It's curious this attracted so little comment. It's a finely
written song; your singing is great; the instrumental
performance is very good; the sentiment is perfect.
Personally, though, I'd like to see more light and dark in
it; the piano sticks to the same rhythms all the way
through and gives it a linear feel. What about a middle
eight where the piano changes the patterns a little?

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It's curious this attracted so little comment. It's a finely
written song; your singing is great; the instrumental
performance is very good; the sentiment is perfect.
Personally, though, I'd like to see more light and dark in
it; the piano sticks to the same rhythms all the way
through and gives it a linear feel. What about a middle
eight where the piano changes the patterns a little?

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What a shame this seems to have been missed..
This is a real pleasure to listen to. You hold those long
notes beautifully. I like the backing piano/strings very
much..
I think the vocals were mixed a little too high, but you
sing this so well.

Wonderful.....

Slimmie

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Count me among the ashamed I missed this the first time.
I like the tempo and cadence of this tune very much. Your
voice is very pure- good harmonies and not overdone.

I will listen to the previous version (if it's still posted) for
comparision but this sounds great.

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This is one of the best songs I've heard on MJ in a while.
Sorry I missed it before. You have such a great voice. The
lyrics and melody are very well written and the
arrangement sounds good. It sounds like it could perhaps
use some more little elements in the arrangement here
and there. I'm not sure what exactly, but it sounds like
there is a space in the mix waiting for something... maybe
just some additional harmonies or backup vocals in a few
places. Anyway, this song is touching and I'm
downloading it.

I think part of the reason this great song was
unfortunately passed over is because over the past week
or so there have been numerous new member who have
come and uploaded tons of their songs all at once,
flooding the front pages and washing others' songs (even
their own) off the front page before anyone even has had
a chance to notice them. It's a real shame.

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I hear a hi-pitched tone in the background of your vocals,
not sure what it is. Maybe I have dog's ears, but the squeal
is distracting. Seems to be on the vocal track.

Also, I like the harmonies, but I agree with Peter that it
would be better to develop them more throughout the
song. As it is now, they're like a surprise, and then...gone.

Rearrange, repost, and maybe you'll get a bigger audience
2nd time around. Good work.

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I hear that high pitch, too, and hope it is an easy fix. This has the makings of
a real hit. Vocals are delivered very well, and carry this song right to the end. I
am in agreement with several of the comments above. Please give this a
fine-tooth combing, and spend the time to really polish it off. Great
songwriting.

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∀LIM∀R™

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Sometimes you just have to keep plugging away, stay
involved in the community, and never give up. There are
too many song on this site to catch em all. I think your
tune needs strings. Subtle...not constant and
overpowering like my last attempt. Also, the vibrato of
your vocals, specifically on the long sustained notes,
sounds forced. You have a great natural quality to your
voice and should use vibrato sparingly. Thx for sharing
your music here.

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I missed this one, too.
Wonderful song...in every way.
Lyrics, instrumentals, great voice...
I, too, would like to hear more harmony interwoven here
and there.

Do post this again--



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I just stumbled upon this site a day or so ago and this was the first song I listened to. I couldn't get it out of my head. I really loved it. You have a brilliant voice.

Great job!
Wintergrl

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