Interesting collection of instruments. I like the toot at the
end.

Along those lines (the toot), you may make this "live
performance" more interesting if the personalities of the
individual, imaginary musicians came through more. Just
an idea.

Is there a bass in there? I didn't hear one.

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Yeah, the keyboardist's phone rang. His wife is pregnant with their first.

I wanted to get some chatter among the musicians, but I don't have a huge
collection of effects. Maybe I can record some of my own. That'd be
interesting.

Even the crowd is bit too much. I wanted to have a more "club" level of polite
applause.

The toot at the end is my favorite part.

The drummer is a talentless hack. We're thinking of kicking him out.

The bass player was passed out in the hotel room. We had to go on without
him.

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You took your time building this piece, putting it together.
Adding voices. That's good. Really the same section all
the way through with little variations here and there. A bit
repetitive in that sense.

There is some disagreement between the guitar and the
piano in regards to the third. The guitar is playing a
major third (think happy) and the piano is playing a minor
third (think sad). I think its the 2nd note of the 2nd
measure of the 4 measure motif. Use the edit window to
fix that one note. Unless you're going for that
dissonance. Then leave it.

I like your approach of layering voices. And the
production quality is good (the audience certainly adds to
it). Keep creating.

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Thanks.

Yeah. The guitar is a bit much. Maybe I will try to develop something more
appropriate like you suggest.

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Really the same section all the way through with little variations here
and there. A bit repetitive in that sense.

True. I think all of my stuff is repetitive. It's harder than I thought to find
graceful ways to change were the song is going without having it sound like a
train wreck. So I just do the same thing over and over. Thus the short song
lengths. Any longer and they would become tedious and painful to the dear
listener.

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Thats pretty good for your second song. Keep going! 6-6
-6-6.

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Thanks.

I want to work on more but... have found myself listening to everyone else's
stuff on this site. Makes my stuff look (and sound) awful!

There's some really good music here. So far "Chasing Shadows" and "Shinning
Hour" are my two favorites.


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