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Swing Time


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joshnyberg

 Genre: Dance-Club
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A kind of dance remix of a new song I wrote. But, really, I feel that this is the "true" version of the song. Going to keep re-making it until it sticks to the ceiling.

I spent a lot of time on this - much of it was the learning curve with garageband, adding different outside instruments (and creating new ones in the process), as well as audio units, etc. Fantastic program, especially once you add in all the extras (Loops, etc.)

Note: I hastily re-submitted this after the first upload. The mixed-down version sounded different than in GB, so I boosted the vocals a little. I consider them the weak point in the song, and I am leaving the rest of the song as-is while I re-work the vocals for the next version.

I've had some throat problems this year caused by fatigue from rehearsing with the band, especially while already sick - so I am approaching singing gingerly while I learn better technique and care.
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Lyrics
Swing time.
I stared at
A row of roses.
I'm tired of
Waiting
Watching
Wanting
Sharpening my eyes
To find you.

Mouth full of
Metal.
Crossed in the
Middle.
I kneel alone
Stealing time.
Shoveling coal
To find you.

If it's burning bright,
I'll follow.
Pulled in
By your hand.
And creasing
My eyes.

Swing time.
I stared at
A row of roses.
I'm tired of
Watching
Waiting
Wanting
Shoveling coal
To find you.

If it's burning bright,
I'll follow.
Pulled in
By your hand.
And creasing
My eyes.



Song Stats
Hits: 3369
Comments: 10
Fans: 5
Plays: 68
Downloads: 117
Votes: 2
Uploaded: Feb 03, 2008 - 03:47:34 AM
Last Updated: Feb 04, 2008 - 05:04:36 PM Last Played: Apr 12, 2019 - 02:53:50 PM
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Hardware:
MacBook, Roland A-80 Midi Controller, Vocals, Audix Om-6 Dynamic Mic direct line-inn.
Software:
Garageband
Comments
Estella said 4154 days ago (February 3rd, 2008)
Josh
this sounds very well mixed to me. Not your typical club music--more organic and playful than that. Your piano playing is just kind of enhance by the club-like bass and beats, rather than the other way around. I like it!

Wouldn't mind reading the lyrics.
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Estella said 4153 days ago (February 4th, 2008)
Thanks!
I like the lyrics--rich imagery. I have a much better appreciation for the song.
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joshnyberg said 4148 days ago (February 9th, 2008)
thanks
Thanks, I was really unsure about some of the lyrics at first, they came out so quickly. But I've decided to let them be for now!
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Feter said 4152 days ago (February 4th, 2008)
Swing Time
nice sound the piano very cool..you singin is good as
well thnx for sharin
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thetiler said 4152 days ago (February 4th, 2008)
enjoy the percussion and piano
plus the singing fits nicely.

Thanks for sharing!
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drakonis said 4151 days ago (February 6th, 2008)
Some great elements here...
I love the song structure, melody, choice of synths, and singing voice... each of these is the "Great" part of this song. There are a couple of things that stand out as detractors that could be improved, though. First, although the sound of your voice (tone and pitch) are great, I found it almost impossible to understand the words you sang. Part of it is the mix, altering the EQ to make the voice less muddy (boost the high-midrange a bit? others may have better suggestions) and the other part is better diction/pronunciation of the words as you sing... that would help. Really catchy music... still needs a little tweaking to make the bass richer and trim some of the treble off the hi-hats... hope these are helpful comments! Hope your voice recovers fully soon!
ttfn,
Drakonis
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joshnyberg said 4148 days ago (February 9th, 2008)
good idea
Okay, that sounds like a good idea. I was waiting for someone to say something specific about the vocals, because I'm not totally happy with them.

I will also play with the drums and try eq-ing them. Sometimes it is helpful to have very specific advice about what steps to take. Thanks so much!
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apb said 4151 days ago (February 6th, 2008)
A fine song

.. fine arrangement and the mix sounds very good too and I love those catchy, synthy, pizz strings .. vocals are excellent .. I like that slightly incoherent style .. and the reverb suits too .. however, as a side-effect it's coming across a bit sibilant... this can be fixed in different ways... not so easily in
GB .. although some EQing might reduce it a bit.

I sometimes use the deesser plug-in in Logic for this..
some mastering tools help counter this too.. but it's
best to target the source track first.

I can't hear much loop usage .. it's all blended in very well with your excellent skills on keys Josh.

Thanks for sharing.
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joshnyberg said 4148 days ago (February 9th, 2008)
excellent advice!
You are right about the vocals - they do need some de-essing. I don't have a pop-screen, and I think being conscious of this while singing actually affects my singing style a little bit. I had a filter that I made out of nylon and a coat hanger, but I can't find it! Haha.

Thanks for listening - I'm really trying to keep honing this one song, using the experience as a kind of template for future work.

I'll be posting a new version in the next few weeks, hopefully. It's so great that you guys take the time to listen and comment!
Check out my latest song called Swing Time
Montgomery California said 4151 days ago (February 6th, 2008)
not
a listener of this genre, usually, but never let it be said i am a snob. hah!
i liked the use of several instruments and sounds. it gave it a really big feel. the vocals were well sung, albiet the amount of reverb used lends it to the dance songs of the mid-80's. if that was your goal, then you nailed it. if not, then i would reccomend dropping the reverb to an afterthought. using the track reverb, go into the actual reverb window, turn up the original volume, and down the effected volume. you will still have all the reverb you want, but it will sit toward the back of the mix, almost as an after effect. i like doing this because it still gives the vocals depth, without washing the ability to hear your words clearly... great post, and i am glad i got to hear this one...
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Electronic dance music is a broad set of percussive music genres that largely inherit from 1970s disco music and, to some extent, the experimental pop music of Kraftwerk. Such music was originally borne of and popularized via regional nightclub scene

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