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Look up to the Sky


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SlimGirlFat

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I have been working on this for a little while now and I'm not entirely happy with it so would love a little feedback.
The sampled vox will be replaced by mine once I get my mic set up again.
The problem I am having is deciding whether the trumpets are not enough, too much..
Whether I can get away with having the song this long ( 3.54) or is it too long and repetitive.
Finally, does it need more than those accent vocals?

If anyone is an amazing trumpet player .. would love to maybe have you collaborate rather than have the sampled trumpet. Sax would also be wonderful :)

This is definitely a work in progress so the mix is not the best
Slimmie
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Uploaded: May 08, 2009 - 04:17:53 PM
Last Updated: May 08, 2009 - 04:17:53 PM Last Played: Mar 29, 2019 - 11:00:00 AM
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composerclark said 3690 days ago (May 9th, 2009)
Looking up!
Wow! I can't believe no one has left a comment yet! We MacJammers be falling down on the job!

You have created an excellent groove. You layer and vary textures very nicely; you have a very good feel for this. The trumpet is good as is.

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To me, it does feel like it needs something to mix things up after a while; you maybe go on a bit too long with the material. The most natural solution that I can think of is to introduce a "B" section in a different key, and with a different character; maybe with a greater focus on percussive sounds.

Regarding the repeating vocal hook, one thing you could try if you wanted to vary that up a bit is to selectively omit some of the words, e.g., look up in the... it makes you feel... look up... makes you... look... etc. It is just a way of keeping listeners more actively engaged, because the repetitions are inexact. You could also rearrange the words so that different meanings may emerge; this too keeps listeners on our toes!

It's always nice to hear something new of yours!
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SlimGirlFat said 3687 days ago (May 12th, 2009)
:)
I Like the idea of breaking the vox up a bit. I will try that out this week :)
blindsidedpoets said 3690 days ago (May 9th, 2009)
Look up to the Sky
First off, this is good. I like how you wonder off to a different part, then back to the piano part.
On to you questions, the trumpet level/amount is great. A live person and sax would of corse be great, hope someone will collab with you.
Repetitive, well, a bit, but that fits with the genre. There are enough changes here, about every 30-45 sec. you don't need to worry about it, but some of composerclark's suggestions are good (except the key change, I hate key changes... sorry, just my preference). Either way on that one.
The vocals, again, I agree with the guy above me. On the whole it's great, and you don't need to.
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SlimGirlFat said 3687 days ago (May 12th, 2009)
TY!
Glad you like it. I think I will also shorten the track slighty so that each change has a bit more impact
VicDiesel said 3689 days ago (May 10th, 2009)
Serious dance
1/ The trumpet is fine. Keep the listener wanting more

2/ But I would like to have more vox. The synth background is cool, but doesn't really carry the track by itself.

This sort of sounds like a remix, where you've taken something with verses and choruses, and are only using one line from the chorus.
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SlimGirlFat said 3687 days ago (May 12th, 2009)
Thanks Vic.
Yes I didnt want this to be like a usual track in the sense that it had a Verse/chorus verse format. so I guess it is far more like a remix. I will put more vox in
Kicbal said 3689 days ago (May 11th, 2009)
Good Trumpet
As a sax player, I actually think the trumpet works better here. A sax, even one played hard may give it too mellow of a sound given that you are using some pretty sharp sounding synths. Really enjoy the heavy duty beat. Maybe a brisk 3 minute romp would work better, unless you extend the buildup in the middle and give it a longer climb till it hits the main groove again. Really nice work in progress.
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SlimGirlFat said 3687 days ago (May 12th, 2009)
Thaks
I will definitley shorten the track and maybe you are right about the sax being too mellow. I like the sharpness of the trumpets. The trouble with using the sampled ones is that I am limited on what I have that sounds right to my ears. hence the search for someone who can play .. ty for taking a listen and the comments:)
Drew Kopr said 3660 days ago (June 8th, 2009)
Cool
Trumpet works for me. Kicks ass actually. I like the reverb on it too. I would add more vocals, maybe another line or two. I don't think you can go wrong in any manner on this tune. It is just balls out grooving.
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ramonaji said 3593 days ago (August 14th, 2009)
I love this....
hmmm.... where is the new version? Is it out? I WANT it!!!
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MUSICAL_FIDELITY said 3253 days ago (July 20th, 2010)
nice
good mix girly, i remember your fist song on i Comp !!
Keep up the good work Slimmie
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Electronic dance music is a broad set of percussive music genres that largely inherit from 1970s disco music and, to some extent, the experimental pop music of Kraftwerk. Such music was originally borne of and popularized via regional nightclub scene

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