I like the idea behind the lyrics. I think there's a lot of ground to explore there that you only begin to tap. The vocal performance is great and I particularly like the chorus, but could use more of a set-up through the verse. Why is this guy alone? What does this imaginary partner represent? Etc.

The gutiar is really nice - very rhythmic and the chords make for some strong emotional movements. Sounds great in the mix as well.

The vocal levels are sort of inconsistant. In general I think they're a just little low, but sometimes they peak and recede unexpectedly. It sort of sounds like you were moving around when recording and varied your distance from the microphone. A little bit of compression can smooth out some of those variations in volume.

Great tune. The sound is really full considering its just you and a guitar.


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Thanks for the comments, much appreaciated. I wrote this pretty young, so maybe I could revisit and expand the verses somewhat. I definitely blew the vocal recording somewhat, but I'm afraid to mess up a good take. Overall this song just sort of flowed out of me in about 15 minutes, and I'm glad to hear someone feels it.

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Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.
—Stella Adler


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I agree with Chikoppi about the vocal... a lot of this will be
cured with an external mic... even the guitar will sound
better (and it sounds great now).

As far as messing up a good take goes... did you record
guitar and voice at the same time? If they are on seperate
tracks you could just start a new track for the vocal and
re-record. Keep only what you like.

Great song and you have an awesome voice. I look
forward to hearing more of your music.

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Thanks!

Yeah I made the amteur mistake of singing and playing at the same time, which
messed me up for a bunch of reasons in post. If and when I get an external
mic I'll definitely re-do this one. I really appreciate the compliment, I've always
been sensitive to how my voice sounds to others!

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Life beats down and crushes the soul and art reminds you that you have one.
—Stella Adler


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I look forward to hearing more.

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