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This is a jazzy little pop song. It's definitely still a work in progress. But I've been working on it for too long and have lost perspective and objectivity. I'm looking for some feedback on how to end this thing properly and also on the the instrumentation. I'm not thrilled with the arrangement.

Any suggestions would be wonderful.

Cheers
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Lyrics
What do you see when you look at the colour blue?
If I saw it through your eyes would it still be true?
What do you feel when you look into my eyes?
If I could only see you. Would you shed the disguise?

Through all the fury and tumble of colours
Have you a canvas? Can we be lovers?
Paint me a forest with minstrels and birds
And unicorns dancing amongst your words

And if trees could sing they would sound like clarinets
A big band sound, playing a jazzy set
But a single tree on a solitary hill
Would hum a bluesy melody to keep its heart still

As we walk through this foggy forest of desires
Can you hear the music that your presence inspires?
Yet I stand enraptured like that solitary tree
With my branches in flames that no one can see

And a fire is dancing through these streets of rain
Melting the ice that cages the pain
A warmth is rising up from the soil
A potion of desire is beginning to boil

At night I reach to feel the life that you breathe
The rising and falling - the melancholy underneath
I want to know the dreams that you are dreaming
And discover the truth of your visions steaming

In your mind do you see the colour blue?
Or hear the trills that only trees can do?
Do you feel the heat that threatens your heart?
Then live the love of my seductive art
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Uploaded: May 05, 2006 - 10:58:28 PM
Last Updated: May 06, 2006 - 05:01:14 PM Last Played: Apr 12, 2019 - 02:30:30 PM
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Frog4 said 4821 days ago (May 6th, 2006)
Show tune?
Sweet vocals and sentiment. Outside my taste, honestly, but I appreciate
your musicianship and soul. Cool piano sound and drums. I'd consider
replacing the clarinet with a sax to make it more contemporary and less
Benny Goodman. A vocal run at the end might give it a greater flourish.
Thanks for sharing!
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charliechen said 4821 days ago (May 6th, 2006)
Show tune?
Hello. Welcom to MJ's. I've been here for a couple of months and am loving it.

Thank you so much for your feedback and suggestions. I will try out the sax. The main reason I used the clarinet is because of the lyric reference to trees and clarinets. But I suppose I don't have to be so literal about it in the instrumentation.

And no matter what I do, I always end up sounding like a musical number. I really don't mind that, since musical theatre is one of my passions.

Thanks again for listening and commenting. Cheers.

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said 4821 days ago (May 6th, 2006)
Lovely
Nothing to be ashamed of here man. And DON'T replace the clarinet with
a sax. The sax is my favorite woodwind, bit it doesn't belong here. The
lyrics are profound and poetical. Your vox is beautiful throughout. The
only flaw is the abrupt ending. Even a musical fade would have been
better. But all in all this is a fine piece of music.

RE your working on this for so long...well, sometimes you've just got to
let go and post and let the chips fall where they may.

Be well!
charliechen said 4821 days ago (May 6th, 2006)
Lovely
Thanks very much for the listen and comment. I'm glad you like the clarinet. I'm rather partial to it even if it is a literal musical treatment of the lyric.

I love musicals and showtunes. If anything they are my main source of musical inspiration. I didn't write this song as a musical number, but I guess one can't really get away from what is true to oneself.

I'm trying to find an appropriate ending. A fade out would work. I'm thinking maybe of repeating the first two lines of the first verse. Or maybe a clarinet line to end the piece.

And I hear ya about working on something too long. That's why I posted this unfinished. Just needed it in the world to breathe a little.

Thanks again.

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alanfraser said 4821 days ago (May 6th, 2006)
Highly professional
Pleasant melody to start. Classy broadway vocals. Broadway changes too. Your phrasing is very much New York. I mean that as a high compliment. The interwoven sax is very tastefully done. The strings augment without being obtrusive. Great balance across the soundscape. Imaginative lyrics (and you will hardly ever hear me say that).

Kind of a hard stop at the end.

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charliechen said 4821 days ago (May 6th, 2006)
Highly professional
Thanks, Alan. I certainly do take your comments as high praise indeed. I'm giving you a cyber blush.

I think some of the best singers out there are Broadway singers. And my music certainly does lean toward the musical theatre. I do love to tell a story with the song or develop a character.

I suppose I would love for the musical number to become popular again. Pop songs for a big part of the first half of the 20th century were from stage musicals.

Thanks for listening and commenting.

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Joanna said 4821 days ago (May 6th, 2006)
I agree
I agree that this fits strongly in the show tune category. I saw the
thread in the forum and as soon as Alan mentioned show tunes, I came
running to hear the song. Yes, I have a weakness for show tunes. So
genre shouldn't be seen as a negative, but as a positive (it got me
here!)

Your performance was beautiful, with emotional vocals and poetic
lyrics. I loved the clarinet -- it fit perfectly. I used to play sax, so that's
coming from someone who loves the sax. In this song, the clarinet is
the better choice.

The only problem I see is a small one. Your s's are whistling a bit.
There is a filter for that in Garageband, so perhaps you could try it out
and see if it softens your s's. I have difficulties with popping p's, so I
know what it's like to battle a single sound in a performance. If you can
soften those s's, either vocally or with filters, I couldn't find a thing not
to like!
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charliechen said 4821 days ago (May 6th, 2006)
I agree
Thanks, Joanna. I am a sucker for a showtune as well. As mentioned above, this one wasn't written as a showtune initially. Some of my other posts were intended to be incoporated into a play with music or a musical. My vocal recording on my previous posts aren't as good. You may have read my other forum post about how I was singing into the back of my mic for about a month and a half. Too funny.

That notorious pop shield that got me in trouble with the mic did get rid of my popping p's. But the s's are still whistling like you say. I'll try the filter. I've also downloaded another audio unit that is also supposed to get rid of the s. I'll try that too.

Thanks for listening and commenting. Much appreciated.

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gwhoose said 4820 days ago (May 7th, 2006)
a lot of work
Hi, so much talent and work you put into this! I am quite impressed. I
have been listening to blues lately; big band and bluegrass. One thing I
have noticed is that there is a simplification process. You have so many
good things pressed into one piece. You could make several songs from
just this one! When you simplify lyrics, the essential dramatic parts
become more dramatic. When you simiplify tonal qualities, the choppy
river turns into a waterfall.
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charliechen said 4820 days ago (May 7th, 2006)
a lot of work
Thanks for stopping by and listening. I appreciate your comments.

This song has been a joy to work on. With each new piece, I endeaver to push myself, try something different. I've enjoyed using a jazz beat and unusual chords and progressions.

I hear you about simplicity. This set of lyrics is anything but simplisitic. I intentionally wanted to create something dense and complex, just like our feelings of intense admiration or love for someone.

But I've also just been praising a fellow MJ'er for having some beautifully simple lyrics and both of you have now inspired me to aim for simplistic beauty for my next song.

Thanks.

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Doadars Uncle said 4820 days ago (May 7th, 2006)
Dramatic yet delicate
Beautiful painting!

Perfect format.

Nice weave of meanings.

To end it, I would suggest a series of sung tones, perhaps improvised
"ahhh" or "hmmm" and fade.

Well done!
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charliechen said 4820 days ago (May 7th, 2006)
Dramatic yet delicate
Thank you for listening and commenting. I'm getting some good ideas for endings. I must ask for help more often.

Cheers.

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philonnie said 4820 days ago (May 7th, 2006)
wonderful song ....
the sparse instrumentation works really well as a backdrop to your highly poetic lyrics and skilled vocals ..... clarinet, piano, strings, string bass fit together so well. I agree it would make a perfect show tune. Very impressive for a work in progress ... . I never know how to end songs myself .... but the end is a bit abrupt. how about some sound fx (rustling trees?) coming in at the end? Enjoyed this a lot!

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charliechen said 4820 days ago (May 7th, 2006)
wonderful song ....
Thank you very much. I'm glad you like the song.

I like your suggestion of the sound effects at the end. I'm really struggling with the ending and I must say, your idea is one of the best so far. I'll give it a try.

Cheers.

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charliechen said 4820 days ago (May 7th, 2006)
wonderful song ....
Thank you very much. I'm glad you like the song.

I like your suggestion of the sound effects at the end. I'm really struggling with the ending and I must say, your idea is one of the best so far. I'll give it a try.

Cheers.

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charliechen said 4820 days ago (May 7th, 2006)
My first double post
Well, there is a first time for everything. Dang it!

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Macaudion said 4819 days ago (May 8th, 2006)
First of all
I like the sound of the mic when it's being sung to in the proper way -
This is a precious and lush composition, CC - Man your vocal work on
this is just beautiful - Hehe, it is likely that it has been on all of the
others too - I'm sorry... LOL- I always love your choice of
instrumentation and like the delivery of ea. of your choices here - And
you are QUITE poetic - Man, u put a lot of work in this one - Sounds
simple and lush, but you put the hours in to get it to sound this way -
Very rich - I don't like show tunes, and I honestly do like this one -
Very nice work - I'm supposed to be enjoying Paris, and I'm enjoying
having been transported to a more pleasant place by this piece, CC -
Thank you -

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charliechen said 4819 days ago (May 8th, 2006)
First of all
Thanks, Dion. So you are in the middle of Paris and are likely holed up in your hotel room or a cyber cafe listening to MacJams? You are soooooooo addicted to this place.

And what closet are you talking about exactly. The broom closet? The linen closet?

Actually, I didn't know I was really ever in the closet. Isn't that what the anonymity of the internet is supposed to provide? But then I haven't exactly been anonymous with using my real name and everything, have I?

I'm glad you like this piece. I'll make a showtune convert out of ya yet!

Bonjour, mon ami.

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said 4819 days ago (May 8th, 2006)
The groove
This is a good sound, well mixed. Very impressive on the vocal sound.
The vocals are very well done but a few times strained in higher registers.
Good job overall though. The music is toned down and sometimes the
vocal tone seems too bright. Maybe play with that to give it a more subtle
tonality. It's good like it is though, these are just ideas. Stay with
clarinet, maybe even add bass clarinet or something with deep tone.
Good job. God bless
charliechen said 4819 days ago (May 8th, 2006)
The groove
Thank you, Jonathan. You are right about the high notes. In my finished product, those will have been re-recorded. And I certainly will consider your suggestions when I do the remix. You have a good ear.

Welcome to this community. I'm sure you'll love it as much as I do.

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ktb said 4819 days ago (May 8th, 2006)
got me involved
wow, I'm glad I listened. You really have a fine voice. The lyrical content
was beautiful and the instrumentation was choice. I'd have to seconda
few comments. The clarinet fits perfectly (humble opinion), and the
ending is a tad abrupt. Other than that, I'm sure of your aware that the
overall feel of this tune evokes strong images of theatrical
performance. You could write a whole musical based on "if trees could
sing"...its that good.
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charliechen said 4819 days ago (May 8th, 2006)
got me involved
Thank you so much for listening and commenting. I'm glad you enjoyed it. To be honest, I really didn't intend this song to be a musical number, not paying attention to the actual theatricality of it. But I guess showtunes are just in my blood and seeps into everything I do.

A whole show, eh? That would be a challenge. Might just have to get started right away!

Cheers.

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Leon said 4819 days ago (May 8th, 2006)
Even the trees will sing to this...maybe
This is a very good showtune/broadway ballad type of song that is
sang exactly the way you want it to sound, from your heart. It sounds
quite sincere and lots of emotions in your voice. This is not a rock
song so I will not tell you to change how you express yourself vocally
in any other way.

There is great poetry in your lyrics. Your rhyme and structure is
impeccable without expense of substance/content. If this song were
read aloud as a poem, it will still get my attention.

I did not like the ending of the last line. The melody and
instrumentation of that last line did not have closure or finality to it...
but again that's just my taste.

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charliechen said 4819 days ago (May 8th, 2006)
Even the trees will sing to this...maybe
Thanks, Leon, for your comments and feedback. The ending really does need work. I asked in my description of the song section above for suggestions on how to end it because I was rather stuck and have received some very viable possibilities.

Cheers.




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mint01 said 4818 days ago (May 10th, 2006)
Great one. Most of all...
...I like the way your voice comes out as you sing "As we walk through this foggy forest of desires..."
After that it the tune gets calmer again. A great change. Superb!
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charliechen said 4817 days ago (May 10th, 2006)
Great one. Most of all...
Thanks for the listen and comments. I'm glad you liked it.

Charlie

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snowdragon said 4815 days ago (May 12th, 2006)
First one of your tunes I've
listened to I think.

The title attracted me and the lyrics delivered on its promise.

Took me a couple of listens to warm up to the musical treatment but
once I got back in that New York frame of mind, it worked quite well.

But, I'll add my voice to those wanting a different ending :)
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charliechen said 4815 days ago (May 12th, 2006)
First one of your tunes I've
Well, then, welcome to my ouvre. Thank you for listening and commenting. Yup, that ending is much too abrupt. I'm trying a few things and may repost the finished product here soon.

Cheers.

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said 4815 days ago (May 12th, 2006)
Pure contemplation
A moment of poetic thought sandwiched between the din of the day.
Your voice has an excellent timbre. A little less tremolo would please
me, although I understand what you are trying to convey. Try voice
"cracking" instead. I like the arrangement. Good separation of
instrumental voices. Live play would enhance this wonderfully.
charliechen said 4815 days ago (May 12th, 2006)
Pure contemplation
Thanks for listening and your comments. I'm totally intrigued by your suggestion of voice "cracking." I'd love to try it, but I don't know what it is. Teach me, please.

And when you say "less tremolo," do you mean less vibrato in my voice? I have a very prominent vibrato in my voice and I'm working on how to turn it on and off and control it. I've found that the vibrato is great in some songs/arrangements, but can get in the way of others.

Thanks for your input. Cheers.

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mr.turtle said 4805 days ago (May 22nd, 2006)
Melody Lyric = song
Lovely song. Another excellent addition to your body of work. You sing
with agreat deal of passion and sincerity. But I'm wondering if that
passion doesn't over shadow the pure quality of the lyric and melody. I
feel the lyric and melody and expression should be balanced. I don't know
If Im making any sense here. Regardless, I hold your music in high
regard. Turtle Out. P.S. Turning that Mic around helped alot. Ha Ha.
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charliechen said 4804 days ago (May 23rd, 2006)
Melody Lyric = song
Thanks, Mr. Turtle. I think I do understand you. You are suggesting that I not oversing my songs. And I hear ya. Over-emoting is sometimes one of my performance sins. Especially when the lyric is already jam packed with imagery -- some might say bloated. Personally, I like my lyrics dense and complex.

Thank you for your support and encouragement. And yes, that mic thing... gotta laugh. It's either that or cry!

Cheers.

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TobinMueller said 4776 days ago (June 20th, 2006)
A more substantial ending
To add to what others have said, I'd like to put in a plug for a more
complete and certain ending. I think such a long piece needs a definitive
ending. Also, I would have the rather thin synth sound be the last thing
that trails off, but something more substantial. Becuz of the content,
consider have a vocalized ending, something that expresses your
emotions as you go forward. But I enjoyed your production clarity and
vocal performance very much.
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charliechen said 4776 days ago (June 20th, 2006)
A more substantial ending
Thanks, Tobin. I've fooled around with a new ending since posting this version. Once I have a solid version I like, I'll repost it.

I appreciate your suggestions. I'm now going to try a vocalized ending.

Cheers.

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KATD said 4759 days ago (July 7th, 2006)
Very nice
I really like the Lyrics of the song and your phrasing1 Sounds like a song youd hear in a jazz/blues kind of bar! Good job!
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charliechen said 4757 days ago (July 9th, 2006)
Very nice
Thanks, Katrina. I'm glad you like this. Thanks for the listen and the comments.

I'm really looking forward to your future posts.

Cheers.

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