Post lyrics, change ups are a bit quick, I find the title
offensive (I have no problem offending, as long as that's
what you intend), the back and forth isn't surprising after
the first time, so gets tiring after a bit, and the end is
abrupt.

My out of the gate observations.

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Nice rhythm changes and song structure. Drums seem
muddy - not sure if that's the fault of the loop chosen or
the production technique. You may want to vary the
volume of the cymbal a bit so it's not always hitting at the
same volume.

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This is a good sounding groundwork for which I think that
vocals would suit nicely to. I will try and check out the
other version as this one seemed to have something
missing to it,........duh the vocals. Anyway Duh to me.

I don't really see where the title of the song is fitting but
then again I guess that I should shut the hell up and hear
the version with the vocals already.

I like the chord changes that you have done, and the way
it seems to suddenly and unexpectedly switch gears is
really effective.

My suggestion would be to add more interest with the use
of more dynamics.



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Thnx for you comment :-) but there are none Vocal version yet.. I'm not really
a singing person but there are lyrics to this song, so I think I have to get
someone singing on it, or maybe I shall try for myself..

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....I didn't suspect that it was loop-based. Those abrupt
changes, on the other hand, are a dead giveaway.

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