).

Just keep taking those little pills Doug - they appear to be working :)

Neil

Check out my latest song called INTO THE BLUE

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1364 days ago (September 23rd, 2009)
	Well Neil! I haven't seen you in a while. But I've been gone a lot so.... But thanks for the listen. I wanted to have a direct part with the percussion. But maybe I can pick some other way. I might keep the cymbals during the built out parts. Thanks for the suggestions. Glad you like it! Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

MannequinRaces	MannequinRaces said 1365 days ago (September 22nd, 2009)
	As I Sleep Sounds like a lovely melody to me Doug. Nice music bed! Great guitar solo! I get a Neil Young vibe in spots! Pretty slick. Nice mixing and production. Like Neil said above reign in the crash cymbals a bit and this is golden! Check out my latest song called Wolves

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1364 days ago (September 23rd, 2009)
	Adam! A pleasure, as usual. "cymbals" noted. My wife hears Neil Young. Someone recently said Johnny Cash... I can see that, too! Thanks for the visit! Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

gail60	gail60 said 1365 days ago (September 22nd, 2009)
	I still love it Doug you really did such a terrific job here. Such a moody song with so much character and keeps me listening over and over. Really enjoyed it and so glad you finished it up for us. Check out my latest song called Ed - Forever in our hearts

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1364 days ago (September 23rd, 2009)
	Howdy Gail Ahhh, so glad! I was afraid of how to treat the vocals, here. I enjoyed the original tune, and thought it would have worked as an instrumental. I'm happy that I could finish it without spoiling it! Thank you! Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

lengold	lengold said 1364 days ago (September 23rd, 2009)
	I really do like the feel and emotion you get into your songs and production. I am reminded of the great Scott Walker here. Great stuff. Cheers Len Check out my latest song called B E A U T I F U L

Doadars Uncle	Doadars Uncle said 1364 days ago (September 23rd, 2009)
	Hey Len! Not knowing Scott Walker, I'm listening as I type, here. Nice! He really has his independence! Thanks for listening and the thoughtful comments! Check out my latest song called Alone (reboot)

magnatone	magnatone said 1364 days ago (September 23rd, 2009)
	As I Sleep I am Karen, and I wish I could write great melodies like Doug! (is there a support group for that?) Check out my latest song called Wave Goodbye

Godchaser	Godchaser said 1364 days ago (September 24th, 2009)
	Well done Doug I like the vocal treatment as it seems to fit nicely with the psychedelic 60's vibe i'm picking up on,perhaps early Pink Floyd when Sid Barrett was a member.Glad i stopped by! Check out my latest song called sOur GrapEs

Calchas	Calchas said 1354 days ago (October 3rd, 2009)
	At last! Nice job Doug. Very pretty guitar and keys. Music fits the mood of the words really well, and drives the message home. Also really like the way you've effected your voice on this one my friend. Be well!

TERRAPLANE	TERRAPLANE said 1353 days ago (October 4th, 2009)
	Billy Idol Feel here with the vocal style,,for me anyway,,nicely done Doug... awesome guitars!! thanks for the DL,,, T Check out my latest song called COME ON IN MY KITCHEN/ w Pockbluesman