Thirsty v. 2.0

joymark

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This is an update to my song previously posted, "Thirsty." This update mainly comes from putting suggestions from atwood1956 into practice, along with application of things learned from "Built-in Audio Unit Effects" tutorial here on Macjams. I am much happier with this version, but still consider it a work in progress.

The vocals are still somewhat muffled, but it was the best I could get after conversion to mp3. The GB file and aiff file sounded much better.

inspired by the poem "I Thirst" by Elizabeth Lyulkin (www.shelovesgod.com).

This is my feeble attempt at a David Crowder*Band style song (ala "Obsession"). DC*B is my favorite group. Learn more at http://www.davidcrowderband.com

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Lyrics

Verse 1:
My Lord, I long to hear Your Word.
My lips are cracked, my throat is parched.
My Lord, I'm longing for Your touch.
My mouth is dry as an empty well.

Verse 2:
My Lord, I need Your cleansing rain.
My tongue is dumb and dry like dust.
My Lord, I'm longing for Your touch.
My soul is like an empty shell.

Chorus:
Lead on and I will follow.
Tell Your stories once again.
Speak to my heart, and to my soul.
Reign in my life once again.

Bridge:
And I long for You!
And I long for You!
And I long for You to reign in my life once again.

Song Stats

Hits: 1656
Comments: 16
Fans: 2
Plays: 211
Downloads: 93
Votes: 12
Uploaded: Mar 08, 2005 - 09:10:19 AM
Last Updated: Mar 08, 2005 - 01:50:08 PM Last Played: Nov 22, 2009 - 08:28:26 PM

Song License

Creative Commons License:
Attribution-NoDerivs-NonCommercial

Song Actions

Hardware:

iMac, PowerMac G4, Oxygen8, Firewire410, M-audio Nova condenser mic, Takamine EG533SG

Software:

GarageBand, Reason

Comments

said 1723 days ago (March 8th, 2005)

Intimacy...

This has more inimacy, it seems, than the first mix.
I think due to just having only your voice and guitar.
Your vocal is more up front than before. In order
to get a good mix down and convert to an mp3,
some things I sometimes do: In GBand I will have
the volume a little higher than sounds right. After
exporting to iTunes and converting to an mp3 it
seems to be more the balance I am looking for.
Also are you converting to best quality 192 when
making your mp3? Hope this helps.

Beautiful song.

Jack

joymark

joymark said 1723 days ago (March 8th, 2005)

Intimacy...
Thanks, Jack, for your further comments. I really appreciate you taking the time to revisit this song.

I'm pretty sure I did choose 192 when I encoded to mp3, but I'd have to double check. Either way, I'll make a special point of it in the future. I'll also have to give the volume idea a try on future recordings.

Again, thank you.

Jeff

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Tom Atwood

Tom Atwood said 1723 days ago (March 8th, 2005)

When we sing we pray twice
at least that's what a sign says in the room where our
church choir practices.

You have prayed twice here. I don't need to repeat my
previous comments about the difficulty of expressing
spiritual longing in words. I like your words in this setting
much, much better. The lone voice, the lone guitar, the
constant strumming are all perfect.

I will leave the technical advice to others re: how to mix
this to your liking. I want you to know this song has
touched me. I believe the world benefits from music like
this floating around in people's heads. Thanks for posting
it.

Check out my latest song called Keep Looking for Jesus (MJRF)

joymark

joymark said 1723 days ago (March 8th, 2005)

When we sing we pray twice
Tom,

Thank you very much for your help and encouragement. It may not have seemed like a great deal, but you have helped me tremendously. Thank you for your comments on my guitar playing. Hearing a guitarist as accomplished as yourself compliment someone who plays at my level is such an encouragement.

I humbly thank you for your praise.

Jeff

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Created for Worship

Check out my latest song called Seek Ye First (with Canon in D)

Peter Greenstone	Peter Greenstone said 1723 days ago (March 8th, 2005)
	wonderful What a beautiful song. You have captured such an honest spiritual longing and love in your performance. Great voice and a simple arrangement with just the right touches. Much enjoyed and moved. Check out my latest song called From Nothing

joymark

joymark said 1723 days ago (March 8th, 2005)

wonderful
Thank you for taking the time to post your comments. I'm still pretty astonished that any of my little songs would garner any notice at all, let alone from so many from different background and musical interests.

Thanks again, and I will make a point to check out your stuff if I have not already (and will some more even if I have).

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Created for Worship

Check out my latest song called Seek Ye First (with Canon in D)

Jim Bouchard

Jim Bouchard said 1723 days ago (March 8th, 2005)

Pretty good
I think the sound is pretty good on this, but I actually liked the synths in the other version. I think this is a good concept to try and record the guitar and voice at one time to capture a live quality, but you should really try recording them separately. Then you can have the optimum mic placement for both instruments, your voice and your guitar. Or use 2 microphones and concentrate on the live mix. Just an idea for the next one, perhaps, because this is pretty good as it is.
It's a good song and for some reason it reminds me a little of Pink Floyd, which probably wasn't your intention, just what I thought of at first.

Check out my latest song called Weather or Not w/awigze

joymark

joymark said 1723 days ago (March 8th, 2005)

Pretty good
Thank you, Jim, for taking the time to listen. I appreciate it greatly.

I've already decided that when I get ahold of a Mac that can handle GB2, this will be the first song I try to record multi-track. I think you're right on that it will keep the live sound but offer more separation in the voicings. (Now if that buy me a new Mac fund would grow a little faster, lol.)

Thanks for the Pink Floyd comment. That may not be where I was going with it, but any slight comparison to any group that proved themselves time and again in musicianship is will accept with honor. (Haven't heard any Floyd in years quite honestly, so I'll take your word for it.) Thanks again.

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Created for Worship

Check out my latest song called Seek Ye First (with Canon in D)

aclarke	aclarke said 1723 days ago (March 8th, 2005)
	I like them both I thought the version with synth sounded good but I'm a total sucker for simply played, more sincere sounding songs. This is a terrific song! Check out my latest song called Ballad of The Little Tiki

joymark	joymark said 1721 days ago (March 10th, 2005)
	I like them both Thanks, aclarke, for taking another listen. --- Created for Worship Check out my latest song called Seek Ye First (with Canon in D)

Iseae	Iseae said 1722 days ago (March 9th, 2005)
	Simply beautiful The vocals seemed a little too styalized in parts, like when you sing "empty well." It detarcted from the beautiful simplicity and heartfelt feeling of this song. You captured the feeling very well. Check out my latest song called Vickys Song

joymark	joymark said 1721 days ago (March 10th, 2005)
	Simply beautiful Thank you, Iseae, for your comments and your time. --- Created for Worship Check out my latest song called Seek Ye First (with Canon in D)

TobinMueller

TobinMueller said 1721 days ago (March 10th, 2005)

Power of full-voiced strumming
Very pleasing chord voicings, with solid strumming and
full feel that goes with the concept of opened pleading
and prayerful expression. Your voice has honesty and
living behind it and is potentially quite good for this genre
(which is often too slick and lacks raw passion). From a
technical point of view: The track is too soft overall and/or
needs to be compressed or boosted. The vocals needs
EQing to give it more presence and separate it from the
mix more. There are lots of clicks and other noises, as if a
mic chord is clunking a mic stand or something, which
makes it sound even more like a demo. I'd compress the
guitar too, to even out the strumming accents a bit and
give it more warmth. This is a very solid song, with a very
balanced feel, heartfelt message and you are a solid
performer.

Check out my latest song called Forge A New Life (MJRF)

joymark

joymark said 1721 days ago (March 10th, 2005)

Power of full-voiced strumming
Thank you, Tobin, for taking the time to listen and to comment.

As for the technical issues, I plan on totally starting from scratch with this recording whenever I get ahold of a Mac that can handle GB2, but how knows who long 'til that happens.

As for the clicking, that's my pick hitting my pickguard. The microphone I used to record vocals and guitar at the same time was very sensitive, probably too sensitive to record both at once since it picked up everything! I usually don't have that problem when I plug my guitar directly into my Firewire410, so that will probably be the solution for future recording of this song.

Thanks again.

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Created for Worship

Check out my latest song called Seek Ye First (with Canon in D)

fairy beth	fairy beth said 1716 days ago (March 15th, 2005)
	love it beautiful. this is a warm, emotive song which i feel i could connect to God through - really get into that place where its just you and him. instrumentals are great. dont know what else to say... Check out my latest song called Message No.1 - David Gwynne

schroter

schroter said 1639 days ago (May 31st, 2005)

Authentic Worship
Joymark, this is great stuff! You have a great voice. The
technical stuff will come with time, but the important
thing is what you're writing and singing to your Saviour. I
like the keyboard pad in the background. I haven't been
on in awhile. I'm sorry I haven't commented about your
stuff sooner. David Crowder Band is my favorite, too. I'm
from PA, but got to meet him a few years ago when he
was touring with WorshipTogether.

Check out my latest song called All Who Are Thirsty

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Name: Jeff M. Miller

I've been a "musician" since I was a child. Though my interests have changed/refocused through the years, music has always been there and been the one thing I've constantly been involved with. I have been in ministry since graduation from college. I ... [see more]

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