Crazy, young love...

17 was as interesting and memorable as this piece.

I also was thinking that this was a better song to use
to the last dance with mary jane video.

I was also thinking about the things that got me
kicked out of school.

In general you got me thinking, and that;s impressive
in and of itself. Nice job.

The performance was raw, and the whole thing really
emminated '17' perfectly. Alice Cooper's 18 was
child's play compared to this.

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Thanks for the feedback.

I tried to email you a link to the devil poem, but says you prefer not to
receive email.

the file is at:

http://www.thisflapfirst.com/devilpoem.zip

do with it what you will. The site goes away in 5 days (at least for a
while).

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And, oddly, a little funny, since it's so over the top.

I enjoyed this. The recitation and the guitar are both
powerful.

Many school authorities don't like to deal with
something that is different. Better we should
all be automatons. Beep.

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Heh, yeah, a lot of my stuff is way over the top. When I read this one at
slams I get all sappy and nostalgic with it. Never a dry eye in the house
after. Well, ok, so not really.

I was way into a lot of punk bands with three letter names and a lot of
goth backs with really long names at the time I wrote this. And "Sally" or
whatever it's called was on my mind at the time of the writing. Funny
how I can remember stuff like that, but pretty much everything else from
high school is gone.

Rubber sex doll, dead girlfriend, not really so far apart. :)

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I apologize if you're emails are being blocked...but I've had a monster problem with viruses & had to turn my spam blocker on high....good job on the vocals! Did you see what I meant...my demos sound WAY better on CDr audio, as opposed to compressed MP3's...somewhere along the line, the compression on my computer makes it sound horribly tinty & less powerful. Again....good job & it was fun working with you!

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I can't make up my mind on how to respond to this piece, trying to select from the following possible menu choices:

a) dark comedy
b) honest attempt at articulating the frustrations of pairing with the opposite sex
c) morbid fascination with death
d) remake of the Pygmalion myth
e) a cry for help (I'll leave that analysis up to the Epileptic Gibbon)
f) shock rock (I'm shocked - shocked to find necrophilia going on in the basement!)
g) a purgative (what better way to raise the darkness than turning it into art?!)
h) a demonstration of -10.0 on the feminist scale of sensibility
i) the kind of art you make after watching too many "Halloween" movies
j) a nostalgic 34-year-old trying to revisit the golden days of his punk past

I probably should be shocked by the blatant story and it's unabashed presentation, but I'm not. That's probably due to the times we live in, which generates a numbness from over-exposure to so much over-the-top activities, more than the song itself, which did generate a list of ten topics from me. And that ending is clever. I can see why your English teacher liked it, and the administration hated it.

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I think I find these lyrics a bit easier to digest knowing
that you were 17 when you wrote them. At that age we're
all a bit over-the-top, not? If you had written this
yesterday I'd alert the police, probably....

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coming down to the end I was kinda thinking that you were
talking about some pet that may have died. You know likt
the sound Brandy. But I also got a sense of unrequited love
or admiration, which is what makes this all the more
interesting as it shows what a mind can think and a person
can feel when reciprocation is not there. Now the necrophilic
tendency there is indeed a bit scary. Good work.

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