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my teenage angst song even though I am far from teenage! I need help if anyone can suggest a guitar loop to add!

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get off my phone
get out of my way
last thing
I need is a fight with you to day
you look like hell
and I, m not letting you in

your in the way
not buying what you say

wanna be part of life
hoping I d give you hand
wanna be part of life
you wanna be in my band
hoping I,d give you a hand
hoping to be in of my band

no you can’t be part of my band
and I,m not giving you a hand
no you can’t be part of my band
and I,m not giving you a hand

can’t you see i,m free i,m free

get off my phone
and get out of my way
i m too good for you
and that,s what they say
cying tommorow
laughing today
get off my phone
get out of my way

and you can’t be part of my band
and I,m not giving you a hand
no you can’t
be part of my band
and I,m not giving you a hand
no you can’s
be part of my band

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Hits: 1067
Comments: 8
Fans: 0
Plays: 132
Downloads: 64
Votes: 9
Uploaded: Jan 14, 2005 - 10:30:30 AM
Last Updated: Jan 14, 2005 - 10:41:17 AM Last Played: Aug 26, 2009 - 09:22:13 PM

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	said 1776 days ago (January 14th, 2005)
	Listen Pay no attention to the erratic votes! I'll help to "spice" this one up with you. Remember those harmonies! And think "beginning, middle and end". This has the makings of a great track. I believe in you.

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chikoppi said 1776 days ago (January 14th, 2005)

Great start
You have the makings of a good little song here. I think what it might most benefit from is the addition of some chords. The funk guitar lick and drums just don't seem to be providing enough structure. You might find a few guitar loops that would serve the purpose but you could also consider using the midi instruments to construct your own (maybe a Roland organ would suffice?).

Lyrically it might help to accentuate a particular phrase to serve as a stronger chorus or "hook."

Keep at it!

Check out my latest song called Loop It or Lose It 9

Peter Greenstone	Peter Greenstone said 1776 days ago (January 14th, 2005)
	I feel the same I like your work in general, but this one needs to be developed a lot more. I won't vote on this version because it sounds like a rough draft to something that will eventually be good but isn't ready yet. Build up that arrangement. Do your thing. Check out my latest song called From Nothing

T$	T$ said 1776 days ago (January 15th, 2005)
	. holy shhh your voice is cute. the structure of the music of this song is nonexistant, so thats what it is.. i hope you do something peaches/avenue d esque. your voice would be genius in some funny electro sex jams.. Check out my latest song called repeat v2

eleveneyes	eleveneyes said 1776 days ago (January 15th, 2005)
	add a dash of sparsley love what your doing vocally. I actually like how sparse it is. I think there is enough 'stuff' to keep your interest. Perhaps with a different approach to the mix you can make the existing elements demand more attention. The sparsness keeps it on the twisted side, which to me is the more interesting side. Check out my latest song called Here With You - Better MIX

SlimGirlFat	SlimGirlFat said 1773 days ago (January 17th, 2005)
	Hmm great lyric and concept, but need some good Fattening up on the backing instrument. I love your voice, it has an edgy quality on this track that I really like. I agree with PG that it does sound like a idea that needs more work... SlimGirlFat Check out my latest song called Not Enough

TobinMueller

TobinMueller said 1757 days ago (February 2nd, 2005)

Nice idea
Yes, it sounds like a demo, but having it be a "band"
without enough players kind of fits with the whole idea of
not letting someone in who might actually fill it out more,
you know? I think a guitar solo would be cool, even one
that starts cool and then kind of falls off the map, like
they can't really play, or it is an audition that failed of a
player, or something to help tell more of a story. It's not
just the arrangement that is not quite finished here, but
the story you're telling. Consider adding things that tell a
story behind the lyrics...

Check out my latest song called Forge A New Life (MJRF)

BlackLily	BlackLily said 1665 days ago (May 5th, 2005)
	bitter bitter bitter heh Check out my latest song called Barbie's Letter

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