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A Few Things


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Moses

 Genre: Acoustic
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I wrote this song yesterday. Any feedback is appreciated particularly constructive criticism!!!!!!!!
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Lyrics
Does anybody feel like me?
I learned to hate my own life
I learned that my choices weren’t good enough
I sometimes wished I weren’t alive

I have done a few things right
Quite a few things right
And I’m gonna turn out alright
Because I have done quite a few things right

Do any of you feel afraid?
Does the future look scary standing on the choices you’ve made?
Well are your feet planted firm in the things you believe?
You’ve gotta learn to trust yourself again!

I have done a few things right
Quite a few things right
And I’m gonna turn out alright
Because I have done quite a few things right

Have any of you lost your fondest hopes?
Looking at the world through your telescopes.
Well get out and fight it out for your right to have fun
And when you’re willing to die then the battle has been won

I have done a few things right
Quite a few things right
And I’m gonna turn out alright
Because I have done quite a few things right

We have done a few things right
Quite a few things right
And we’re gonna turn out alright
Because we have done quite a few things right
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Uploaded: Sep 01, 2015 - 02:50:31 PM
Last Updated: Sep 02, 2015 - 10:17:50 AM Last Played: Mar 19, 2017 - 02:47:11 PM
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papag said 714 days ago (September 2nd, 2015)
A few things
This was pretty solid for the turnaround time you indicate. There's a good arc of emotion in the piece. I would have liked it to come back to the initial lower level and build with repeats on the last 2 choruses. Some percussion could also add some push and sonic variety.
Check out my latest song called Chinese Flutes (first draft)
Moses said 712 days ago (September 4th, 2015)
Papag
Thanks papag, appreciate the feedback. I'm going to perform this piece with a percussion player and a saxophone player this weekend. Gonna think about your suggestions.
Check out my latest song called Found Myself Again
MarkHolbrook said 707 days ago (September 9th, 2015)
I could
picture this on a small stage, perhaps in a small venue or open market.

You seem to have a way with this simple acoustic format. The vocals carry well.

This is a great solo effort. I'd love to hear this same version with a few additions... Some bass, perhaps some drums, backing vocals. This could be a great song!
Check out my latest song called Corn Whiskey
Moses said 704 days ago (September 12th, 2015)
I'm working
on finding some musicians that really want to spend some time getting some fuller productions tight, and this is a song I would love to do in that setting!! I will do my best to get you a recording of it if that happens!
Check out my latest song called Found Myself Again
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