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I've been working on a story on and off for 3 years. I liked the concept, but it just didn't do what I hoped it would in storybook form. One day, Particle Dots asked if I was going to participate in the 2017 RPM Challenge, and immediately I knew that I would, whether I finished in time or not. I decided to treat my storybook idea as a song, and possibly an album. I knew it would help the rhythm of the lyrics and in fact it did improve the structure, and as I worked on it, it became an album. Thanks to a few MJ friends for the inspiration and the help on the songs to follow.

I'm posting these here for critical feedback so I can finish this album idea and then go back to the book and pull from the songs.

Thanks in advance and sorry for being away for so long.
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Lyrics
One Saturday morning
before the sunrise
while people were snoring
they heard his first cries

A bouncing boy baby
Born with a surprise
A mechanical arm
That was twice his size!

How could this happen?
How could this be?
A mechanical arm
where a real arm should be!

The doctors and nurses
Tried not to freak out
This birth was the strangest
Beyond any doubt!

His mother and father
Did not seem alarmed.
The baby was cooing
And they were quite charmed

His arm was tremendous,
So shiny and cold
And riveted, welded,
Wired and bold.


The Doctor was worried,
he said with a cough,
“This mechanical arm
has got to come off!”

The Doctor was EVIL,
he said with a scoff,
“This mechanical arm
has got to come off!”

His mother and father
Weren’t sure what to do
They panicked! They grabbed him,
and out the door flew!

“You won’t hurt out baby!
You won’t do him harm!”
So they rescued their
Boy with a mechanical arm.
Song Stats
Hits: 509
Comments: 24
Fans: 17
Plays: 44
Downloads: 6

Uploaded: Oct 19, 2017 - 07:20:51 PM
Last Updated: Oct 19, 2017 - 07:20:51 PM Last Played: Feb 14, 2018 - 06:51:33 AM
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Comments
Daugrin said 123 days ago (October 20th, 2017)
One-Five
Good to see you back in town.
Yer lyric is too bald :) you needed to give insight into what was going on...like mom stepping out with a strawberry picking machine, or artificial insemination via Dr. Octopus ala Marvel parody...
Thanks for posting your song here. The tonal percussion you wrote is wonderful, it supports the production perfectly by adding the creepy factor!

Daug
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five_extra_arms said 123 days ago (October 20th, 2017)
Bald
Hopefully the 10 remaining tunes fill in the blanks. I approached this in album form, so I want to spread it all out. We may never know "why" he was born with a mechanical arm, but hopefully we'll understand why he was born...

Thanks Daug Breath!
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smokey bacon jnr said 123 days ago (October 20th, 2017)
Steel pulse
Love that wub wub bassline. Great lyrics as ever. My only critique would be that there might be room for a diversion from the bass so that it comes back and you feel the power again. I was waiting for a sample of the Sab's Iron Man in there!!
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five_extra_arms said 123 days ago (October 20th, 2017)
Wub Wub
Thanks for the feedback on the bassline. I've been dropping it and putting it back in several times, uncertain as to it's effect (or is it affect?). I'd like to know what others think as well.

I still don't see a play button on my iMac using Safari. Hope that's not the case for everyone else.
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awigze said 123 days ago (October 20th, 2017)
diggin'
... the crazy simplicity here. The vocals are cool and quirky. My baby boy, mechanical or no would've been out that doc's door too. Evil Docs.
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five_extra_arms said 122 days ago (October 21st, 2017)
Evil Docs
Thanks for the listen. I'm trying to be simple on this body of songs, although there are some insane crazy programming moments from Smokey VW that will blow minds!!
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Vic Holman said 123 days ago (October 20th, 2017)
gripping concept
long missed the 5 extra sound. cool dual vocals Bob. the composition is very cool in a gary numan way. pretty much has a robotic style that reflects the lyrics... so it works for me. great to hear a new one from you.
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five_extra_arms said 122 days ago (October 21st, 2017)
Robotic Style
Thanks Vic - everyone knows you're the head robot here. Thanks for listening. (Do you ever play that killer robot guitar you designed?)
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egobandit said 123 days ago (October 20th, 2017)
got me in its grip
that pulsing bass and bell sounding synth is now stuck in my head thanks a lot :)
cool concept now I need to know what happens next

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five_extra_arms said 122 days ago (October 21st, 2017)
What Happens Next?
Thanks Tim - I flirted with a break on this track, but preferred the drone. Glad it stuck in your head. Happy belated birthday, by the way.
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bud said 123 days ago (October 20th, 2017)
Great as always
I love that icy lead line that comes in midway - reminds me of our arctic collab years back. Great that you're releasing these here - It was cool hearing them earlier in the year.
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five_extra_arms said 122 days ago (October 21st, 2017)
Icy Synth
You are so perceptive! Yes, indeed, this is the same icy lead I used on our Aurorarama tune! Thanks for the encouragement through the years.
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dimm witness said 123 days ago (October 21st, 2017)
Awesome!!
Cool
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five_extra_arms said 122 days ago (October 21st, 2017)
Dimm
You're cool!
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VicDiesel said 122 days ago (October 21st, 2017)
Grip
This is very creative. All the elements work together really well.

Eh, except that strings in the far left channel during the vocals. On headphones I find its position distracting. Less extreme panning?
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five_extra_arms said 122 days ago (October 21st, 2017)
Less Extreme
Hey thanks for the listen - I am now officially distracted by the panning as well. I just brought it closer to center and I think it's a definite, yet subtle improvement. I appreciate it!
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Hickling_Stan said 121 days ago (October 22nd, 2017)
Interesting
This has a real Gary Numan vibe and an engaging/menacing story. very different to what I was just listening to. Love the variety of MJ! cheers
Mark
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five_extra_arms said 121 days ago (October 22nd, 2017)
Variety
Thanks for the listen Mark. Currently I can't listen to any songs? I might have to try a different computer and browser. Yeah, MacJams has quite the variety. I've always loved that about this place!
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particledots said 121 days ago (October 22nd, 2017)
is this one of the five
extra arms?
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five_extra_arms said 121 days ago (October 22nd, 2017)
Is This?
It is!
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J_Gretch said 121 days ago (October 22nd, 2017)
Steel Grip
Such a cool piece ! Had me at the first two lines. Just assuming you created the artwork also? Much enjoyed, thanks for sharing.
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five_extra_arms said 121 days ago (October 22nd, 2017)
One Saturday Morning...
Thanks! This is one one of the drawings from the original book idea. As the songwriting efforts have modified the story, I'm doing the say with the drawings. Hope to figure this all out before too much longer.
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PeterB7858 said 121 days ago (October 23rd, 2017)
Steel Grip
Quirky but disarmingly addictive. Probably just around the corner, too, medical wise... If only he could use his mechanical arm for the good of mankind! :-) Nice one. Thanks.
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kingbee said 118 days ago (October 25th, 2017)
limb-o-land
I went backwards in order of the songs
still good and great lyrics
maybe a bit of room for percussion drums build up in certain sections
great stuff anyway
cheers
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