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Cold Winter Mourning


Corporal Beef

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This piece was written for orchestral instruments, but since I don’t yet have a decent orchestra software package, I’ve recorded it with mainly synth-sounding voices. I guess this should be considered a demo, since I plan on re-recording it in the future with the proper instruments.
Constructive criticism, please!
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drakonis said 3233 days ago (October 15th, 2010)
GoreyArt :)
I dunno, you did a sweet job releasing the synths on this. If it were me, I might add a little filter-automation in spots to the repeated bass-line synth, to have it occasionally morph slightly, to add more intrigue and less monotony (or cross-fade to another synth-timbre, then back.)

This piece gives me a feeling of a crazed (or rabid?) wolf, chasing shadows in a forest, meandering at a fast trot after shapeless ethereal rabbits. Perhaps I had a little too much coffee this morning. :-)

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Corporal Beef said 3233 days ago (October 15th, 2010)
I totally see what you are getting at re the filter automation. That bass line is a combination of two different sounds, but you're right, there's little variation. After I re-record with orchestral instruments (could I pare it down to a quintet?). I'll explore that option.
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composerclark said 3233 days ago (October 15th, 2010)
This is very good - engaging right away, and interesting touches along the way. Since you asked for constructive criticism, my thoughts are that the repetitive bass loop is a fine idea, but I find my ears growing a bit tired of it along the way; if you don't find this, then ignore my comment! If you do, there are lots of things you could try, but a couple are to compose a middle section not based on that bass line, and/or to modulate to a different pitch center somewhere along the way. A final thought is that I like the hemiola you have between 3/4 and 6/8, but this rhythmic aspect too is something that could be explored more, like having a 5/8 loop running against the 6/8 loop (they would sync up every 30 beats!).

But my main comment is that you have got a good composition here!

Cheers, C.
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Corporal Beef said 3233 days ago (October 15th, 2010)
Loopy Indeed
Recently I've been thinking the same thing; it needs another part. I'm wondering if it should be placed after the middle 7/8 part, or some sort of a transposition of the repetitive bass line. I think your idea of composing something in 5/8 is definitely something to explore as an alternate melody over a transposed bassline, so maybe placing it after the 7/8 part isn't the best idea. Hmmm, lots to think about.

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MarkHolbrook said 3233 days ago (October 15th, 2010)
I like it!
I agree with Drak... I would have morphed a few things but frankly since I can't do this at all anyway I don't really know what I'm talking about LOL... enjoyed.
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Komrade K said 3232 days ago (October 16th, 2010)
Move over Mr Elfman...
First up I really enjoyed this but would agree with some of the critical points made by others above. If I were producing this, I'd be tempted to drop the bassline out on occasions and let the other 'instruments' have some space (it could also add to the sense of tension). Maybe it's worth listening to Michael Nyman's score for The Draughtsman's Contract or Phillip Glass's Einstein on the Beach to see how they tackle repeated bass figures...

Nice one.

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fasteddie said 3231 days ago (October 17th, 2010)
It sounds like
converting over from the synths to orchestra will be a brutal undertaking but well worth the endeavor!

I look forward to hearing it.

Sorry I don't have anything constructive. I do like it a lot though.
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Bent_Axis said 3116 days ago (February 9th, 2011)
I really like this one
It has an evil elf-like sound to it, like some serious little creature is up to no good. No criticism at all, it's a great composition the way it is.
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