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This is a song I wrote about my sister who died when we were 17
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Gone

I used to think my life was great, I used to have all I wanted,
but it changed one day.
I grew so far away from her not really knowing her for real
She tried to tell me but I didn’t hear.
I was too wrapped up in my own life,
To even notice somebody else.

Bang! I know it, something’s wrong
Know the signs hear the song
‘cuz before you know it, it’ll come to show
They’ll be good as gone.

I learned my lessons, grown since then
And I count all of my blessings, and I’ve changed my ways
Some say don’t take things for granted cuz they’ll not always be there
We all do it, but I blame myself
I was too wrapped up in my own life,
To even notice somebody else.

Bang! I know it, something’s wrong
Know the signs hear the song
‘cuz before you know it, it’ll come to show
They’ll be good as gone.

When somebody cries don’t just hear,
Listen to their words, thoughts, and fears,
I guess I was just too young, too naïve to know
It’s too late for that, away she goes

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Uploaded: Sep 04, 2007 - 06:59:58 AM
Last Updated: Nov 12, 2007 - 08:26:51 AM Last Played: Jan 18, 2019 - 07:51:55 AM
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nevermine said 4395 days ago (September 4th, 2007)
well u had my foot tapping
good structure and i like the strings buildup!! just maybe my own preference but maybe a bit more passion and emotion in your vocals would really give the song a bit more but i must admit i love, i really loved the ending buildup... well done ;)
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clwedel said 4395 days ago (September 4th, 2007)
i enjoy tapping my foot...good exercise
thanks! yeah, i need to work on that....emotion thing...

im glad you like it :)
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dolby said 4395 days ago (September 4th, 2007)
Yeah...
...this is really good in many ways.

It has some really interesting sections playing off each other - it shifts into the chorus nicely, and the drop out afterwards with the little piano motif works well.

Your baacking vocals are woking well on the whole and you obviously have a knack for song structure. The build up to the end is excellent.

Similar to nevermines comment I think your vox are a little dry in places - but this is something to work on. Also, the bass sound you have seems a little 'robotic' -perhaps something softer would work.

Hope you don't mind these very minor crits.

Very good work on the whole,
Phil
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clwedel said 4394 days ago (September 5th, 2007)
crits...
wow, thank you so much, that was a very nice and helpful review, I will for sure take this into consideration!
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sloparts said 4383 days ago (September 16th, 2007)
Way to go Mr, Charles
This is an excellent song. Great Lyrics and beautiful harmonies. I agree that the vocal could use a little more feeling, it sounded mechanical in a way.

You might try changing the bass by alternating between 2 or more different instrument sounds along with the structure of the bass line, just a little to give it a more dynamic bottom end to the song.

Altogether, an excellent song the just needs a little tweaking to make it a great piece of music all the way around.

Ed
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clwedel said 4383 days ago (September 16th, 2007)
feelings...
Hi, and thanks for your comment! Yeah I actually just remixed it and will be putting up the new version shortly, I think its more balanced now. Thanks and good luck!
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Name: Mr. Charles
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Hey everyone my name is Charlie Wedel, but my "stage name" is Mr. Charles. I'm very new to world of writing music, at least commercially. Writing music for me has been very personal and fun. Some people write in journals or diaries, I write songs... [see more]

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