Song, voice, musical execution - all very done.

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Thanks very much. Would love some more comments, so feel free everybody.
Any tips on how to make it better? What works, what doesn't? I wanna know!

Thanks very much though.

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this track needs bigger drums and percussion. rythm section is even more important in this kind of pop. keep tinkerin' :-)

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How do I do that? I can easily add in some more percussion, but I don't know
how to make my main drum part bigger. I'm scared of it peaking....

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AH thankyou so much! I have thickened the drums on a new version and it's
made the world of difference! It sounds so much better with punchier drums.
I won't post it up, because it's exactly the same as this version, but just with
better drums, but I really appreciate your comment because it has made the
track sound so much better.

Anton

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perhaps you could just post up the first 30 seconds?
just curious :-)

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these online signatures are a load of bollocks!

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Such a great voice. It is perfect for the pop genre. You
did some very cool things with the effects, adding fun and
danciness to this track. This track is full of fun, with
timely adolescent sexiness combined with vintage synth
stabs and a tongue-in-cheek attitude. Very entertaining.

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i dub thee a junkyard cutiepie! I see late chiming in on
the comments, seems the macjams peeps covered things.
What I think really works well is your arrangement, good
job!

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You've got a great voice for this sort of material, and the
song writing is good too.

My only quibble is the breakdown section at about 2/3 to
the end. Since the rhythmic synth keeps going it feels like
"I'm making some variation by just stopping to sing". The
pad sound that comes in does not contribute enough, so
this section feels like it needs something else.

Do something with a completely different rhythm, for
instance a halftime feel?

Other than that, this is very enjoyable.

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I really like this track and could listen to this over and over. My only criticism is the "take your pants down" line. It's a bit cheesy, but I guess it also adds to the club atmosphere the backup and lyrics evoke. (ie Nelly's "I am gettin' so hot, I wanna take my clothes off..." ) So maybe the line fits in, but it still sticks out to my ears a bit. But hey, I've added this to my faves.

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This song has the energy and fun that characterizes pop
music. Your musical sense belies your youth. Scored it
7-8-7-7. (I usually don't give higher than 8, so that's
saying much).

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